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Author: pmochizuki
Date posted: 8/31/2004 2:48:43 AM
pmochizuki's Comments:

Absolutely hilarious! Very well written! I guessed that Qui-Gon Jinn might really have been awake but you did it very well. And the ending where Master Jinn is contacting the other Master... brilliant!

Author: DarthIshtar
Date posted: 8/31/2004 4:07:49 PM
DarthIshtar's Comments:

even if i completely guessed the ending, this was so hilarious. totally reminded me of many a camping trip with my krayt dragon Laurel.

Author: Smelly Solo
Date posted: 8/31/2004 10:01:00 PM
Smelly Solo's Comments:

very funny! i thought it was really cute! well done! :)

Author: Jedi of Imladris  (signed)
Date posted: 9/1/2004 12:00:44 AM
Jedi of Imladris's Comments:

Yay, I love this story! I read it before somewhere else (can't remember where) but it is just as good as I remember it being. I especially like the part when Obi-wan is shocked that Qui-gon was awake the whole time, perfect Obi-wan! I like the cover art as well!

Author: Lost Jedi  (signed)
Date posted: 9/3/2004 10:19:30 AM
Lost Jedi's Comments:

That was sooooooo funny! I loved it. You did a really good job on everything! You really brought out the chacters attitudes!

Author: bobill  (signed)
Date posted: 9/4/2004 12:13:31 PM
bobill's Comments:

Hilarious! It's sad when you can hear yourself making those same noises at night, though. BTW, the cover's awesome! Obi-wan looks so... funny!

Author: Darth_Pepsi
Date posted: 9/4/2004 4:36:50 PM
Darth_Pepsi's Comments:

Hey, my DAD can outsnore a Krayt Dragon, it ain't that hard. ;-)
Loved the story, and the cover art! Hope to see more from you!

Author: Obi_Kenobi_Devotee
Date posted: 9/8/2004 3:55:55 PM
Obi_Kenobi_Devotee's Comments:

Loved it on the boards, love it still. Haven't laughed so hard in to long a time. You rock!

Author: Tahi  (signed)
Date posted: 9/11/2004 6:32:24 AM
Tahi's Comments:

That was wonderful, Diane. As always, I love your use of language, and the ending was perfect. The whole thing had me in stitches, and it certainly reminded me of some of the crazy things my kids have done. Great cover art, too. Thanks for making me smile.

Author: Maggie
Date posted: 9/14/2004 8:11:54 PM
Maggie's Comments:

Diane, I loved this story - they should have you take ove the Jedi Apprentice stories! I'd love to see you write more young Obi-Wan stuff! :-) Great job!!

Author: obaona  (signed)
Date posted: 9/17/2004 6:17:09 PM
obaona's Comments:

Hilarious and well written. I loved it all - both the concept and how you executed it. ;) You got Qui-Gon down as amused mentor perfectly, and I can just picture Obi-Wan, Bant and Garen getting together and doing such a silly thing. It's always nice to read something that is humorous without pushing it, and sweet without being sugary. Great job!

Author: MissMilton  (signed)
Date posted: 10/6/2004 3:41:19 AM
MissMilton's Comments:

What better compliment than to say that I was chuckling all the way through the story? I think there should be some sort of warning about not reading this story at work -- I think I may have disturbed my colleagues a bit with my efforts not to burst out laughing. :)

Although the premise, in itself, is simple, you manage to sustain the joke for the whole story without it falling flat; given that comedy is one of the most difficult genres to write, this only goes to show how good this story is. The characters, both canonical and original, were fully realised, and I really enjoyed the rich, flowing style (it rather reminded me of PG Wodehouse). If I have one criticism is that there were, very occasionally, some slightly odd phrasings, but they in no way detracted from this very funny tale.

The cover art is really very funny too.

Author: LuvEwan
Date posted: 10/18/2004 10:12:48 PM
LuvEwan's Comments:

This is still one of my very favorite fics. So funny and realistically sweet. Wonderful job, diane.

Author: Rogue9-Horn
Date posted: 10/23/2004 11:05:22 PM
Rogue9-Horn's Comments:

That was simply hilarious! I love the sense of humor that is given to Qui-Gon Jinn..I think it's great!
Good Job!

