Author: Yoda-Wan
Date posted: 6/24/2002 7:34:06 PM
Yoda-Wan's Comments:

I can put this fanfic in one word: Stellar. Your descriptions of the visions and the surrondings made the story easy enough for an idiot like me to follow! Congratulations and I personally hope to see more of your work.

Author: Cosmic  (signed)
Date posted: 6/24/2002 11:29:22 PM
Cosmic's Comments:

Yay, way to go Viari! The final version of this fic is great - I've read it lots of times by now and love it. Good work...

Author: UrbanJedi
Date posted: 6/25/2002 1:13:41 AM
UrbanJedi's Comments:

Very nicely done. I really enjoyed the way the story fit into the two movies. Very very good story!

Author: Kris
Date posted: 6/25/2002 2:45:25 AM
Kris's Comments:

WOW, this is one of the best fanfics I have ever read. You can't describe what you made ....

W O W !!!!!!!!

Author: Mcily Nochi  (signed)
Date posted: 6/25/2002 8:58:49 AM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

Very nice! I love the way you integrated the prequel trilogy into this story to shed light on the past and give Luke the strength that the characters in that trilogy have.

The dreams were also very interesting, and very well executed. Good job!

Author: jetfirespam
Date posted: 6/25/2002 10:26:20 AM
jetfirespam's Comments:

Excellent. Even if Ultimate Edition RotJ doens't have Natalie in it, you've done a wonderful job of making up for it. Seemless integration with the movies.

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 6/25/2002 6:27:32 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

I really appreciate those who have left comments! You don't know how important the feedback is to me. For those of you who read this, I really do need the comments, even if they are short. Thank you so much!

Author: Mizhnari Windu
Date posted: 6/26/2002 4:56:36 AM
Mizhnari Windu's Comments:

I don't know if it is the aniticipation of EP 2 or just a surge in pure talent but the FanFics of late have been absolutely incredible. I usually scan and skim through the latest publications and get a so-so/okay feeling about what I read. But your work here is brilliant. If I had my thesaurus close I would dig through and give you a more original adjective but just plain ol' brilliant will. Keep writing, thanks

Author: Lord Malice
Date posted: 6/26/2002 6:20:58 AM
Lord Malice's Comments:

Words cannot summerize the visions i have been shown in your words. I felt as if Padme where speaking to me, and she was my mother forcing me to do my duty. I think you have really put yourself in the role of Luke Skywalker, and felt his fears, his heart, and most of all his destiny. I tip my hat to you,, Good Job! May The Force Be With You.
P.S. Looking forward to more .

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 6/26/2002 7:56:18 AM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Thanks to all of you for your kind words!

Lord Malice: If it seemed like I was really putting myself in Luke's position, that's probably because of all the times I've watched the movies. Every time Luke and Vader are in a scene together, I can't take my eyes off it becuase I'm engrossed in it, and I'm imagining what both men are thinking. (Vader is my favorite character by the way.) When Luke learns that Vader is his father, I can feel the pain and the dreaded realization of the truth. When Luke dying from the Emperor's Force-lightning, I feel the conflict in Vader rising up and the triumph as he becomes a Anakin -- a Jedi Knight -- once again. So it might not have as much to do with writing skills as it does with my love for this truly awesome saga.

Thank you for the comments!

May the Force be with you!

Author: The LingSter
Date posted: 6/26/2002 8:40:20 AM
The LingSter's Comments:

Only thing I did not like was the fact that Luke lost only his HAND to Vader, not the lower part of the arm. Only the hand. Other than that glaring problem, the story was very cool. I liked it a lot.

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 6/26/2002 8:45:17 AM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Actually, I think I mentioned several times that Luke had lost part if his ARM. I'm terribly sorry for any confusion.

Author: Silent Darth
Date posted: 6/26/2002 10:54:41 AM
Silent Darth's Comments:

Awesome. Just awesome. I would love to see more of your work. Possibly in a collection of short stories? Lucas should read this one.

Author: lightblade  (signed)
Date posted: 6/26/2002 6:30:25 PM
lightblade's Comments:

Awesome concept. Awesome execution.

