Author: Andrea Jade  (signed)
Date posted: 3/2/2004 6:53:36 AM
Andrea Jade's Comments:

A different point of view that's just fantastic.

Author: VaderLVR64
Date posted: 3/2/2004 8:18:34 AM
VaderLVR64's Comments:

This was amazing! I really liked the insights this person has about the events surrounding Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, and Anakin. Very believable! Great job.

Author: Thuku
Date posted: 3/2/2004 6:14:08 PM
Thuku's Comments:

Good work! I like the Twain-esqe echo of the vernacular. Keep experimenting around with characters like this--I think it's good for the fanfic archive to see some variety.

Author: obi_ew
Date posted: 3/2/2004 6:17:45 PM
obi_ew's Comments:

Wonderful piece Shaindl! I'm so glad more people will get a chance to read it.

Author: JadeSolo
Date posted: 3/2/2004 8:40:17 PM
JadeSolo's Comments:

Shaindl! Loved this story the first time I read it, love it even more now :)

Author: The Demon Clown
Date posted: 3/2/2004 9:55:16 PM
The Demon Clown's Comments:

ok, i don't know if it's just the way it's written or what, but is this story being told from Dexter Jettster's point of view? that's what it seems like. nice story, though - i liked it.

Author: Anakin Starkiller  (signed)
Date posted: 3/2/2004 11:13:40 PM
Anakin Starkiller's Comments:

Fanatastic piece. I really felt this character was a real guy in a real place, just doing his thing and looking back at someone famouse that he has brushed up against from time to time.

It took a while before I realized he was the GFFA equivalent of a pan-handler. Something that I would never think to exist there, but I guess if its in the real world, somewhere in the GFFA there is an equivalent.

I especially liked the sentiment at the end "until the day the Temple or me is gone", when we know that the time he sees as never approaching is actually at hand.

I gave it a 10.

Author: Darth Handsome
Date posted: 3/3/2004 12:48:25 AM
Darth Handsome's Comments:

I first looked at this, saying to myself, "Do I really want to read this?". Very quickly did I get pulled into it. I can't believe how much talent this person has who wrote this thing. Seriously, it was a joy to read and I would give this author the task of writing a full-blown fantasy story any day of the week. Totally neat. Good job, and thanks for putting this story up!

Author: dianethx
Date posted: 3/3/2004 4:33:55 AM
dianethx's Comments:

Shaindl, I'm so happy that others will get to see this wonderful vignette. Loved it the first time I read it and the second and the third. You are one talented lady!!!

Great job.

Author: solojones
Date posted: 3/3/2004 6:01:20 AM
solojones's Comments:

Great job being original! We see a lot of similar stories in SW FanFiction and it's always nice to see something new, like exploring a different perspective. The nice thing about the GFFA is that it's big enough to encompass every imaginable kind of person, and I'm glad you picked up on that and put in that different perspective. Nice work.

Author: Rido Jod  (signed)
Date posted: 3/3/2004 11:30:17 AM
Rido Jod's Comments:

I really enjoyed this piece, found it original and exceptionally well written. Not many Star Wars tales actually make you look at the world around you in a different way but this one did.

Author: Layren
Date posted: 3/3/2004 4:09:48 PM
Layren's Comments:

Shaindl,
This was absolutely amazing. Truly a unique piece of work. I never thought about the crowd on the street really when Obi-Wan gets home. Very very well done.

Author: Jauhzmynn
Date posted: 3/3/2004 9:17:39 PM
Jauhzmynn's Comments:

Very cool peice of writting. It pulled me into this person's shoes so I could see and understand for his point fo view. Excellant writting. Ilearned a LOT from reading it.

Author: kevin Elam
Date posted: 3/5/2004 10:38:21 AM
kevin Elam's Comments:

the point of vuew is refreshing not like any thaing i have read before i gave it a10. i liked it

Author: Ashes
Date posted: 3/6/2004 1:21:23 PM
Ashes's Comments:

How did I miss this the first time?

Wonderful Shaindl!

Author: Siri_Ruane  (signed)
Date posted: 3/7/2004 5:54:22 PM
Siri_Ruane's Comments:

Dude, this is great. Very original, and really leaves you wondering. Among one of the best I've read in a while.

"considerin' they's government dogs and all."

Great line, my friend. Great line. :D

Author: Shaindl  (signed)
Date posted: 3/8/2004 9:40:15 AM
Shaindl's Comments:

Just wanted to respond to all you nice people. :)

Andrea – I was really trying to go outside the norm when I wrote this. I’m glad you liked it!

VaderLVR64 – I really wanted to show that someone on the streets could have something in common with a person as exalted as a Jedi. I suspect that to stay alive in such an environment, you’d have to have some pretty serious street smarts including how to read people. Thanks for reading!

Thuku – wow, it’s not every day one sees themselves compared to Twain! J It was a big experiment for me to see if I could keep that voice consistent all the way through. I’m glad it worked for you!

OE – you’re the best, sweetie. Thanks again for taking a look.

Jade – you’re too nice. I’m glad you liked it!

Demon Clown – nope, not Dex. Just some person standing outside on the street watching things go down. Thanks for dropping by!

