Author: obaona  (signed)
Date posted: 11/10/2003 8:39:47 PM
obaona's Comments:

Huge thanks and hugs to my betas. :)

Author: Jedi-2B  (signed)
Date posted: 11/11/2003 5:44:30 AM
Jedi-2B's Comments:

Yet another example of your incredible writing talent, oba. So poignant and touching.

Author: Andrea Jade  (signed)
Date posted: 11/11/2003 7:13:36 AM
Andrea Jade's Comments:

Wow. You've captured very real emotions.

Author: Jedi Knight Quia Lor
Date posted: 11/11/2003 1:45:35 PM
Jedi Knight Quia Lor's Comments:

Oh, obanoa, you give me chills!

This sounds very much like Padme and what she might think of Anakin (well, Vader now, actually) in Episode III. I can't blame her for hating him! He was so cruel to leave her for power. I like how you keep the story short but say all you need to say. This is amazing!
May the Force be with you.
Jedi Knight Quia Lor
P.S. You are amazing, such compliments are VERY easy to make! :)

Author: Jedi'sRule
Date posted: 11/11/2003 3:52:49 PM
Jedi'sRule's Comments:

I have read alot of the Fan Fiction's you have wrote. i love all of them! Very good job!!!

Author: Nade_Naberrie  (signed)
Date posted: 11/12/2003 11:55:40 AM
Nade_Naberrie's Comments:

Oh, oba...

This is... *stumbles for words* Breathtaking? Haunting? Perfect? All of the above? You are the queen of Padme vignettes. You always manage to capture her soul and put it into words. I cannot express to you how much I respect you for that. PLEASE keep them coming!

P.S. Obi-Wan's description was perfect also. ;)

Author: LianaMara  (signed)
Date posted: 11/12/2003 5:53:28 PM
LianaMara's Comments:

Beautiful job, oba. You showed Padme's anger and feelings of betrayal so very well. A beautiful piece. But then, you knew that. ;) Perfection, my dear mummy!

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 11/13/2003 7:52:14 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Wow...I wasn't sure what to think until the end...you had me on the edge of my seat, wondering what Padmé would conclude with. What else could it be but the one, no, two things that Anakin gave her?

The twinsies are coming!

Author: Jedi Master Garion
Date posted: 11/14/2003 9:46:49 AM
Jedi Master Garion's Comments:

Wonderful story. Really speaks to the rage that Padme must have felt. Thanks

Author: bubbleyicious
Date posted: 11/14/2003 2:42:09 PM
bubbleyicious's Comments:

Redundant. We all know Padme feels this way. It seemed a little choppy and then Obi-Wan appeared out of nowhere. A good effort.

Author: Sonic
Date posted: 11/14/2003 5:33:05 PM
Sonic's Comments:

awesome that was so cool.i like it.

Author: Chris Pence
Date posted: 11/14/2003 6:23:26 PM
Chris Pence's Comments:

Good. To dramatic for Star Wars. The thingie about Obi Wan wiping her tears is kinda TO dramatic.

Author: David
Date posted: 11/14/2003 7:48:20 PM
David's Comments:

Very well written. Shakespearean no doubt.
It's very easy to visualize this as an opening narrative-monolougue to the actual film; what is to come.

Author: Lady Vader
Date posted: 11/14/2003 8:04:36 PM
Lady Vader's Comments:

Are you Absolutly SURE you arent Natalie Portman or who ever it is that writes her parts. All of yours sound so much like there coming out of an actual Star Wars book. Maybe you could get a job writing for them.

Keep em coming, I love them
J

Author: Jaina Solo
Date posted: 11/15/2003 11:26:04 AM
Jaina Solo's Comments:

Totally awesome!
Am I the only one who's getting worried about ep3? Where is it? Thanks for satisfying my hunger for now.

Author: Darth Me
Date posted: 11/15/2003 5:33:57 PM
Darth Me's Comments:

Wow...waaaaay too drawn out and over dramatic.
It's written well, but very much overly dramatic and long strung. C-

Author: Greenleaf from LakeRetreat
Date posted: 11/16/2003 3:24:32 AM
Greenleaf from LakeRetreat's Comments:

Moving and frightening. Thanks!

Author: 1
Date posted: 11/16/2003 1:05:14 PM
1's Comments:

well done it was a veary powerful piece, also buetiful.

Author: eowyngreenleaf
Date posted: 11/17/2003 7:52:09 AM
eowyngreenleaf's Comments:

Once again, you leave us stunned by your immense talent. Never give it up.