I really loved this work. The variety and tact of your style and syntaz made this fanfic truly stand out as a riveting story. Your descriptions are great, and as others have mentioned, you (author) have done an excellent job of putting the reader within the mind of Luke, while also shedding some light on the thoughts of other characters. This was a fun and interesting fanfic. Thanks for writing it.

Author: Jacen Solo
Date posted: 6/27/2002 12:44:28 AM
Jacen Solo's Comments:

this is awesome. you did such a good job without doing any spoilers of the new movies. i had fun reading it thanks

Author: RighteousJedi
Date posted: 6/27/2002 12:56:07 AM
RighteousJedi's Comments:

There's not much for me to say that hasn't already been said, but WOW!!
I honestly think you should try to get a job writing full-time for Lucasbooks.
The Force is Strong With This One!

Author: Lady_Flame
Date posted: 6/27/2002 5:41:18 PM
Lady_Flame's Comments:

Very, very well thought-out story! I'm especially impressed with how you've filled in the blanks to the movie that frankly needed filled in. You paint your scenes very well; do keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more of your work.

Author: Jorg Sacul from CII
Date posted: 6/27/2002 9:35:42 PM
Jorg Sacul from CII's Comments:

What I have just read will be forever burned into my memory as part of the saga. I didn't once question a character's thought or line. Impressive, most impressive.... I look forward to reading more of your work!
-Jorg

Author: Darth Kylosss
Date posted: 6/28/2002 4:17:31 PM
Darth Kylosss's Comments:

I really liked this, it was all so... right. everything just worked, keep it up, cus it bugs me when people get stuff totally wrong. (dont say anything about my last fic)

Author: AngelQueen
Date posted: 6/28/2002 8:23:04 PM
AngelQueen's Comments:

Viari, this story was wonderful! It made me cry!

The agony that Luke faced after the events on Bespin were heartwrenching! The poor boy was just heartbroken! But having Leia there, serving as a source of light, focused Luke and pulled him away from the frightening monsters of the dark.

The scene with Luke and Padme was so bittersweet! He had only the vaguest memories of her, along with the few words that Leia used to describe her. Then, deep within his soul, he was able to truly see her for the first time. She was able to instill something precious within him, or at least, help him to find it. Hope. Hope that his father could be redeemed.

And those defiant words at the end! I was yelling, "GO LUKIE! YOU TELL HIM!" :)

Once again, this story was absolutely beautiful! I hope to see more from you!

AQ

Author: jedi_2002
Date posted: 7/2/2002 6:28:24 AM
jedi_2002's Comments:

Wow, that was amazing congratulations. The way you managed to blend it in, almsot seemlessly with the original was fantastic. Looking forward to more :)

Author: LadyinBlue
Date posted: 7/2/2002 2:35:44 PM
LadyinBlue's Comments:

I loved this! Powerful, potent stuff! Especially the scene where Luke remembers his mother! Can't wait to see more from you!

Author: Chibi Jedi
Date posted: 7/2/2002 4:33:46 PM
Chibi Jedi's Comments:

Great Job! I like how you described Luke's feelings about his dream. I had chills just reading it.

~Chibi Jedi

Author: lord damonius
Date posted: 7/2/2002 9:44:41 PM
lord damonius's Comments:

great read! One of the best fan fic reads I have read.

Author: Liquid Rhapsody
Date posted: 7/3/2002 4:15:08 AM
Liquid Rhapsody's Comments:

great story really liked how showed that anakin and vader are indeed the same person but seperate at the same time.

Author: Liquid Rhapsody
Date posted: 7/3/2002 4:15:11 AM
Liquid Rhapsody's Comments:

great story really liked how showed that anakin and vader are indeed the same person but seperate at the same time.

Author: NaGaSaDoW
Date posted: 7/3/2002 5:38:09 AM
NaGaSaDoW's Comments:

I must congradulate you on this. It is one of the best fan ficiton stories I've read in a while. You much promise as a writer and you should take advantage of your gift. Again, well done and may the Force be with you.

