Author: FernWithy  (signed)
Date posted: 3/25/2002 9:46:10 PM
FernWithy's Comments:

I was glad to review this story. I was reading it concurrently with a JA novel, and it really has the same feel to it. The nephrolite is an interesting device, and Xanatos certainly is dead on as his obnoxious self. I found the Sitaris/Obi-Wan relationship interesting, and the unusual beliefs of the Mozelle (and their bonders) were well-developed.

Author: ~Becky~
Date posted: 3/27/2002 10:38:58 PM
~Becky~'s Comments:

Wow, I finally got to finish this after several days! (It seemed that everytime I started, I was having to get off.) Anyway, awesome story, can't say much more than that. :) Xanatos was perfect (better than the books, that's for sure) and the inner battle for Obi-Wan was wonderful. Awesome job. Make sure to post this at (Fanfiction.net). The readers there are always eager for more Obi stories. ;)

Author: Fett48  (signed)
Date posted: 3/28/2002 7:40:06 PM
Fett48's Comments:

An exceptionally well-written fanfic! If I could rate it an 11 instead of just a 10, I'd still want to give it a 12! Excellent description, a perfect ending -- bad guy escapes but at least his evil is undone -- wonderful cover art...All in all, the fanfic of fanfics!

Author: greencat336
Date posted: 3/31/2002 9:32:12 AM
greencat336's Comments:

An excellent story. Full of strong emotions, suspensful situations, and wonderful portrayals of the characters. I was left wanting more! I am hoping there is a sequel, with Xanatos' next plot, more exploring of Obi & Qui's relationship and Obi's recovery.

Author: Jedi_rose16
Date posted: 4/2/2002 3:37:44 PM
Jedi_rose16's Comments:

This story is amazing! It sounds like it truly belongs in the series, and I wish it was a book. I printed it off the internet and wouldn't put it down until it was done. This story was so well written and accurate to SWJA. It gave me some ideas for my own fanfic that I am in the process of. I am highly recommeneding this story to my friends. Congratulations on a well written story that leaves me speechless.

Author: Omeletgirl  (signed)
Date posted: 4/5/2002 6:23:49 PM
Omeletgirl's Comments:

This fan fiction is screaming for a sequal. What happens afterwards? I want to hear about Obi-Wan 's recovery.

Author: LuvEwan
Date posted: 4/7/2002 2:01:58 PM
LuvEwan's Comments:

I've loved this story since I found it in September! I thought everything was great..and it would be neat to have a sequel? :) Very well written.

Author: LittleJedi
Date posted: 4/11/2002 6:19:01 AM
LittleJedi's Comments:

HOLY FORCE! THIS FANFIC RULES! 100 times better than the actual JA! The characters were perfect, the story was brilliant, it kept me hooked the whole way through, and it was just well written! And if you ask me - the way Xanatos came across in this story is much more evil (this is a good thing) than he does in the JA series.

Congrats again on a wonderful story!

-Little Jedi-
MTFBWY

Author: DarthAzrael
Date posted: 4/30/2002 2:50:41 AM
DarthAzrael's Comments:

A fantastic adaption of JA! Congratulations!
It's in some parts maybe a bit too brutal,
the way they treated Obi-Wan gave me always a creepy feeling... Though that's more realistic than the original JAs, I mean, they are just right for kids...
But I really, really, really enjoyed it and read it the whole weekend! I couldn't stop until the last page!
Keep on writing!

Author: cathypauline  (signed)
Date posted: 5/3/2002 10:49:11 AM
cathypauline's Comments:

Hi,
Since folks have asked, yes I have written a sequel to this story. It's called "Ward", but it's a crossover story, so it's not posted here. You can find it at www.fanfiction.net under my pen name, cathypauline.

Cheers,
Cathy

Author: unknown jedi knight  (signed)
Date posted: 5/10/2002 6:16:30 PM
unknown jedi knight's Comments:

Even though I didn't read the whole story i can give it more than a five star rating.I liked the way you started the story and didn't say once upon a time...You are a great author.

Author: darkangel
Date posted: 5/22/2002 2:30:08 PM
darkangel's Comments:

Wow!!!!! This is an awesome story even though I havn't finished it yet!!! Keep up the good work!!!!

