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Gungan to the left


Good Fortune (G)


By : Quiller

Archived on: Sunday, July 8, 2001

Summary:
Anakin and Amidala meet for the first time in ten years.

This fan fiction is in response to the "First Kiss" challenge.


Anakin sprinted between twin colonnades. His boots slapped against the marble terrace, the staccato cracks echoing ahead of him. He had to find her. Fast. He couldn't believe this. They hurried from the spaceport, straight to the throne room, to find Sab?, the queen's decoy, in royal costume, and the queen who knows where. With an assassin on the loose. Sab? had suggested checking the conservatory or the gardens, so Master Obi-Wan had said to split up.

The gardens flashed in the corner of his eye. Anakin swung left between two columns. A robot wheeled into his path. Anakin flipped through the air, landing in a crouch. He popped to his feet and did a quick double-take.

"Artoo? Is that you?" Anakin nodded tersely at the affirmative whistle, then jerked his head. "Anyone in the gardens?"

The astromech droid tooted its version of 'yes'. Anakin wheeled and bounded down the stairs, onto a graveled path. He stretched out with his senses as he ran, searching through the Force.

Deep within a maze of two-meter high hedgerows, Anakin halted. He could sense someone on the other side of the solid wall of greenery. Seizing the Force, he jumped up and over the obstacle, his Jedi cloak billowing around him. Amidala lurched up from the bench she'd been sitting on. Anakin's mouth dropped open. He snapped it shut and bowed.

"Your majesty," Anakin said. "You're in grave danger. I must ask you to come with me."

Silence greeted his statement. Anakin straightened to see a quizzical expression painting Amidala's features. His gaze was pulled to the smile playing over her lips. "Why is it, that every time a Jedi appears before me, it is to make just such a statement?"

Anakin stepped forward, his gaze scanning her achingly lovely face. He scowled and refocused his thoughts. "But it's true, your majesty. The governor asked us to investigate a series of threats you've ..."

"I told him that was nonsense. He never should have contacted you."

"But we've traced the threats to someone inside the palace. The last message said they'd strike on Theed's millennial anniversary. That's today. Please come with me."

Amidala looked away, her hand fluttering to her throat. She drew a leather thong from under her handmaiden robe and clasped it, her gaze distant. "I'll be fine, now that the Jedi are here to protect me."

Moving closer still,Anakin stared at her fingers as they worried whatever was attached to the thong. His breathing grew shallow. He reached out and gently took her hand, ignoring the little gasp. He uncurled her fingers and blinked back unwelcome moisture. She had kept it? The little japor snippet he'd carved for her all those years ago? He fingered the shell, its carvings almost erased from wear, and searched her puzzled gaze.

"You still have it," Anakin whispered.

"Still?" Amidala's reply was hushed. Her eyes grew round. "Ani? Li-little Ani?"

Anakin gave her a lop-sided smile.

"I always think of you as the little boy I knew," Amidala said. "You've grown up. You're so ..."

Her face flushed an enticing pink. Anakin's smile widened. "Ten years can do that, Padm?." He squeezed his eyes shut. "I'm sorry. I mean, your majesty."

Her small hands wrapped around his, enclosing the snippet in his palm. "Please. I'd prefer Padme, even Amidala. I can't stand the thought of such formality ... between us. I still think of you as a friend, Anakin, even though we haven't seen each other all these years."

Anakin looked into her eyes. He could drown in that gaze. Happily. She was so incredibly beautiful. More beautiful than an angel.

"Not really," Amidala said.

Startled, Anakin struggled not to flush. He hadn't meant to say that aloud. His gaze dropped to their entwined hands. Electricity spread out from her touch and skittered up his arm. He cupped his free hand over both of Amidala's and leaned toward her, brushing his fingertips over her knuckles. Gold flecks shot through her eyes.

"But it is true." Anakin's voice lowered. "Padme."

Anakin watched her moisten her lips. Amidala tried to tug her hands free, then stilled. Her voice was barely audible. "You are far too bold."

"You only say that because you're surrounded by fawning, insufferably nice men." Anakin captured her gaze. His face drifted closer to hers, like a ship caught in a star's gravity field.

"I happen to like nice men."