Author: Michele
Date posted: 7/3/2002 2:36:02 PM
Michele's Comments:

this was an excellent story in my opinion. i beleive that this could be in the actual star wars stories if they reprinted them again. this was quite enjoyable and i hope u write more.

Author: ladyyoda02
Date posted: 7/3/2002 4:55:07 PM
ladyyoda02's Comments:

This story made me shed a couple of tears!! I loved how Luke finally got to know who his mother was!! Excellent story!

Author: Yodiss
Date posted: 7/5/2002 4:25:51 PM
Yodiss's Comments:

I REALLY loved this one. i've been writing fanfics for a while, but none of them really developed. you have a real talent for writing and i hope you continue to post your SW work. Rock on!

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 7/11/2002 8:45:48 AM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Wow! Thanks so much for all your kind words, everyone! I appreciate the feedback I've been receiving. MTFBWY!!

Viari

Author: Padawan Di-Lee
Date posted: 7/11/2002 6:32:25 PM
Padawan Di-Lee's Comments:

I really love the symbolism in this fic, and the extra little interaction you gave Luke & Vader. You definitely have a flare for catching the tone of their relationship and their inner struggles. Please write some more! :)

Author: Red Dog
Date posted: 7/11/2002 8:51:16 PM
Red Dog's Comments:

Wow! This was absolutely wonderful. I had to fight tears when Padmé showed up. Thank you so much for helping to incorporate her into the stories. It was absolutely great!

Author: Frank
Date posted: 7/12/2002 10:37:13 AM
Frank's Comments:

I'm just speechless and struggling to keep from sobbing right now. This is definitely the greatest fan fic I've ever read. It combined elements from all the episodes, and I'm truly touched. I hope all who have read this magnificent piece of work, use this as an inspiration and hope for the future. Viari Skywalker, you are a great writer. I'll try to contact Lucas to allow you to be the author for Episode III. :)

Author: Fet43286
Date posted: 7/13/2002 6:10:03 PM
Fet43286's Comments:

Wow...truly amazing. I swear, even Lucas couldn't have done a better job. Hope to see more of your work!

Author: Star_Wars_Fan
Date posted: 7/14/2002 11:32:23 AM
Star_Wars_Fan's Comments:

Wow! This is a really great story. Keep up the terrific work! I can't wait to see more of your work.

Author: Anakin Starkiller  (signed)
Date posted: 7/15/2002 4:36:54 PM
Anakin Starkiller's Comments:

Very Well Done! It was an enjoyable read. Vader is quickly becoming my favorite fan fic character. The use of dream sequences was very well done.

Author: Katrina
Date posted: 7/17/2002 9:42:58 AM
Katrina's Comments:

WoW! This has to be one of the best fanfic. stories I've ever read! My favorite part was how you incorporated Anakin and Padme from the prequel trilogy into Luke's visions. Please keep up the excellent work.

Author: Ben_Max  (signed)
Date posted: 7/17/2002 3:51:10 PM
Ben_Max's Comments:

I think my favorite part of this was at the end, where Padme speaks to Luke in his dream and shows how there is still good in Vader. How he was always Anakin Skywalker, but used 'Darth Vader' to bury it. Very thought-provoking...

Author: Arriss
Date posted: 7/22/2002 10:26:31 AM
Arriss's Comments:

To tell you that you did a fantastic job is a understatement, to be sure. Other than the hand/arm confusion, it was fabulous!!!!!!!

Author: Cyndi
Date posted: 7/22/2002 1:54:48 PM
Cyndi's Comments:

Wow....your story was awesome! I loved it...made me cried when Padme showed up to give some guidance to Luke. It was such a bittersweet moment for him....to finally see his mother. I especially loved how you incorporated Anakin and Padme into the story. The dreams where Anakin comes back to face Vader...that symbolizes the conflict within Vader and in the end Anakin, the Jedi, won! Great job!

