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Author: MistiWhitesun  (signed)
Date posted: 8/10/2004 8:43:36 AM
MistiWhitesun's Comments:

I liked it very much. Very sweet… & shows that Leia had her father's spirit.

You even managed to make Obi-Wan's revelations mostly believeable, considering the context. The exception was him saying that Leia's mother had been in the Battle of Geonesis. That was a little much. Wouldn't she have been able to do the research? There was only one woman firing a blaster in that battle—the others were all Jedi. (Unless, of course, Palpatine erased all records of said woman… Makes me wonder if said woman is the reason Palpatine hated women so much…) Since Obi-Wan'd already been thinking about how he'd first known Leia's mother when she was little older than Leia herself, wouldn't he be more likely to mention the Battle of Naboo, if anything?

Just a little thought, though it took awhile to type.

Keep writing! :)

Author: bobill  (signed)
Date posted: 8/10/2004 9:21:07 AM
bobill's Comments:

Wow, great fic! I like how they held the tea party in a different language; it's something I can totally see Bail doing. I liked the irony of the ending as well, how she was so sure she would die. Very cool fic!

Author: Jedi Knight Quia Lor  (signed)
Date posted: 8/10/2004 5:32:36 PM
Jedi Knight Quia Lor's Comments:

Oh, that was neat!

I never thought of Leia meeting Obi-Wan before that day on the Death Star...but it does make sense. I liked how you portrayed Leia as a fighting spirit instead of a throughly cultured princess. Anakin definitely gave a bit of himself there. Poor Obi-Wan. It makes me cry to think of what he and Padme went through. They must have both loved the twins very much and then they both lost them. I'm glad Leia got to me him.

May the Force be with you!

((Jedi Keladry? As in Keladry of Mindelan?))

Author: Pokey1984
Date posted: 8/14/2004 10:02:03 PM
Pokey1984's Comments:

Great fic!

Most of the time, it is said that Leia never really knew Obi-Wan but if that was so, why would she send the droids to him? Good job settling that issue.

I agree with a previous comment, I also feel Obi-Wan's mention of the Battle of Geonosis was a little too casual and that Leia would have used that reference to figure more out about her mother. Although, now that I think about it, what difference would that have made? All she would learn was that her mother was a former queen and that her father was a dead Jedi. That's not really much information.

But then again, I suppose the emperor would have erased pretty much everything about either Padme or Anakin so she probably wouldn't have learned anything anyway.

Anyway, good job, I like it.

Author: Laura
Date posted: 8/17/2004 10:19:47 AM
Laura's Comments:

I truly enjoyed this story. I liked your perspective on Leia's childhood and your portrayal of her brief but meaningful relationship with Obi-Wan. I thought it was an original, believable, and touching explanation of Leia's trust for the elderly Jedi that we see in A New Hope.

Great job. Keep up the excellent work.

Author: Shorty
Date posted: 8/19/2004 4:39:54 PM
Shorty's Comments:

I really enjoyed this fic, I could hear Obi-Wan's voice saying a lot of what he said. Well done!

Author: Amidala Skywalker
Date posted: 8/25/2004 2:23:05 PM
Amidala Skywalker's Comments:

good job. really makes sense with the fact that leia knew obi-wan on the death star and so i guess it makes sense that she met him when she was younger. i really liked the part where she thought obi-wan was her father. good job. keep writing!

Author: yoda8000
Date posted: 8/27/2004 3:58:42 PM
yoda8000's Comments:

One word :awesome

Author: Blazer
Date posted: 9/8/2004 5:25:21 PM
Blazer's Comments:

How lovely! Loved the fact that Leia was already a fighter at that age than a strict princess. Wonderful premise, and dead-on characterization. Beautiful work.


Author: Thuku
Date posted: 10/21/2004 6:18:32 PM
Thuku's Comments:

Just a little nod and smile for you, Keladry, for another wonderful story. I like how you used the word "fricative," too--the linguistics major in me jumped for joy when I read it.

Author: chief77
Date posted: 2/2/2005 6:06:16 AM
chief77's Comments:


I totally enjoyed this, but thought that the last part of the story with Leia in the detention cell wasn't really required to make the story brilliant. It could have ended with "My mothers Daughter" and still been ace.

Author: blue chip casino
Date posted: 5/7/2005 7:12:36 PM
blue chip casino's Comments:

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Author: Kaiden
Date posted: 3/24/2006 2:23:50 PM
Kaiden's Comments:

This is so beautiful. I like how you characterized Obi-Wan.

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