Author: Qwi_Xux
Date posted: 11/27/2001 7:42:53 PM
Qwi_Xux's Comments:

Wow...wow, Peter, that just took my breath away. What a difficult trial for Qui-Gon! That was fantastic!

Author: Jane Jinn
Date posted: 11/28/2001 4:11:32 AM
Jane Jinn's Comments:

A fascinating story, though I didn't understand how Qui-Gon could impale the older man when he had dropped his lightsaber and was struggling even to breathe, let alone move.
But I liked the flashback where Qui-Gon came home to proudly report that he'd been taken as Yoda's padawan, and how the older boy would have killed him then, if he'd been allowed to. A very difficult trial for young Qui-Gon, indeed.

Author: Valeda Kor  (signed)
Date posted: 11/28/2001 8:54:17 AM
Valeda Kor's Comments:

Jann Jinn -- it can be argued that in desperate times, even a boy can do astonishing things, especially if he's a Jedi <g>....

This story keeps your interest up until the end. The flashbacks are very well handled, I believe, and drive the story forward without interfering with the narrative.

Any story about the early life of my favorite Jedi always piques my interest, and I was glad to have a chance to read this in its beta form. Well done!

Author: Mcily Nochi
Date posted: 12/1/2001 9:44:53 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

That was really good. Some of the transistions were confusing, but all in all, I thought it was well thought out. I loved the use of flashbacks -- a fic of mine that I'm writing has flashbacks, too, so of course I'm biased.

Author: Rogue 8
Date posted: 12/30/2001 9:16:11 AM
Rogue 8's Comments:

interesting. Superb writing skills, great idea.

Author: drunkin_yoda  (signed)
Date posted: 7/21/2002 8:49:25 PM
drunkin_yoda's Comments:

that was a good fic. It was kinnda short but hey it was all good, the whole way through. I've been going and reading all these " young Qui-Gonn stories" and there all great as far as it goes in my books. This was a good fic!
Good job!

Author: jarogue
Date posted: 8/20/2008 12:33:06 PM
jarogue's Comments:

Cooool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! But you didn't tell us the name of his brother. And why he killed his own parents.
Or how he learned the ways of the dark side.
YOU FAIL!!!!! F+


LOL jk. yur allright, man. ur all right.

Author: Ki-Aaron-Mundi  (signed)
Date posted: 6/24/2010 11:06:03 PM
Ki-Aaron-Mundi's Comments:

Interesting story. It's nice to see a look at a young Qui-Gon, and I like your pre-Episodes II and III take on the Jedi and Qui-Gon's past (amazing how much 9 years can change, huh?).

The biggest problem I had with this story is that in saving the revelation that Qui-Gon was fighting his brother till the end, the duel doesn't have the emotional weight it should for the reader. We don't know how high the stakes are until it's already over.

Author: Kimo
Date posted: 4/2/2012 10:17:42 AM
Kimo's Comments:

You've hit the ball out the park! Inceridlbe!