Author: Denali
Date posted: 2/2/2004 7:11:24 PM
Denali's Comments:

Wow! Great story!

The Obi-Wan/Anikan relationship in Ep II surprised me at first...how Anikan could be raging about Obi-Wan holding him back one moment, and then saying that he was like a father the next. And Obi-Wan seemed perpetually frustrated with him...

...you've captured that perfectly here. I love the idea of Anikan's Force accidents, it makes sense for one so powerful!

Now, I'm going to read your other fics :)

Author: geo3
Date posted: 2/2/2004 8:08:15 PM
geo3's Comments:

I can't believe I haven't read this story before - I relentlessly track down and read all of your wonderful windows into the minds and hearts of these characters...

As with all of your keenly observed and finely detailed work, this story is remarkable for its subtlety and insight. It is such a small incident, and yet in your hands it gives so much insight into the character and thought process (or in Anakin's case, I guess you could say feeling-process) of each individual. As always, you show me things about these people I never realized before; but once understood, I can only say, "of course! That is exactly how things are."

Bravo. Beautiful work.

Author: leia__naberrie  (signed)
Date posted: 2/3/2004 1:20:26 AM
leia__naberrie's Comments:

Author's comments:

Thanks Denali and geo3! (geo - you have read this before, it just got revamped a lot!)

A big thank you to my betas obaona and DarthBreezy. They take chief credit for revamping this story. Hugs and kisses to everyone who read this story on the JC Board and liked it enough to review. You guys encouraged me in the first place to try and archive it. And of course, thanks Mark Jade for the Cover Art.

Author: MutantJediBouer
Date posted: 2/3/2004 7:14:19 PM
MutantJediBouer's Comments:

Nice story. I like the Obi-Wan/Anakin relationship, it's shown superbly here. The accident in the elevator and Obi-Wan's cool composure were definatly perfect. I can see almost everything in this story actually happening. Anyway I can't wait to see more from an obviously Force-inspired writer.

MTFBWY
MutantJediBouer
aka. Zax-Ryn Kenobi

Author: Greenleaf from LakeRetreat
Date posted: 2/5/2004 1:22:21 AM
Greenleaf from LakeRetreat's Comments:

Very Interesting! Very good introspection

Author: Mark Jade
Date posted: 2/5/2004 8:00:04 PM
Mark Jade's Comments:

Liea... very good job... I enjoyed it.

Mark

ps... It was my pleasure to create the cover for a fine story

Author: R7-F6
Date posted: 2/6/2004 8:14:32 AM
R7-F6's Comments:

I really enjoyed how the story showed the relationship between Obi-Wan and Anikin. Thing is, although Anikin say's Obi-Wan is like a father to him, their relationship seems like like that of brothers-not just in age-Obi-Wan can't be more than sixteen years older than Anikin-but the way Anikin ofton defies and questions him. More the way he would respond to an older brother, who is never quite the authority figure to a boy the way a father is. And Obi-Wan undoubtably feels like a young man who has to raise a much younger sibling after losing a father(Qui-Gon Jinn).

Author: jedi_michele
Date posted: 2/6/2004 8:49:14 AM
jedi_michele's Comments:

ur story was excellent. ur writing was particularly good with portraying ob-wan and anakin's relationship. "my padawan attacked me." that just seems so likeable.. like and a missing scene. congrats and keep on writing. this just makes me all sad... the relationship between gets ruined.. anakin turns over... padme dies... sigh... may the force be with u.

Author: Fubuki
Date posted: 2/6/2004 11:30:29 AM
Fubuki's Comments:

"Not To Be Trusted" embodies everything that makes good fanfiction. It puts a new, intriguing, and yet completely logical twist on a story with which we are all so familiar. Aside from making for an enjoyable read, the subject matter is such that we are able to look past the story's immediate context and consider the implications of the same line of thinking being applied to other situations. In other words, "Not To Be Trusted" opens the door for further exploration into previously unseen subtleties of countless other story threads in the Star Wars mythos.

