Author: Jeff 42  (signed)
Date posted: 7/30/2001 3:59:07 PM
Jeff 42's Comments:

The writing could use some polishing in spots, but overall it is a good response to the challenge.

Author: beebo
Date posted: 7/30/2001 4:28:35 PM
beebo's Comments:

i agree with jeff42

Author: Clone War Comments
Date posted: 7/30/2001 9:51:35 PM
Clone War Comments's Comments:

Starkiller writes with a nice flow to the dialogue that carries believeability. More detail in the description of the first kiss denouement is desired wich reflects Starkiller's skill in writing a compelling short that grabs the reader. Some typos were noted which spell check would not catch, however these are incidental to this entertaining work by an author that stays true to fandom's desire for stories adding another piece to the timeline of this galaxy so far away...so long ago. Thank you, Starkiller.

Author: Mcily Nochi  (signed)
Date posted: 8/5/2001 3:55:59 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

A pretty good story. It was obviously in response to the challenge, but was still flowed well from scene to scene. I didn't quite understand the point of the bounty hunters or whoever the blaster shots came from. It needed a more thorough beta-reading. But still, a good story.

Author: Padawon So-Ver-Leet
Date posted: 8/17/2001 11:51:13 AM
Padawon So-Ver-Leet's Comments:

This story has great potential!

Only it's execution was wrong. More time and energy should have gone into the beginning of the story, before they landed at Tatooine.

As I said, if this story is hashed-out more it could be much better!

Author: Dark_Luke
Date posted: 8/27/2001 2:37:40 PM
Dark_Luke's Comments:

Rememebr all, this was in response to a challange. It could be no more than 1000 words. Starkiller, I belive you should re-write it, not for the challange, but just as a story. It has a lot of potential.

Author: Qwi_Xux
Date posted: 11/10/2001 11:00:50 PM
Qwi_Xux's Comments:

I really liked it; it was sweet.

Author: marcy
Date posted: 8/22/2002 12:06:30 PM
marcy's Comments:

I loved it!It was so sweet.Please continue!

Author: Master Marla  (signed)
Date posted: 8/31/2002 10:47:20 AM
Master Marla's Comments:

I liked it alot but it should of been longer.

Author: JediJuggler
Date posted: 9/5/2002 11:01:10 PM
JediJuggler's Comments:

nice..when is this actually supposed to be happening..its not the writing, its probably me..but this was a fun reading

Author: Jules
Date posted: 12/7/2002 10:53:04 AM
Jules's Comments:

Pleasant...

Author: anniekin 45
Date posted: 1/12/2003 12:34:43 PM
anniekin 45's Comments:

it was okay....

Author: fffffffffffffffffff
Date posted: 2/23/2003 3:40:54 PM
fffffffffffffffffff's Comments:

i agree with beebo

Author: Larena_Jade
Date posted: 5/8/2003 11:39:35 AM
Larena_Jade's Comments:

You really didn't portray the character of Padme very well. She isn't that emotional or weak. It was a good story but I think it should have taken Padme longer to break. That is were Luke and Leia get their stubborness, it runs in the family. So I think it should have been something more threatening to get her to confess her fealings.

Author: Rhaya  (signed)
Date posted: 6/2/2005 1:36:11 PM
Rhaya's Comments:

Could use more detail, and the charactor of Padme is just a bit off in some way..