Author: ladybug
Date posted: 8/17/2002 8:51:22 AM
ladybug's Comments:

Loved this story! The conversation between Luke and Vader at the end was wonderful - the language was perfect for those two characters. Bravo, dah-ling! Good show! :)

Author: JediPug1  (signed)
Date posted: 8/20/2002 8:10:00 PM
JediPug1's Comments:

What can I say except WOW!!! That was a fantastic story. The whole thing fit so well that, if you didn't know better, you'd swear that the scenes you created were actually in the films! Great job!

Author: Raven Nyquist
Date posted: 8/30/2002 1:36:35 PM
Raven Nyquist's Comments:

This one is great because stays true to character and plot, except for one line.

"You are a fool, my son...."

I love plot-filling fanfics because there is so many ways they can make parts of a film better.

This plot-filler does a great job at making Episodes V and VI better movies.

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 8/30/2002 3:31:06 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Hmmm...

"You are a fool, my son...."

Why doesn't that line fit?

Thanks for all the comments everyone!

Author: Terra Fete
Date posted: 9/7/2002 8:30:02 AM
Terra Fete's Comments:

This is one of the best storys i've read on this site i thought you were Really good at painting the scene and i could almost see it and hear James Earl Jones's voice. It was a bit short but it was wicked!

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 9/7/2002 10:48:03 AM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Thanks Terra! Yeah, it was meant to be a shorty, but I am glad you liked it anyway!

Author: Miss Thang
Date posted: 9/15/2002 3:25:59 PM
Miss Thang's Comments:

I thought that "You are a fool, my son" line was a bit off, too. Vader, I don't think, would insult Luke that way.
BUT there is a line in the ROJ novel Vader where Vader told Luke: "Someone has filled your head with foolish ideas." So I guess it could work.
In any event, I loved this fic!

Author: Nova  (signed)
Date posted: 11/12/2002 7:05:51 AM
Nova's Comments:

Awesome, awesome story. The only thing I noticed that was really and truly off was Luke meeting Padme, because I think Luke would have made a reference to her in an attempt to pull Vader away from the Dark Side at the climax of ROTJ. Other than that, great story!

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 11/12/2002 5:07:55 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Thanks Nova! Yeah, I can't quite imagine this moment happening in ROTJ, so I guess you could kind of count this as AU, but I just get so frustrated that Luke has not learned about his mother at all really in the EU. So I thought maybe a shadowy encounter with his mother - which revealed little information, only that she had known Anakin before his fall - might satisfy my desire. I'm glad you like it though. It was my first attempt at fanfic, and hopefully my work to come will be even better! MTFBWY!

Author: Nol Tel Sete
Date posted: 12/16/2002 3:11:36 PM
Nol Tel Sete's Comments:

Okay first of all, Great piece I read it twice know and I liked both times. I think the use of the dreams was well done I've used dreams like that before. Very well done I think that it could only be concluded with the after thoughts of luke after his father saved him from the Darth sedious. Thats all cool!

Author: Shloz
Date posted: 2/20/2003 3:58:34 AM
Shloz's Comments:

Very nicely written. Except for the arm/hand mixup (for the record, Luke's hand was cut off at the wrist, not "just below the elbow"), this had the ring and feel of the actual films. You wove in the movie scenes seamlessly, and the dream sequences were very vivid and clear.

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 2/20/2003 1:15:18 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Hey all, thanks again for the wonderful comments! I really appreciate them.

I don't claim to know every detail, but I am pretty certain that Luke's arm was cut off not far below the elbow. That scene is one of my favorites, and I've watched TESB so many times. I wanted to be certain that I was accurate with the movies when I wrote this, and from watching the movie, it appears to me that it is somewhere between his wrist and elbow. Maybe my words were misleading in the story...I realize he didn't have that much cut off, but then again, I don't believe it was merely his wrist. Just wanted to get it out in the open what my view is, so as to avoid future questions on why I chose that description. :-D

Well, I guess I'm gonna have to watch TESB again and make sure! :-P Who knows, I don't want to get into a huge discussion here. I'm just glad you all enjoyed the story. So thanks!

Author: Jedi_Author
Date posted: 2/21/2003 6:17:22 AM
Jedi_Author's Comments:

this was absolutely brilliant. it almost seemed as if i wasthere, watching it all hapen. i would luv 2 read more of your work. well done!

