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Author: ThePodSquad
Date posted: 6/16/2003 9:02:55 PM
ThePodSquad's Comments:

*sniff* That was wonderful Moony, first time I've had the pleasure of reading it. But so sweet and sad...just wonderful!

Author: Herman Snerd  (signed)
Date posted: 6/16/2003 9:08:44 PM
Herman Snerd's Comments:

There are times when being a part of the archive is so rewarding because I'm exposed to fics I might not have otherwise read. This is one of those times. I'm not the most avid reader of prequel era stories, but I'm so glad I happened across this one. Wonderful story.

Author: Bimo  (signed)
Date posted: 6/16/2003 9:20:38 PM
Bimo's Comments:

Poignant and beautiful. Cleary one of the most touching and accurate portrayals of the relationship between Qui-Gon and Obi that I've ever come across. If I had to name my favourite passages, I would probably end up quoting the entire story.

Lady Moonbeam, you cannot believe how glad I am to see this one archived :-)

Author: bobill  (signed)
Date posted: 6/17/2003 7:47:58 AM
bobill's Comments:

Wow, what mush! It's so sad seeing the council act so heartless! And Yoda, I would have thought he have SOME compassion! Now I see why Anakin broke away...

Author: Lady Moonbeam
Date posted: 6/17/2003 7:56:00 AM
Lady Moonbeam's Comments:

Let me just say that this story would never be here without help, so great thanks go to my two betas, obaona (who will never let me rest in peace without submitting) and Darth Jurious (who was a great help with tenses and clarity). Also, thanks go to Fern Withy, who made the excellent cover art. I'm thrilled to have made it in to the Archive.

I'm really glad to see that you're enjoying the story. It makes all the polishing worthwhile.

Author: LuvEwan
Date posted: 6/17/2003 11:23:45 PM
LuvEwan's Comments:

Beautiful story. I was especially moved by this line:
"He needs to walk without having to stay to my left, and fight without having to guard my back. He needs to go-he needs to be free, he needs to stop waiting for signs that will never come."

What a perfect description of Obi-Wan's plight, and Qui-Gon's internal conflict.

Wonderful, honest language. Great job! :)

Author: Destiny  (signed)
Date posted: 6/18/2003 12:18:14 PM
Destiny's Comments:

I enjoyed this story, Lady Moonbeam. Qui-Gon Jinn is one of my favorite Jedi - I always enjoy his personality and his defiant ways.

Your characterization of him - and of the guileless Obi-Wan - was beautiful.

I especially enjoyed these lines:

"It is very hard for a Jedi to remain wholly innocent. It's hard for me to even define what the word means. Certainly, I'm sure, it doesn't mean me, or anything in the carefully catalogued archives of my soul."

I never have been able to picture Qui-Gon Jinn as being completely 'whole' and 'pure'. :p

Thanks for an enjoyable read! :)

Author: JediPug1  (signed)
Date posted: 6/18/2003 7:50:33 PM
JediPug1's Comments:

Terrific depiction of Qui-Gon and of his relationship to Obi-Wan. Well done!

Author: jada_marnew  (signed)
Date posted: 6/18/2003 9:29:55 PM
jada_marnew's Comments:

Very well written, very insightful into the subtext of QuiGon and the Jedi Council.

Author: DarthyVader
Date posted: 6/19/2003 2:02:50 PM
DarthyVader's Comments:

that was so sad. how obi-wan was put down, how qui-gon can't tell him the things that are most important... down to the last sentence, i loved it!

Author: Master Rush
Date posted: 6/21/2003 7:47:52 PM
Master Rush's Comments:

Very good, It shows the Masters true fellings for the Apprentices.

Author: Valiowk  (signed)
Date posted: 6/25/2003 4:46:08 AM
Valiowk's Comments:

That was a beautiful story that accurately portrayed the relationship between Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan. By describing the limits allowed to their bond, you showed clearly the soft-hearted side of Qui-Gon that has to face up to the reality of being a Jedi. It said a lot about human relationships, and how they develop in ways that one cannot control; how there will never be any regrets to having relationships that have brought one more joy than anybody could imagine.

Thank you for a wonderful tale.

Author: obaona  (signed)
Date posted: 6/27/2003 4:32:36 AM
obaona's Comments:

I've been sadly remiss in giving this the proper comment it deserves (and that I promised).