Author: Jedi_Mastre_Kris
Date posted: 11/17/2003 2:43:43 PM
Jedi_Mastre_Kris's Comments:

Oba! Another viggie-- excellent! You had me really wondering what Padmé was gonna do at the end. Plus, I thought it wasn't too dramatic ;) It suits the Ep II - III ish feeling, and I really admire your writing style. Splendiferous vig, I enjoyed it immensely!

~Kris :D

Author: amydala
Date posted: 11/17/2003 2:46:21 PM
amydala's Comments:

OH MY GOD!!!!! THAT WAS EXCELLENT!!! I LOVE ALL YOUR STORIES.

Author: Hazardmagnet
Date posted: 11/17/2003 3:24:56 PM
Hazardmagnet's Comments:

You clearly have an ability to write but i find your style simple, subjective, and almost peurile.
Also (and I realize i should read some more of your work) I think you have little real empathy with Padme'. We've seen the myriad events that have shaped her life in over ten years and how she reacts to problems and hardship. I think she would never react this way even in the face of overwhelming heartache. Anger? yes. Sobs? definately. Perseverance? most certainly, but overwrought hatred and condemnation? never.
This letter-style is flavored with a late twentieth century-new millenial victimization diatribe and is amateurish and far from matured in both the writing style and words chosen. It is frought with faux-romantism and has the feelings an adolescent's break-up of a high school infatuation only bordering on the truth of real love.
With the knowledge we have of Padme's character (not character in the sense of one acted but that which makes us who we are)I have to imagine she'd be forgiving and even pitying of Anakin but strong enough to know she must continue without him. Must.
And Shakespearian? Not at all. Maybe Judy Bloomian.
Please understand that this is not a flame but a critique. It sounds like to many 16 yr old girls I've met who prattle on about how sorrowful and pathetic their own lives are without realizing they have to let go. Padme' would most certainly have a state of mind above this. She knows herself better than this. She embodies the Shakespearean that you have failed to grasp.

Author: Marbe
Date posted: 11/17/2003 8:16:00 PM
Marbe's Comments:

I agree. While your work is no doubt entertaining (I've read much of it with great interest) Padme's reaction is strikingly similar to that of an immature, melodramatic, heartbroken teenager.

I also find it quite unlikely that either Obi-Wan or Bail would lock her up in a small room.

However, you made an excellent effort and I commend you for that. Keep working - I think you could get better. :)

Author: Daughter_of_Yubyub  (signed)
Date posted: 11/18/2003 12:11:17 PM
Daughter_of_Yubyub's Comments:

Well I for one greatly enjoyed it.

I found it a very believable reaction from Padmé. She is human after all, and therefore subject to the FULL range of human emotions, including anger.

I'm amazed that someone your age can pull off a piece like this. You're a very talented writer, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.

Author: Master Rowena
Date posted: 11/20/2003 6:09:12 PM
Master Rowena's Comments:

Wow....I am soooo majorly impressed. (And VERY little writing provokes me to the point of using slang.) I can't believe how go that is!! Keep writing, is all I have to say. I hope that in my publishing/editor career I get a chance to wrk with someone that has as perfect a grasp on the human psyche as you do.

kudos!

Author: Jedi_Alea
Date posted: 11/22/2003 6:47:33 AM
Jedi_Alea's Comments:

Obaona, I have loved all of the fan fics by you that I have had the pleasure of reading. Your dedication to the expression of the characters' human emotions has always impressed me. Do not ever underestimate that there is talent in your writing, despite what hard critiques may come. Take others words for what they are--words--and your talents and skills will grow with the experience that you continue to gain. Thank you for sharing such wonderful insights into these characters through your writing!

Author: Lady Padme  (signed)
Date posted: 11/22/2003 9:20:57 PM
Lady Padme's Comments:

I find I disagree with the comments posted by Hazardmagnet and Marbe. While this portrayal of Padme in Thief would certainly be very different from the Padme we have seen in TPM and AotC, the circumstances she is confronting at this time are also very different from those seen in the movies. While Padme and her peoples' lives were in jeopardy in the movies, she had never felt personal heartbreak or betrayal at those times. Why is it that you feel only teenages react irrationally to pain and heartbreak? Anyone, even a strong person can having a breaking point--even to the point where she could be a temporary danger to herself or others (hence being temporarily locked up for safety reasons) And in any case, Padme's thoughts in Thief are just that. They're her thoughts. They're her true inner feelings toward Anakin. Even the nicest people are allowed uncharitable and sometimes terrible thoughts. That doesn't make the person suddenly terrible or out of character so long as she doesn't wantonly or reasonlessly act out her hatred. In this scenario, Padme may have started to act on some of her feelings, but I'm sure most people would agree she had some justification in her actions under such extreme duress. I find it so much more humanizing that Padme would have such horrible thoughts toward him--and I believe that a greater love would also feed into a greater hatred and sense of betrayal and fury. Personally, I found the story painful and disturbing and poignant, but that was the due to oba's writing skill in being able to wrench out such emotions.