Author: Erik
Date posted: 5/18/2003 8:05:40 PM
Erik's Comments:

This story is good as hell one of the best stories I have ever read one word comes to mind excellent.

Author: Kyp Karrde
Date posted: 8/8/2003 12:59:59 AM
Kyp Karrde's Comments:

six thumbs up ! (or, as many thumbs as your species has, if you live in that beloved galaxy far, far away.)

Favorite part? Luke's terror, his reaction to the catastrophic losses- both physical, mental, and spiritual - of ESB...the touch of him meeting Anakin was masterful.

Reminded me poignantly of "I Don't Like Sand", the masterful comic story in theforce.net comic section (just submitted by D.B. on August.)

Kudos!
Kyp

Author: Andrew Deese
Date posted: 9/17/2003 2:33:32 PM
Andrew Deese's Comments:

This is one Awesome story, and I loved it when Luke finally saw his Mother for the first time, and Padme' reminds me of Isabella in "The Lizzie McGuire Movie" and It reminded me of the song "What Dreams Are Made Of!" in both Lizzie's and Paolo and Isabella's Versions, Man this is so cute.

Author: Andrew Deese
Date posted: 9/26/2003 5:49:56 PM
Andrew Deese's Comments:

I love this Story, and before Luke saw his Mother, when He saw Anakin, something tells me,he's Like Paolo, the Bad young Italian Pop star in "The Lizzie McGuire Movie" who Lied To Little Lizzie, Because she couldn't sing, and also another character in the movie, Miss Ungermeyer was as Mean as Vader, but then she turned out to be okay. and Luke reminds me of Lizzie, because both of their names begin with the Letter L, May the force be with you

Author: Andrew Deese
Date posted: 10/17/2003 6:47:55 PM
Andrew Deese's Comments:

I Loved it 100 percent, and when Luke saw his mother, I could almost hear Natalie Portman's soft and Gentle Voice, and I was Right she does Remind me of Isabella in "The Lizzie McGuire Movie", and Darth Vader is just a Liar, like Paolo
because Vader wants to trick Luke,and turn him evil just for Darth Sidous/Emperor Palpatine and Freaky Huh?,no make that Way Freaky,No No make that Way Way Freaky, as Lizzie,Gordo,and Isabella
said,

Author: The Stormtrooper Shrink
Date posted: 2/6/2004 4:10:44 PM
The Stormtrooper Shrink's Comments:

Really, really good story. Just a comment about the hand thing that seems to be a bit of a contentious issue...In my opinion, it was at the wrist - or maybe just a little further up. It's a bit hard to see exactly where in TESB, but Luke's definitely got most of his forearm still there. Not that it really matters. It was a great story.

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 2/6/2004 4:23:20 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Thanks! Ok, I was watching ESB recently, (the whole "what exactly did Luke get sliced off" was one of the motivating factors behind editing and updating this fic in the firts place,) and the whole forearm thing -- at least for me -- comes from the scene at the very end where 2-1B is attaching Luke's new bionic limb. We see him poking Luke's hand, then we see a shot of Luke closing the lid that is located roughly 3 inches from his wrist. Clearly that means part of his forearm must have been lost, or after losing his hand Luke had to have more removed before he could get a replacement. Either way, from watching the last scene of ESB, I concluded that it was a little bit more than the wrist that he lost.

Whew! Anyway folks, that's just my take. I know it doesn't affect the story very much, but I hate to make big continuity errors. :P :) Thanks for bearing with me through that! And thanks again!

Author: Darkmoon_90  (signed)
Date posted: 2/7/2004 2:37:07 AM
Darkmoon_90's Comments:

Brilliant, totally totally brilliant! I'm sorta new round here but I've still managed to read quite a few of the fan-fics and this has to be the best yet!
Keep up the good work, I'm begging ya!
And may the Force be with you!

Author: Marajay
Date posted: 2/15/2004 5:37:18 PM
Marajay's Comments:

Holy Crap!

It is so wonderful to read classic trilogy stuff. I have missed it so much in the media circus that is Episodes I, II, and III. This was an incredible story! Please write more!