Author: jedibobaloo
Date posted: 10/26/2004 10:18:49 AM
jedibobaloo's Comments:

Absolutley hilarious! I had my family down here asking what in the world I was laughing so hard about!

Author: Darth Dave  (signed)
Date posted: 10/27/2004 9:38:30 AM
Darth Dave's Comments:

My wife took a video of me sleeping with our newborn son, the afternoon we brought him back form hospital.
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An excellent job!

Author: Ani-maniac
Date posted: 11/10/2004 5:26:16 PM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

This was a very funny story! I laughed the whole time! I was glad to see that I am not the only one who reads the Jedi Apprentice books. (I have the whole series.) The one suggestion I have is that at one point you call Obi-wan a "red haired boy." I'd say he is more of a blond. But, it was nice to see a funnier side to Qui-Gon. I loved the story!

Author: soccerfanatic  (signed)
Date posted: 11/12/2004 6:12:12 PM
soccerfanatic's Comments:

This is a really funny story! I laughed the hole way through! Great job ;)

Author: Idrelle Miocovani  (signed)
Date posted: 11/16/2004 4:18:31 PM
Idrelle Miocovani's Comments:

Absolutely hilarious! I think my eyes are beginning to water from laughing. :) Excellent job. I wonder if my grandfather happens to be related to Master Qui-Gon...

Author: VaderLVR64
Date posted: 12/15/2004 7:39:37 PM
VaderLVR64's Comments:

I thought I had commented on this earlier! I loved it! It was hilarious and so well written! Take a bow!

Author: jabba  (signed)
Date posted: 2/5/2005 7:14:26 PM
jabba's Comments:

That was really funny when i saw 'was i loud enough?' i stared laughing it was so funny and i like the bit at the end with the comlink and the other master. in short 'well done!'

Author: Lord_Lightsider
Date posted: 5/5/2005 7:31:13 AM
Lord_Lightsider's Comments:

Great story! Gales of laughter here!

Author: me_luv_darth_squishy
Date posted: 5/15/2005 4:29:34 PM
me_luv_darth_squishy's Comments:

i liked it. funny u r.


Author: Ceprine
Date posted: 5/30/2005 4:35:11 PM
Ceprine's Comments:

That was so funny! I loved how it twisted at the end;)

Author: Kelly
Date posted: 6/6/2005 11:10:04 PM
Kelly's Comments:

Funny story, I was not expecting Qui-Gon to sit up and have planned it, it was a wonderful surprise! Great job!

Author: MechPaladin
Date posted: 7/26/2005 8:51:08 AM
MechPaladin's Comments:

Great story! I really enjoyed reading this story - It gives up some insights into the escapades of Obi Wan and other jedi padawan kids and some semblance into what live as a padawan in the jedi temple must have been like - Something which is lacking in the movies. Please write more of these stories, I'd like to read some more.


Author: captain_oblivious13
Date posted: 12/25/2005 1:47:53 PM
captain_oblivious13's Comments:

so funny i laughed so hard i cried :) Great story

Author: Veloz
Date posted: 12/31/2005 4:11:36 PM
Veloz's Comments:

This was really funny hahaha great job

Author: Raptor517
Date posted: 7/13/2006 11:36:16 PM
Raptor517's Comments:

Very hilarious, but my brother could out do Qui-Gon, the other Master, and the Kryt Dragon--combined! But I like it very much anyway. Keep writing!

Author: AngelsHalo
Date posted: 1/6/2007 11:30:50 PM
AngelsHalo's Comments:

Yeah this comments a bit late.. just thought ide tell you great job on your story. :) I've had that argument with my friends about my dad. Except he really was asleep and it shook the house. Keep it up, I really liked the story about Obi-wan and Siri but I can't remember the name of it. Your excellent on bringing out the youth of the characters.

Author: jarogue
Date posted: 8/18/2008 7:41:07 PM
jarogue's Comments:

I will destroy you....BLEUUURGH!
Well done, my good friend. It reminds me of my dad's snoring.

Author: Djoulberna
Date posted: 3/25/2013 9:13:07 PM
Djoulberna's Comments:

Ah, you commented on the prior post ! cool !Hope you have a good weekned, Cleaner Plate ! I enjoy coming here to read.Very sad about kids dying from diseases for which there is already a vaccine

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