Author: Ivy
Date posted: 5/26/2002 6:54:03 AM
Ivy's Comments:

Wow.
That's all I can say. This is the first story I'm reading off theforce.net and I gotta say it's a good one! I'm always looking for Young Obi Wan stories and this one (aside from the too open ending!) was perfect and I couldn't concentrate on anything else until I finished reading it! (luckily I did, math test tomorrow!)
Ivy

Author: princess_leia94
Date posted: 5/27/2002 5:40:12 PM
princess_leia94's Comments:

*staggers back as if shot* WOW!!! Holy lick that was AWESOME!! It really did remind me of a genuine JA book. For awhile I forgot I wasn't reading one!! lol I read the sequal as well!! *staggers back again* You should really consider writing a book for publishing. Lemme know if you ever do. ^_~

Author: Shahara  (signed)
Date posted: 5/31/2002 4:01:34 PM
Shahara's Comments:

I absolutly LOVED this!! I like how you portrayed the characters, and the relationship between Obi-wan and his trainer. I felt that in some places you lmost went too far with Xanatos, but I like the way you portrayed him a lot better then in the JA books. I'll be checking out the sequel, I share an account on ff.net with a friend of mine. I hardly have any work up there at the moment though. I write under the name Manticore Queen.

-Shahara

Author: bh
Date posted: 6/5/2002 3:22:44 PM
bh's Comments:

I was late to work this morning because I stayed up half the night to finish this story. :) I couldn't imagine stopping in the middle and losing the flow. Really a wonderful piece of writing, twice as long as a JA book. I won't say twice as good because I like them for what they are, but defintely a better story for the older crowd. You've got excitement, angst, and violence without being painfully graphic, a hard line to tread for many writers it seems. The side story about the mineral was really superb, it was great to have something for people to do while they were looking for Obi rather than the other characters simply being relegated to occassionally remembered worried searchers. You have a very good balance. Your original characters (at least I thought they were, I don't know all the Jedi out there...) didn't try to steal the show at all, but were nice additions to the story. Really really really a marvelous story. You are a very talented writer, I'm going to have to search out more of your writing. I wish fanfiction.net was working on my computer so I could read the sequel!

Author: darkangel
Date posted: 6/6/2002 9:59:24 AM
darkangel's Comments:

HOLY COW!!!!! I just finished this and wow if it wasn't the best story I have read in a LOOOOOOOOOOONG time!!! YOu are a great author!! I'm going to read the sequel right now!!!!!

Author: Icefire
Date posted: 6/10/2002 1:11:13 PM
Icefire's Comments:

...
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Wow.

What more can I say? This is a truly /amazing/ fic. The attention paid, not just to the series characters, but to the sociology of an alien culture... Wow. The interactions between Obi Wan and his trainer alone made this story worth reading. I'd stack this one up against many of the stories written by the 'professional' SW authors any day.

Author: Jedi Knight Safira Felan
Date posted: 6/11/2002 11:38:04 AM
Jedi Knight Safira Felan's Comments:

Wow! Great story! You did an awesome job making the story sound like the rest of the Jedi Apprentice series. I liked the insights you gave into Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon's relationship as well, and the feelings you portrayed through the story were very strong. Almost made me cry!

Author: Obi_Wanita_Kenobi
Date posted: 6/28/2002 7:15:54 AM
Obi_Wanita_Kenobi's Comments:

Perfect! Simply Wonderful!! Now this, ladies and gentleman, is an excellent piece of work!

Author: Obi&Yoda Ruels!!!
Date posted: 7/14/2002 5:34:43 PM
Obi&Yoda Ruels!!!'s Comments:

Cool story!!! I couldn't wait every day to the moment I could just sit down in front of my computer and read it (it took me couple of days to finish the story) PLEASE WRITE MORE! HURRY!!!
:) :> :D :> :) p.s- nice cover!

