Author: Jedi_Master_Mouf
Date posted: 8/2/2005 6:39:20 PM
Jedi_Master_Mouf's Comments:

that last line was wonderful, very intresting, I enjoyed it

Author: bobill  (signed)
Date posted: 8/2/2005 6:52:05 PM
bobill's Comments:

Such a sad, yet heartfelt piece. I love the "Choy-kla" over and over in the beginning; so cute, yet so reminiscent of what his father had become. The title is so fitting! And I agree that that last line was really nice.

Author: Daryle
Date posted: 8/3/2005 4:00:15 AM
Daryle's Comments:

i could feel how loving Beru was about Luke and how Ben(Obi-Wan)felt more of a friend then a mentor.

Author: darshaassant
Date posted: 8/3/2005 8:15:32 AM
darshaassant's Comments:

Oh man oh man this is so beautiful I wanna cry. Liked the last line too. Heh I could listen to him talk all day too.

Author: me_luv_darth_squishy
Date posted: 8/3/2005 5:55:59 PM
me_luv_darth_squishy's Comments:

That was a very interesting story. I liked it.

MTFBWY

Author: BarissaOffee
Date posted: 8/3/2005 8:01:41 PM
BarissaOffee's Comments:

Thats great. Very different, but I reallly enjoyed it. The girlfriends... just about right, thats for sure. Choy-kla! Very Lukeish and the focusing on the present was interesting for Obi-Wan, yet you allowed the aching desolation to be there and that showed skill. Very nicely done!

Author: DarthIshtar  (signed)
Date posted: 8/3/2005 8:30:53 PM
DarthIshtar's Comments:

While it was an interesting idea, it seemed very undeveloped, too casual and unemotional.

Author: obi_ew
Date posted: 8/3/2005 8:51:59 PM
obi_ew's Comments:

Beautiful. Excellent job with Obi-Wan and Luke was adorable. Your talent always amazes me.

Author: VaderLVR64
Date posted: 8/4/2005 7:13:59 AM
VaderLVR64's Comments:

As always, you portay the emotions of all the characters flawlessly. This piece showed a very beleivable slice of their lives at this time. Supber writing, but then the quality of your work is always amazingly lovely! Subtle elegance is what I would say desribes this piece best.

Author: Shaindl
Date posted: 8/4/2005 9:59:36 AM
Shaindl's Comments:

TKL, that was just lovely. You said so much in so few words. The quiet sadness, contrasted with the simple joy of a five-year-old was lovely.

I loved Beru's friends - could certainly relate to them! :p

Great job, TKL!

Author: Koon  (signed)
Date posted: 8/4/2005 3:24:55 PM
Koon's Comments:

A breath of fresh air in a time rife with "Obi-Wan, post purge" fics. Its nice to see something different.

I like how Obi-Wan taught luke the ways of the Jedi without anyone ever knowing it!

Overall, an excellent story.

A sequel, perhaps?......?

Author: Idrelle_Miocovani
Date posted: 8/4/2005 6:04:05 PM
Idrelle_Miocovani's Comments:

This was lovely! Luke was adorable. :)

Author: JediJainaSoloFel  (signed)
Date posted: 8/4/2005 7:15:01 PM
JediJainaSoloFel's Comments:

Well, you already know that I absolutely loved this! It was very insightful and gave us a look at a character that isn't often mentioned. And little Luke was so cute. I couldn't help but feel bad for both Beru and Obi-Wan. Great Job!!! A+++++

Author: LuvEwan
Date posted: 8/4/2005 7:19:43 PM
LuvEwan's Comments:

So beautiful, TKL. I loved the characterization of both Beru and Obi-Wan. They're both so quiet, but stronger than they give themselves credit for. I loved this:

"The man chuckled softly, the sound a low melodic hum that possessed little volume yet managed to resonate everywhere. "Hello there."

Wonderful. You should be very proud of this.

Author: Mcily Nochi  (signed)
Date posted: 8/5/2005 4:43:00 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

This is so lovely. I enjoyed the glimpse into Beru's mind as she raises this special child who isn't even her own. I always wondered what kind of history Luke had with Ben, and what his relationship was to Owen and Beru. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us.

Author: Erela
Date posted: 8/7/2005 8:59:07 AM
Erela's Comments:

Wow. I really liked this. Very sweet, and Ben already saying "you can't possess living things" to Luke is pretty funny. Well done.

Author: Jon Cory
Date posted: 8/9/2005 8:58:53 AM
Jon Cory's Comments:

Excellent use of Ep III lines and phrases. I very much enjoyed your story.

Author: Jedi Knight Safira Felan
Date posted: 8/10/2005 4:12:02 PM
Jedi Knight Safira Felan's Comments:

Very good fic! I enjoyed it. LOL. And I certainly could agree with Beru's friends! Luke was so cute, and I liked the way mixed Obi-Wan's sadness with his...I guess comfort at being around Luke. Like being around Luke brings him peace. Very good. May the Force be with you!

