Author: StarWarsCutie  (signed)
Date posted: 5/12/2002 6:58:19 PM
StarWarsCutie's Comments:

I just wanted to say that I thought this way a great story. It showed that not everyone can recover from the dark side, and it showed what the dark side can do to you. I thought it was sweet the way that the girl turned out to be Luke's grandaughter. Keep writing!

Author: Mcily Nochi  (signed)
Date posted: 5/13/2002 5:47:29 AM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

Wow, it's been a long time since I betaed this, and it's still good. Well done. You capture very well the pain of killing a friend and the guilt afterwards as Annissa blames herself for it all and hopes despaerately that it was the right thing.

Author: Mikeyb65
Date posted: 5/15/2002 1:06:44 AM
Mikeyb65's Comments:

Great story!!! This fic is very well told. What I especially like is the fact that the author keeps up the speed with the lightsaber duel. Some authors put too much into the duel and what the author sees in their mind to a reader can go really really slow. Again congrats on finally getting this fic posted. Hope to see more from you soon!!!!

Author: wolf13345
Date posted: 5/17/2002 4:41:00 PM
wolf13345's Comments:

Great story ut it culd have used a more thourough back round stoy.

Author: ewen
Date posted: 5/17/2002 7:49:16 PM
ewen's Comments:

Please limit yourself to constructive criticism. There's no place for just flaming stories.

- Herman

Author: b35
Date posted: 5/21/2002 2:13:16 PM
b35's Comments:

nice story. weak background, but enough for a shortfic. I think it takes more for a jedi to fall, but that is the material for another story, anyway.

Author: jeeves
Date posted: 6/11/2002 11:40:43 PM
jeeves's Comments:

hmm..couple things that hopefully will come off as constructive criticism.. take it for whatever it's worth..

1) thomas's betrayal. a fully trained and experienced jedi disavowing the existence of the Light because he encounters an act of horrifying evil? especially when this is a universe where there's absolute good and evil, an internal struggle like this is something that all jedi would have struggled with and settled long ago.
2) annissa's struggle. my criticism for this would be somewhat along the same lines as previous comments on thomas' fall into the dark side. i'm not sure what age you meant for her to have, but her angst seemed to me a tad bit too adolescent? i would think that especially since she isn't still a padawan, questions like that (having to kill in order to save lives) would be a no brainer. ie if she didn't kill him, he would have killed his wife, killed her, killed the security officer, screwed up his kid's life, etc.

soo... basically, it would have been better if thomas' fall to the dark side could have been developed a lil more, and annissa's doubting a bit more mature.

that said, i agree with most of the comments left so far. it isn't a bad piece at all. and i like your lightsaber scene.. lol my comments are usually just one or two liners, but those two things stood out to me quite a bit. as i said, take it for whatever it's worth. and keep writing =)

Author: Mizhnari Windu
Date posted: 6/24/2002 8:04:38 PM
Mizhnari Windu's Comments:

Good story. I agree with the others and believe that a more fleshed out backround story would have been better. Then again it is a short story and I think that our wanting that history to be told is an indication of how well the story was written. Please bless us with more of your work.

Author: UrbanJedi
Date posted: 6/26/2002 11:06:51 PM
UrbanJedi's Comments:

Despite some of the other comments on this board, I thought your story was outstanding, as is. I enjoy these "future" Star Wars stories, I think more, than stories set in the current time line. It was very well told and the fact that Annissa was Luke's grand daughter was a cool surprise. Thank you for sharing your good work with us.

Author: AntillesJedi666
Date posted: 7/26/2002 10:05:59 PM
AntillesJedi666's Comments:

I thought that this was an excellant story, the lightsaber scene especially. The struggles were very believable and i like that u moved the time period forward from most of the others. I also respect anyone who comes up with their own characters. I know how difficult it is to think up names that would sound right for the Star Wars universe. Anyway Good Work and keep writing :)

Author: Nol-Tel-Sete
Date posted: 1/3/2003 12:30:32 PM
Nol-Tel-Sete's Comments:

I loved the basic storyline I think that yo captured what might have realy happened if this was to come to pass. I think that the story was well written and I hope to read more from this author. And as always May the Force Be with you.

Author: Dan-Candor
Date posted: 6/19/2005 8:37:41 PM
Dan-Candor's Comments:

A really good story. I liked how it showed that the light and dark side of the force can both control and consume you. The ending is both surprising and satisfying. A must read for fans.

Author: jedigirl78
Date posted: 8/4/2010 10:27:50 PM
jedigirl78's Comments:

Good story.