"I'm a nice man."

Their noses glanced softly.

"No, you're not. You ..."

Their lips touched. Amidala's breath caught. Anakin's hand snaked up and caressed the back of her neck as his lips became firmer, searching for a response. Her lips softened. She released his hand, pressing her palms to his chest, searing him. One hand skimmed upwards, finding his Padawan braid and twisting it around her fingers. Anakin groaned and pulled her against him.

A tapping on his shoulder made Anakin freeze. He pulled back from the kiss, taking in Amidala's surprised, vulnerable expression. He pivoted to face his protocol droid. Annoyance welled up within him.

"Master Anakin," Threepio intoned. "I'm so glad I found you. R2-D2 told me where you'd gone. I've informed Master Obi-Wan that you found the queen. Shall I inform him that you'll be returning her to the palace?"

Anakin glared at the droid. He'd built the thing for his mother; why hadn't she kept it? "Threepio ... go breathe vacuum."

"But, Master Anakin. I don't breathe ..."

"Leave." Anakin stood, arm extended, until the sputtering droid shuffled away. He observed Amidala's amusement. The shell around his heart softened. "It brought me good fortune."

"The droid?"

"The japor snippet. It brought me back to you."

Her eyes grew moist. "Oh, Ani ..."

A glint. Anakin wheeled, lightsaber sizzling, and deflected two laser bolts from a high tower. He pulled Amidala into a crouch.

Anakin squeezed her hand. "Let's get you somewhere safe."

Amidala whispered, "I am safe. I'm with you."




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Author: tess
Date posted: 7/9/2001 10:43:22 PM
tess's Comments:

i like the story, very romantic, but not long enough. Just make it a little longer and this will make an awesome piece of work. It shows the lovable side of anakin.

Author: Rae Poet
Date posted: 7/11/2001 9:17:17 AM
Rae Poet's Comments:

I like this story, it's romantic and cute. I like the way you made Padme and Anakin speak the same dialogue that Leia and Had spoke in ESB, and how C-3PO intruded in their kiss. A classic moment, I'll say.

Author: Amidala_Skywalker
Date posted: 7/13/2001 1:53:49 AM
Amidala_Skywalker's Comments:

Lovely work.....full of romance.

Author: Chocos_Ramabotti  (signed)
Date posted: 7/21/2001 3:55:32 PM
Chocos_Ramabotti's Comments:

Sweet and "mushy". The little ESB-dialoge and 3PO's interruption were good.

Author: Mara Jade00
Date posted: 7/24/2001 11:07:08 AM
Mara Jade00's Comments:

Very cute story, I loved their meeting and first kiss. I think it has the potential to be a longer story, but I think the way it is is just enough to give the reader a feel of their romance. = )

Author: Quiller
Date posted: 7/24/2001 12:55:32 PM
Quiller's Comments:

The story was originally written as a response to the writing challenge here on TFN, hence the length and some of the story elements. I hope that someday time and inspiration will overlap and I will be able to expand the story.

Author: Princess_LaLa
Date posted: 7/24/2001 2:49:24 PM
Princess_LaLa's Comments:

I really don't have anything to say diferent than everybody else.
Loved it. It was cute. Should have been longer. The ESB reference was pretty cool.
You get the picture.

Author: Mcily Nochi
Date posted: 7/25/2001 8:25:29 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

Awww . . . Cute!

Author: Javu Korint
Date posted: 7/26/2001 8:53:54 AM
Javu Korint's Comments:

A very good use of the challenge posted on the web site.

Author: The Great Yoda
Date posted: 7/26/2001 10:45:45 PM
The Great Yoda's Comments:

When 900 years old you be write romance this good you sill will.

Author: Jeff 42  (signed)
Date posted: 7/28/2001 5:22:07 PM
Jeff 42's Comments:

For a response to the challenge, it is just about perfect.

Author: Sreya
Date posted: 7/31/2001 9:14:04 AM
Sreya's Comments:

That was very sweet, and could definitely see the challenge elements in there! I liked the time that it took for Amidala to recognize Anakin -- gave it that bit of awkwardness they needed.