Author: Shada  (signed)
Date posted: 8/11/2005 2:11:58 PM
Shada's Comments:

Cute little piece. :) I have to say that I enjoyed seeing Obi-Wan and Luke interact with one another. I'm not certain how much contact they did have, but this was an interesting take on it.

Just because I love Obi-Wan, I would have liked to have seen the lesson written out. His words. :)

But still, nice job.

Author: darth_sparrow  (signed)
Date posted: 8/11/2005 5:11:08 PM
darth_sparrow's Comments:

I really loved this story, probably because it is one of the best Obi-Wan Kenobi characterizations I have read. You captured the sadness and also the joy at being able to interact with Anakin Skywalker's son.

I loved the descriptions of Obi-Wan's voice and mannerisms...and how Beru's friends flirted so shamelessly. I can truly relate with them. Obi-Wan's blush was so funny.

It's obvious, to me, in Episode 4 that Luke has some memory of 'Old Ben', so it follows that Obi-Wan must have made some early visits to the moisture farm.

Beautifully done.

Author: rangerkom
Date posted: 8/16/2005 7:13:44 PM
rangerkom's Comments:

It's interesting that Owen is absent. It seems like beru let Ben visit Luke while Owen was away.

Author: JediMartynAntilles
Date posted: 8/23/2005 2:20:44 PM
JediMartynAntilles's Comments:

Very nice. I can completely relate to Beru's friends' response to Obi-Wan. And Luke was so cute! Five year old hero of the galaxy...!

Author: Lindz
Date posted: 8/25/2005 9:35:40 AM
Lindz's Comments:

So pretty I almosted cried. It goes right witht eh star wars story line! GOOD JOB!

Author: JediKat
Date posted: 9/2/2005 1:31:53 PM
JediKat's Comments:

Oh, this was such an interesting idea! And you developed it so well. I loved the personal feeling of the whole thing, and Beru's emotions were so wonderfully portrayed.

Great job!

Author: Alaska Steele
Date posted: 11/21/2005 4:39:42 PM
Alaska Steele's Comments:

That was simply beautiful. Hats off to you.
~alaska

Author: Veloz  (signed)
Date posted: 12/26/2005 3:32:30 PM
Veloz's Comments:

Aww this was too cute for words, great job! (and yeah, i also agree with Beru's friends regarding Obi Wan *wink wink* )

Author: Jedi Cat Kenobi  (signed)
Date posted: 5/14/2006 8:15:12 PM
Jedi Cat Kenobi's Comments:

oh this was beautiful!!! I loved it!!!

Author: Joon
Date posted: 11/26/2006 6:04:33 PM
Joon's Comments:

Oh my goodness. That was absolutely touching and lovely. The characterizations of everyone from Luke to Beru's friends was startlingly clear. You have a very clear way about your writing, an easy clear feel, that does not skimp on emotion or atmosphere. The last line was a cold spike to my heart. How beautifully poignant. That's what this story was, beautifully soft, quiet, and poignant.

Author: Thrace_adams
Date posted: 4/17/2007 1:49:48 PM
Thrace_adams's Comments:

Oh this was awesome! What a wonderful story. I really enjoyed this, it was very heartwarming. I would love to see more like this. Thank you so much for sharing!

Author: jedigirl
Date posted: 11/4/2007 1:13:19 PM
jedigirl's Comments:

A friend with no friends. The last of a dying breed. A hero.

Loved that.

Author: Cor
Date posted: 11/27/2007 5:15:41 PM
Cor's Comments:

Wunderbar! I do not enjoy most fanfiction, but this hit the spot!

I noticed at least 2 typos as I went through, but spelling and grammar were fine (except one spot that rolled off the tongue with difficulty).

The meaning behind the Force is also clearly present with Ben elaborating on the philosophy that surrounds it. Luke's speech is well done also. The "Choy-kla!" seemed like random babytalk, but when the reader finds out what he is saying, Luke is seen as intelligent. The way he speaks seems too childish at first, but it really ends up giving Luke a distinct voice.

The last line also gives a definition of hero that one can ponder.

Author: Kristina
Date posted: 8/13/2008 4:21:44 PM
Kristina's Comments:

Well written story. You gave the characters depth out of line with the length of the story.

The only critique I have is the way you wrote Luke's speech. Very few five year olds still speak with such a pronounced baby mode. The cadence resembled more of a three year old child.

I quite enjoyed this scene.

Author: xXJedi Knight BlazeXx  (signed)
Date posted: 3/3/2010 11:50:22 PM
xXJedi Knight BlazeXx's Comments:

That was very good, I loved the ending the best.