Author: UNDOMIEL360
Date posted: 7/24/2002 5:03:24 PM
UNDOMIEL360's Comments:

THIS IS THE BEST STORY ON THE WEBSITE!!!IT WAS SO REALISTIC.I'VE READ IT SO MANY TIMES I'VE COMITTED IT TO MEMORY.
I'M TRYING TO WRITE MY OWN FAN FICTION{AND SUCKING AT IT}ABOUT THE WHOLE XANATOS/QUI-GON THING AND THIS IS MY INSPRIATION{I NEED TO WORK ON MY SPELLING BEFORE I SUBMIT A FICTION}
PLEASE WRITE MORE!
-U360

Author: forever_jedi
Date posted: 7/30/2002 6:23:13 PM
forever_jedi's Comments:

This is fantastic. I read it in multiple sittings at work today. What a gripping tale! The characters were perfect and real. Can't wait to check out the sequel. Please keep writing - the Force is very strong with you on this.

Author: Ania-Lea
Date posted: 9/7/2002 3:38:49 PM
Ania-Lea's Comments:

Woah. This is one of my favorite stories, next to its sequel, Ward. That one was awesome, too. I can honestly say that Cathy is my favorite fan fiction author. You're great, Cathy! You should publish! I am looking for another Star Wars from you... *Wink, hopeful look* Keep it up, girl.

Author: JediSkywalker13
Date posted: 12/9/2002 3:07:53 PM
JediSkywalker13's Comments:

On a scale of 1 to 10 I say this rates 10000000000000. Awesome story. Please write more!

Author: Brightbear  (signed)
Date posted: 2/7/2003 7:28:02 PM
Brightbear's Comments:

This story is so much better than the official books. The characters are so well written, everything ties together very nicely. I've read the sequel too and in my opinion, these two stories are the definitive young Obi-Wan stories. Please keep up the good work!

Author: bubbleyicious
Date posted: 3/18/2003 11:10:23 PM
bubbleyicious's Comments:

I really loved this story. Very well written. A true Star Wars adventure. Although, I thought then end was a little to abrupt. Needed more closure, but overall, excellent.

Author: Darth Morgoth
Date posted: 4/8/2003 1:32:13 PM
Darth Morgoth's Comments:

OHMYGOSH THIS IS SO SAD & ANGSTY!!! I LOVED IT!!!!!

Author: Darth Morgoth
Date posted: 4/8/2003 1:32:19 PM
Darth Morgoth's Comments:

OHMYGOSH THIS IS SO SAD & ANGSTY!!! I LOVED IT!!!!!

Author: Silver FireStar
Date posted: 6/25/2003 4:10:36 PM
Silver FireStar's Comments:

This was amazing I hav'nt finished yet but I felt I had to comment If I didn't Know better I'd have siad george lucas wrote it.
Truly,
Silver

Author: Silver FireStar
Date posted: 6/25/2003 4:10:40 PM
Silver FireStar's Comments:

This was amazing I hav'nt finished yet but I felt I had to comment If I didn't Know better I'd have siad george lucas wrote it.
Truly,
Silver

Author: Filorux
Date posted: 11/21/2003 6:56:40 PM
Filorux's Comments:

*struck speechless by your work*

Author: MutantJediBouer
Date posted: 1/31/2004 9:30:46 AM
MutantJediBouer's Comments:

wow. what an abnormaly astonishing peice of work. it was amazing. (speechless) wow. Everyone was portrayed very well, even in the sequel. Absolutely a joy to read. Obi-Wan was.... wow. Obi-Wan was,.. Obi-Wan. How else to say it..., his character in this story was one of the best portrayals ive ever seen. The same with everyone else, again a truly astonishing story. You really should think about publishing it or something. It makes me wonder if you are a professional writer...? Anyway, a great story, this one and the sequal, very well writen.
MTFBWY
MutantJediBouer
aka. Zax-Ryn Kenobi

Author: analia_ary
Date posted: 2/3/2004 2:43:20 PM
analia_ary's Comments:

This should have been included in the jedi apprentice series or made into a book!

Author: Denali
Date posted: 2/4/2004 9:53:44 PM
Denali's Comments:

Truly, truly amazing story. Very Star Wars in every aspect...the characterizations were perfect. I loved Tomas and Ki-Erin...Xantos was incredible, I was afraid when he was around! Rarely does a book, let alone a fanfic draw the reader in to the point where they care so much about every character. You acheived that here, congratulations. You should be published!