Author: Padawon So-Ver-Leet
Date posted: 8/17/2001 2:59:56 PM
Padawon So-Ver-Leet's Comments:

Good story. I also enjoyed the ESB comieo. If you were to write a longer story to go along with this one, I would read it religiously.

Author: Ladybug  (signed)
Date posted: 8/21/2001 7:03:27 PM
Ladybug's Comments:

"Insufferably nice men" - that was beautiful!
I loved this story. great work!

Author: ruffem
Date posted: 8/23/2001 8:43:54 AM
ruffem's Comments:

you try to hard

Author: Quiller  (signed)
Date posted: 8/28/2001 10:11:16 PM
Quiller's Comments:

Hi ruffem,
In the words of Han Solo, I can only say,"Yes, I do. I really do."

Author: Ames
Date posted: 8/30/2001 8:46:58 PM
Ames's Comments:

Ahh! This was very good!! You had me laughing out loud at the ESB reference! :) I liked their meeting. It'd be nice if Lucas actuallly made Anakin and Padme meet like that. Except for the fast kiss, 'cause that's just not fair! :)

Author: Johnjay
Date posted: 10/20/2001 3:37:10 PM
Johnjay's Comments:

Aww... that's so sweet... uh, short, spontanious and diffuccult to make sense of without knowing the backstory, but very sweet nonetheless.

Author: Qwi_Xux
Date posted: 11/10/2001 11:04:05 PM
Qwi_Xux's Comments:

Awwww...that was so sweet!

Author: Madison
Date posted: 5/22/2002 5:06:52 PM
Madison's Comments:

I love this story, but i think it needs to be longer. It'll make a wonderful piece.

Author: kk
Date posted: 6/17/2002 3:33:46 PM
kk's Comments:

This is a great story. good romance. i wish it was longer though.

Author: Chinook Z
Date posted: 6/24/2002 12:57:17 PM
Chinook Z's Comments:

It's a cute story; although it could stand to be longer and include more developing details. =]
Is it a re-writing of their first meeting, instead of whats in Ep. II or somat? o-O;; *Is confused. Ah well*

Author: Skysong
Date posted: 6/27/2002 4:20:30 PM
Skysong's Comments:

AHHHHHHHHH! So sweet! So romantic, i wish it was longer!!!!! Add on to it or something, i dont care what! OMG, i'm such a sap, but nice story, i loved it!

Author: Count Dooku
Date posted: 7/3/2002 4:53:28 PM
Count Dooku's Comments:

Please make it longer !!!

Author: Yodiss
Date posted: 7/8/2002 3:00:23 PM
Yodiss's Comments:

Awwwwww, it's cute! but what about the danger Amidala was in?

Author: Anjelica
Date posted: 7/29/2002 1:02:50 AM
Anjelica's Comments:

I love the story....It was brilliant, but if it could be just a little longer...... than it would be fantastic.

Author: vader-incarnate  (signed)
Date posted: 8/2/2002 4:15:30 AM
vader-incarnate's Comments:

How do you do it?? How do you freaking do it?? You write Ani/Ami stories with the same depth, the same proficiency that you can write Obi/Ami ones. Gosh darn it... I'll just go over here and feel insecure now....

Author: Angel of the X-Wings
Date posted: 9/2/2002 8:08:58 AM
Angel of the X-Wings's Comments:

oh now that was just too cute!!!!!!!! I loved the ending!!!!!!

Author: Barissa
Date posted: 10/11/2002 7:01:11 PM
Barissa's Comments:

Needs more length, other wise could be very cool.

Author: Rogue Dom
Date posted: 10/22/2002 1:55:57 AM
Rogue Dom's Comments:

I was really impressed with the intone this short took, but what really made it emjoyable for me was the intertwining of story lines between Ani & Amidala and Han & Leia. Nice work. Hope to see more in the future.

Author: mmmm...burgers145
Date posted: 7/28/2003 7:15:43 AM
mmmm...burgers145's Comments:

make it longer......longer, LONGER!!!!!
but i thought it was SO sweet how ou took the ESB lines and put them in it
SWEET! very sweet!

Author: carmenskywalker
Date posted: 11/20/2003 3:49:17 PM
carmenskywalker's Comments:

vary nice storie really got in2 it. just need to write another one 2 tell what happend next!


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