Author: Princess-Kinky
Date posted: 2/17/2004 3:01:08 PM
Princess-Kinky's Comments:

That has to be one of the truely greatest Fan-fiction I've ever read. You really captured the whole relationship with Luke and his father, and it was nice to know that Luke did get to meet his mother.

Very, very well done.

Author: Mark Jade
Date posted: 2/20/2004 7:48:27 AM
Mark Jade's Comments:

An Amazing Story.... I can't say enough about it... just fantastic.. You captures the anguish of Luke's nightmares.. Happening over and over... the use of "Dreams pass is time" was awesome especially when it was reveiled that the unknow Jedi was Anakin. Representing the good that was still in him and Luke finding in himself to fight his own battles.. to make his own destiny... 2 very good themes and a great tie in...

Bravo

Mark

Author: Darth Zamboni
Date posted: 2/27/2004 11:23:30 AM
Darth Zamboni's Comments:

An excellent story, it really fills in the thoughts that everyone knew Luke had, but never got shown on screen.

To add some more fuel to the "what all got cut off" - if you watch the sequence where Luke is falling down the shaft in Cloud City, as he is drifting into the refuse shaft there is a good shot of him with both arms up. You can clearly see that there is more than just his hand missing from his right side. Also, as was already said, the scene at the end with Too-Onebee clearly shows the mechanical "nerves" in the middle of his forearm.

Again, an awesome story.

Author: MutantJediBouer  (signed)
Date posted: 3/18/2004 10:44:38 PM
MutantJediBouer's Comments:

Wow, what an amazing story. I usually stick to prequels and Obi-Wan stories but sometimes I venture out, and this time will definately encourage me to do so again! That was amazing! You really are a Force-inspired writer and I think you could go somewhere with it. As for the whole "where-did-Luke-get-cut" deal, I agree with you and a couple others, it was a couple inches above his wrist. Anyway I need to go now, I have to look up some more of your stories, if there are any, that is....
MutantJediBauer (I know, it's spelled wrong in my nickname)
aka. Zax-Ryn Kenobi

Author: Jedi_Carin_Arco
Date posted: 5/11/2004 12:34:22 PM
Jedi_Carin_Arco's Comments:

The writing is brilliant..the themes and descritions all come together perfectly...it is unfortunate only star wars fans can appreciate such a masterpiece...YES masterpiece!
COngradulations!

Author: Sithspawn666  (signed)
Date posted: 6/25/2004 10:21:20 AM
Sithspawn666's Comments:

"I make my own destiny, Father." I love that, they ought to have included that quote in ROTJ.

Wow,this is just brilliant. I bet even non- SW fans would like it...I think you should write more stuff set during the OT, but that's just my opinion.

Author: Andrew
Date posted: 6/27/2004 6:21:41 PM
Andrew's Comments:

I learned a big lesson in this story, that Dreams are just apart of your imagination. in fact pretty good.

Author: Andrew
Date posted: 6/27/2004 6:24:55 PM
Andrew's Comments:

I also agree with "silent darth" because I also think George should read this one.

Author: Jedi Knight 72583
Date posted: 9/28/2004 4:56:02 PM
Jedi Knight 72583's Comments:

I got one word for you.
EXCELENT!!!

Author: Marjory McKenzie
Date posted: 3/2/2005 3:23:02 AM
Marjory McKenzie's Comments:

Think this was one of the best fan fics i have ever read. Big well done

Author: Darth Slaya
Date posted: 8/8/2005 11:21:15 PM
Darth Slaya's Comments:

I have read alot of the of the fan fics in this site but i only comment about the ones that i realy realy like and i have to say this is just great it is now officialy one of my favorites.

Author: Veloz  (signed)
Date posted: 1/1/2006 5:24:10 PM
Veloz's Comments:

This was really good! Great job

Author: Seeker20
Date posted: 12/13/2009 5:43:42 AM
Seeker20's Comments:

This is a nice story, consistent and well-written. You touched on ROTS material very well, and this was written three years before the debut of the film!! I love how the characters and scenes are so vivid!