Some stories make you cry - but this isn't one of those. It's not so simply heart-wrenching as it is moving, and I mean like an earthquake kind of moving! The idea of this story remained with me far after I read the fic. The beauty of the wording and the grace with which Qui-Gon's emotions are written stuck with me, making its way into a permenant corner of my brain. It might sound weird, but it's true - I will never think of the Jedi, Qui-Gon, or Obi-Wan in the same way again. I know I haven't since I first read this all those months ago, when I offered to beta it.

In a sense, you have even changed my perspective on the real world, simply by taking the idea of this fic - loving someone, and being unable to show it because of the rules - makes me wonder if some of us make these rules for ourselves, as unbreakable as those Qui-Gon sought to bend. I apologize for getting philosphical (or even silly), but the complexity - and truth - of the idea behind this fic make it practically impossible for me to do otherwise.

And of course, I can't forget to add how wonderfully Lady_Moonbeam wrote out this idea, made me feel it, and made me remember it. Every word and every sentence contributes to the whole, making something as satisfying as a novel, but not nearly as long . . . because it doesn't need to be with the skill in which the author wrote.

I commend the author for this wonderful piece of art. :)

Author: Blazer  (signed)
Date posted: 7/3/2003 2:04:46 AM
Blazer's Comments:

Wow, Moon... wow.

Since obaona pretty much covered everything I wanted to say (*laugh*), the only thing I should say that this piece is one of the most beautifully crafted and stunning works I have read in my life. Every line was lyrical and flowed along perfectly. I could find no fault with it whatsoever, and the insightfullness of it all just amazed me and made me re-examine everything I had every read on Star Wars, wondering if the authors of the books made the bond between Master and Apprentice as you portrayed it here.

Take a bow, you deserve it.


Author: Darth Foutzious  (signed)
Date posted: 7/8/2003 11:04:42 PM
Darth Foutzious's Comments:

Sad, but poetic and poised. Truthful in it's beauty, and well written. Keep up the good work!

Author: AshJediKnight
Date posted: 1/28/2004 6:18:37 PM
AshJediKnight's Comments:

Wow! I never thought of Qui-gon's reservement toward Obi-wan that way. It puts it all in perfect words!I've read several of your works and its all good! Keep writing!

Author: Layren
Date posted: 4/21/2004 8:28:06 AM
Layren's Comments:

Ooooh very beautiful sad short fic about Qui-Gon and how it hurts him not to be able to love. Brilliantly done! It's so nice to see stories that go inside Qui-Gon's head and do a good job.

Author: Layren
Date posted: 4/21/2004 8:28:10 AM
Layren's Comments:

Ooooh very beautiful sad short fic about Qui-Gon and how it hurts him not to be able to love. Brilliantly done! It's so nice to see stories that go inside Qui-Gon's head and do a good job.

Author: Ani-maniac
Date posted: 11/12/2004 12:21:51 PM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

It was a good story. It is obvious that you have the Jedi Apprentice series, but I have to say I disagree with your veiw of Obi-wan and Qui-Gon's relationship. To me they may not hug, but they know very clearly how much they care for eachother. Obi-wan was simply hurt by the fact that Qui-Gon agreed to take Anakin on as a Padawan so quickly. Especially since Obi-wan had to save Qui-Gon's life to finally get him to agree to take him as an apprentice. Yoda himself told Qui-Gon that if he would not choose an apprentice, then perhaps fate would choose one for him. It did. I also wanted to add that it might have been interesting to continue the story about innocense up until Qui-Gon's death, with Obi-wan's ultimate loss of innocense being Qui-Gon's death. But, I did want to compliment you on a good story, from an interesting angle. Keep writing!

Author: Gabri_Jade  (signed)
Date posted: 3/29/2005 11:56:16 PM
Gabri_Jade's Comments:

Beautiful, Moon. As always, your writing is wonderfully eloquent. :) I could really see this story happening in Qui-Gon's mind, and it adds even more sadness to his death, that all of this remained unspoken. I really enjoyed reading this. :)

Author: Renka
Date posted: 11/12/2005 9:58:20 PM
Renka's Comments:

Really good fic. It almost made me cry because I know that Qui-Gon is never going to get to tell Obi-Wan any of those things. *sniffle* I really enjoyed it.

Author: Veloz  (signed)
Date posted: 1/1/2006 7:33:46 PM
Veloz's Comments:

*sniff sniff* ok this was so sad!

I loved the description when Qui Gon says he will take Anakin as his padawan, how Obi Wan's bright eyes dimmed .. this was really touching!


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