This story is in no way like Judy Blume...and why would anyone even think to bring up that author unless they'd been reading some of her works lately?

oba, wonderful job on this story. I enjoyed it and thought you brought out Padme beautifully in her humanity and gave her character much more dimension than she has been allowed to this point. Brava! * sends cyber chocolate *

Author: Lady Padme  (signed)
Date posted: 11/22/2003 9:21:03 PM
Lady Padme's Comments:

I find I disagree with the comments posted by Hazardmagnet and Marbe. While this portrayal of Padme in Thief would certainly be very different from the Padme we have seen in TPM and AotC, the circumstances she is confronting at this time are also very different from those seen in the movies. While Padme and her peoples' lives were in jeopardy in the movies, she had never felt personal heartbreak or betrayal at those times. Why is it that you feel only teenages react irrationally to pain and heartbreak? Anyone, even a strong person can having a breaking point--even to the point where she could be a temporary danger to herself or others (hence being temporarily locked up for safety reasons) And in any case, Padme's thoughts in Thief are just that. They're her thoughts. They're her true inner feelings toward Anakin. Even the nicest people are allowed uncharitable and sometimes terrible thoughts. That doesn't make the person suddenly terrible or out of character so long as she doesn't wantonly or reasonlessly act out her hatred. In this scenario, Padme may have started to act on some of her feelings, but I'm sure most people would agree she had some justification in her actions under such extreme duress. I find it so much more humanizing that Padme would have such horrible thoughts toward him--and I believe that a greater love would also feed into a greater hatred and sense of betrayal and fury. Personally, I found the story painful and disturbing and poignant, but that was the due to oba's writing skill in being able to wrench out such emotions.

This story is in no way like Judy Blume...and why would anyone even think to bring up that author unless they'd been reading some of her works lately?

oba, wonderful job on this story. I enjoyed it and thought you brought out Padme beautifully in her humanity and gave her character much more dimension than she has been allowed to this point. Brava! * sends cyber chocolate *

Author: JediPug1  (signed)
Date posted: 11/24/2003 7:33:02 PM
JediPug1's Comments:

Wow! That was amazing and the feelings were so raw. Great job!

Author: puppyglo  (signed)
Date posted: 11/30/2003 8:43:47 PM
puppyglo's Comments:

Wow. That was amazing! You could almost feel her anger! This was incredibly written!

Author: LianaMara  (signed)
Date posted: 12/5/2003 4:58:49 PM
LianaMara's Comments:

By the way, oba dear, I forgot to say how much I love your cover art for this! It's very pretty, very Japanese-looking. And I like your selection of Padmé pics. They really coincide with the piece. *huggies* :)

Author: Ani-maniac
Date posted: 11/11/2004 4:13:04 PM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

As my name suggests,(Ani-maniac) I am a very big fan of Anakin/Darth Vader. I think he is a very complicated character. It is clear from the risks that Anakin took, that he loved Padme' very much. So I have always wondered why after he turned, that he never came looking for her. With all of the resources the Empire had surely he wouldn't of had to look very hard to find her on Alderaan. Your story did an excellent job of explaining that. It also explains why Luke and Leia never looked for their relatives on Padme's side. I really enjoyed it. Keep writing such wonderful and interesting stories!

Author: Smuggler_Shidakis  (signed)
Date posted: 4/22/2005 10:21:18 AM
Smuggler_Shidakis's Comments:

Wow. Amazing, obaona. You captured Padme's emotions perfectly. All of her anger, hatred, and grief was evident in every word and a very believable reaction to Anakin's betrayal. Simply put, an awesome piece of work.

Author: Dark Empress
Date posted: 5/22/2005 7:23:31 PM
Dark Empress's Comments:

Very daring write. Not one of my favorites, but I commend the author for such a strong write. It's not very realistic considering the Padme's image and thoughts, but interesting. Not very many authors would write such a bold story that could be attacked by others, but this author took that chance... Very rare, good job.

Author: Rhaya  (signed)
Date posted: 6/2/2005 6:35:31 PM
Rhaya's Comments:

The only thing I don't understand (and please don't take this as a criticism, it is merely a question..) is why she has been LOCKED in a room for hours?