As far as specifics are concerned, I very much enjoyed the description in the beginning of how important it is for politicians to maintain an impermeable facade. I was also impressed by the masterful way you so vividly portrayed the ambiguities of emotion.

Overall Leia, fantastic job. I might just have to check out the rest of your writings...

-Fubuki

Author: Fubuki
Date posted: 2/6/2004 11:30:35 AM
Fubuki's Comments:

"Not To Be Trusted" embodies everything that makes good fanfiction. It puts a new, intriguing, and yet completely logical twist on a story with which we are all so familiar. Aside from making for an enjoyable read, the subject matter is such that we are able to look past the story's immediate context and consider the implications of the same line of thinking being applied to other situations. In other words, "Not To Be Trusted" opens the door for further exploration into previously unseen subtleties of countless other story threads in the Star Wars mythos.

As far as specifics are concerned, I very much enjoyed the description in the beginning of how important it is for politicians to maintain an impermeable facade. I was also impressed by the masterful way you so vividly portrayed the ambiguities of emotion.

Overall Leia, fantastic job. I might just have to check out the rest of your writings...

-Fubuki

Author: Fubuki
Date posted: 2/6/2004 11:30:37 AM
Fubuki's Comments:

"Not To Be Trusted" embodies everything that makes good fanfiction. It puts a new, intriguing, and yet completely logical twist on a story with which we are all so familiar. Aside from making for an enjoyable read, the subject matter is such that we are able to look past the story's immediate context and consider the implications of the same line of thinking being applied to other situations. In other words, "Not To Be Trusted" opens the door for further exploration into previously unseen subtleties of countless other story threads in the Star Wars mythos.

As far as specifics are concerned, I very much enjoyed the description in the beginning of how important it is for politicians to maintain an impermeable facade. I was also impressed by the masterful way you so vividly portrayed the ambiguities of emotion.

Overall Leia, fantastic job. I might just have to check out the rest of your writings...

-Fubuki

Author: The Stormtrooper Shrink
Date posted: 2/6/2004 4:19:11 PM
The Stormtrooper Shrink's Comments:

Particularly touching because everything this missing scene entails is going to crash and burn. It was a good idea to do this scene, I've often wondered when Obi-Wan got stuck into Anakin about Padme.

Author: Court of Argabuthon
Date posted: 3/3/2004 7:48:12 PM
Court of Argabuthon's Comments:

Great story! I like how Obi-Wan sounded so smug at the end... well, he won't be so high and mighty after the Council, hmmm? Well, let's see. I think coconuts are Obi-Wans!

Author: JediSara_Kenobi  (signed)
Date posted: 4/20/2004 7:34:34 PM
JediSara_Kenobi's Comments:

Oh, this was just easily one of the best one-shots that I've read in a very-long-time. Your characters were perfectly written, the flow of the story was easy to follow, and that made it, in all, a true delight, to read. I'm going to make sure that I check out some more of your work, very soon.

PS: I loved that Anakin stood up to Obi-Wan with the Force, even if it had been by accident. I think that spoke volumes to Obi-Wan, much more deeply than any words, ever could.

Author: Jedi Knight 72583
Date posted: 9/28/2004 4:24:07 PM
Jedi Knight 72583's Comments:

I really like this story. I always wondered what may have happened before Anikan and Obi-wan went back to the Jedi Temple. Keep up the good work.

Author: Ekaterina
Date posted: 5/13/2009 3:09:45 PM
Ekaterina's Comments:

I don't like it. I don't think that Anakin would have attacked his Master, no matter what the circumstances. And Anakin only becomes dangerous because Obi Wan and the rest of the Jedi never accepted, loved or trusted him unconditionally, while Palpatine seemed to be able to give him that. If at 9 years old Anakin could restrain himself before the Jedi council, and in Tattooine against the evil slave traders, it's illogical that he wouldn't be able to do so 10 years later, just over a simple argument.
I guess the writing style is OK, but the content is absurd.