Author: The Force
Date posted: 4/28/2004 2:22:30 PM
The Force's Comments:

Listen, I LOVE your story. I've loved all of those Jedi Apprentice stories. They were great books. I've always thought Jude Watson did a great job in portraying ObiWan. But now, I only have one regret, and that this, wasn't a part of her series. This was truly, my most favorite reading of all of the fanfiction thus far. Keep it up!!!!!

Author: Arren Terrilon
Date posted: 8/6/2004 10:13:25 AM
Arren Terrilon's Comments:

that was great i LOVED it; definately one of my favorite SW fanfictions yet

Author: Ani-maniac  (signed)
Date posted: 11/26/2004 11:16:52 PM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

I enjoyed this story. It was very good, however I thought the end was a bit rushed. It leaves the readers with a lot of questions. I would be interested in a sequel to find out what happens though. The one other suggestion I have, is that I noticed you have several run-on sentences. If you read it out loud, it is to get lost, because you have no place to pause. I did enjoy it though, especially as a fan of the Jedi Apprentice series. Please keep writting as you have alot of potential.

Author: jabba  (signed)
Date posted: 2/9/2005 3:05:12 AM
jabba's Comments:

*nods* i like it....i like it. I LOVE THIS FAN-FIC!!!!! you really should write more i really really like this story it's SOOO great!!! I WANT MORE!!!! i've never read the JA series but who cares? i can still tell Xanatos is evil
over-all 10/10

WARNING FROM HERE ONWARDS I WILL BE COMMENTING ON WARD! SO IF YOU HAVEN'T READ THAT YET DO NOT READ FARTHER!!

i also like this one it is also really good Obi -wan's frustration at not being able to speak i felt pretty sad when he has to act like a robot or Will will die i don't like the neding that much don't ask me why i just don't

over-all 9/10

i just have one question..... WHEN'S THE THIRD COMING OUT?????!

Author: jabba  (signed)
Date posted: 3/6/2005 10:10:44 PM
jabba's Comments:

i know that i've already written a comment but i've just read the JA series and yes you did make Xanatos alot more evil then in the books well done

Author: grand casino coushatta
Date posted: 5/7/2005 2:57:36 PM
grand casino coushatta's Comments:

Spam removed.

Author: darth mitros aka vicky
Date posted: 6/20/2005 2:44:54 PM
darth mitros aka vicky's Comments:

That was AMAZING!

i love the charecter xanatos and in the jedi apprentice books when he died i was disapointed about the end because iw anted to read more about him, and this was a GREAT fan fic, i loved it, i loved how you wrote the charecter for obi-wan as well, excelent, 10 out of 10 rating!

Author: Kadi-Ahn_Tanye
Date posted: 8/15/2006 12:41:31 PM
Kadi-Ahn_Tanye's Comments:

Oh.....My.....Goodness.Why, oh why did this story have to end? This was a VERY good story. It was one of the first stories I have read with Xanathos in it that I actually liked. I've read all the JA books, and the ones with Xanathos, I d. But this, Wow.

Author: ambrosiusemrys
Date posted: 1/16/2007 12:48:00 PM
ambrosiusemrys's Comments:

nice

Author: Freaky
Date posted: 10/11/2007 8:23:36 PM
Freaky's Comments:

Cathy,
love your stories just wish that you had more~~~

Found the sequal~ :D
Another really well written piece~
Xan is his notorious self~ >:D

Go to:

http://jafd.nsio.net/

Check under stories by Title (W-Z)

Author: Kestrel
Date posted: 3/2/2008 2:48:26 PM
Kestrel's Comments:

I LOVED this fanfic. It's one of the best ones I've ever read for any fandom! The emotions and thoughts were portrayed beautifully, I really loved the way you showed the relationship between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon. All the characters, even the ones who had hardly any "screen time" seemed extremely realistic to me. Part of me believes that I was really there and that all the people there were real.
Just one thing, I can't find "Ward" at www.fanfiction.net. Could you tell me if there's something special I have to put in the search?

Author: fallenjedipadawan  (signed)
Date posted: 4/21/2008 6:29:44 PM
fallenjedipadawan's Comments:

wow I loved this one. personally i like better than the book. it is just amazing and I was glad that xantos didn't lose so easily