Anakin Starkiller – first, love your name! J Second, thanks for such an in-depth review. I’m glad you saw the narrator for what he was – just some person on a corner who saw something big happen in front of him. The only reason they saw it is because that day they happened to be there. As for the ending, I wonder how the narrator would see the destruction of the Temple? Hmm, sequel? :D Probably not, but the idea’s interesting.

Darth Handsome – wow, how do I respond to that? I’m very glad you stopped in to read it. Thank you so much for all your comments – the ones about talent and that you would read a book by me mean so much. That kind of encouragement means the world to somebody who creates, no matter the medium. I’m so glad that you enjoyed my story. J

Diane – oh, Diane, how do I thank you? You’re always such a great support. Thanks so much for serving as a beta for me. But just so we’re clear, you’re way more talented than me. J

solojones – I’m glad I succeeded in being original! Thanks for taking the time to respond!

Rido Jod – you made one of my favourite comments – if I can ever make someone think differently about the world around them, it’s an incredible compliment. Mind you, the “exceptionally well written” didn’t hurt either. :p Thanks for reading and responding!

Layren – thanks so much! I wanted to present a different side to TPM – can’t you just imagine Palpatine doing whatever he can to take advantage of the situation? Thanks for reading!

Jauhzmynn – my other favourite comment! I’m glad you were able to learn something from my writing. May I ask what in particular you learned?

Kevin Elam – I’m glad you liked it and that you thought it was different!

Birdy – I don’t know how you missed it! It was in the challenge thread. I’m glad you found it here, though. J

Siri Ruane – thanks so much. I like that line too. I always figured that a lot of the regular people in the galaxy would see the Jedi as just another instrument of the government. Thanks for reading!

Thanks to all of you who took the time to respond. We writers really appreciate the feedback!

Cheers,

Shaindl

Author: Valiowk  (signed)
Date posted: 3/27/2004 8:39:50 AM
Valiowk's Comments:

The story sunk in far deeper than I expected it to. I had expected a description of Jedi life; what I was treated to was so much more than just that. In this vignette I could understand how it is possible to form bonds with people whom on the surface it seems we don't know, and are not fated to be friends with.

Some people leave footsteps on our hearts, and our lives are never ever the same again. And I could see why.

Author: BRKyle
Date posted: 3/31/2004 3:41:31 PM
BRKyle's Comments:

Definitely a picture from life's other side -- for both. Well written, it lives and breathes. Congratulations for something out of the ordinary.

Author: LuvEwan
Date posted: 4/8/2004 3:11:51 PM
LuvEwan's Comments:

Great job, of course. You slip flawlessly into the character. Just perfect!

Author: Nemesis  (signed)
Date posted: 4/16/2004 7:02:49 AM
Nemesis's Comments:

Very, very unusual and accomplished vignette. :) Interesting (and I imagine difficult to write) viewpoint to pick and could so easily have been dire, but you made a really, really good job of it. :D

Great work!

Nem :D

Author: flashbacca
Date posted: 6/29/2004 8:44:53 PM
flashbacca's Comments:

Awesome job Shaindl ! I really enjoyed your perspective on this. Very original and very well done!

~ The Wookiee

Author: Durhelediel
Date posted: 7/9/2004 4:23:29 PM
Durhelediel's Comments:

Simply fantastic! There really are no other words for it. WONDERFULLY done.

Author: Nhorse77
Date posted: 7/11/2004 4:17:38 PM
Nhorse77's Comments:

Amazing story, I loved the perspective.

Author: The Answer is42
Date posted: 7/16/2004 3:48:57 AM
The Answer is42's Comments:

Wow. I'm speechless. That's the most original fanfic I've ever seen!!!

I'll be watching for more of your stuff

Author: Darsha Assant
Date posted: 8/29/2004 12:38:13 AM
Darsha Assant's Comments:

Very fresh perspective. I like it.

Author: Ani-maniac  (signed)
Date posted: 11/23/2004 8:41:54 PM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

I really liked this story. I have always thought that Obi-wan was never the same after Qui-Gon died, and this did a wonderful job of showing that. I also liked the fact that he could tell that there was something weird about Anakin. The one question I have, is why did Obi-wan tell the homeless man that his name was Ben? Otherwise I enjoyed the story. Keep up the good work!!!

Author: Obi-Odd13
Date posted: 3/18/2008 9:02:36 PM
Obi-Odd13's Comments:

Wow. That was really good. And that very last line: "That life on the streets I mentioned earlier? Maybe it ain't quite as bad as bein' a Jedi." It kinda struck something in me...it makes a perfect sort of sense, and it gave the stoary the perfect ending. And I recentely discovered that after reading accounts of the Jedi, especially Obi-Wan, from the point of view of normal non-force users, I want to cry the stories affect me so much. (incedentially, the two most prominant are by you) Great job, and thank you so much for bringing these stories into exsistence.

~Obi-Odd13~

Author: pronker
Date posted: 9/13/2008 1:46:33 PM
pronker's Comments:

Hi, here visiting from LJ's rec site, crack_van. REALLY good use of dialect and POV, I liked this quite a bit. And the title fits what I've seen of street life, too, the territorialism that we all have regardless of social station.