Author: Star Traveler
Date posted: 5/2/2005 8:23:13 PM
Star Traveler's Comments:
That was cool. The medical jargon and surgery really gave a sense of tragedy and drama to the whole story. I do wonder, though, would Palpatine still be "Supreme Chancellor" or would he be "Emperor" by now?
Date posted: 5/3/2005 4:58:35 AM
That was such a cool story! I have read several fics on the same basis as that, but the medical jargon made this one the best.
Date posted: 5/3/2005 5:41:39 AM
I loved the pacing of this and my eyes nearly bugged out of my head when the medic suggested using a Jedi Healer. I knew that wouldn't go over well. This was a very innovative approach to the inevitable.
Author: Jedi Trace
Date posted: 5/3/2005 7:22:36 AM
Jedi Trace's Comments:
Thank you for the comments! :D
I'd like to thank my wonderful betas, rhonderoo and Qui-Gon Tim, for their invaluable time, effort, and encouragement. I'd also like to thank rhonderoo for the very nice cover art. You two are the best!
Date posted: 5/3/2005 8:22:41 AM
I thought this was incredibly powerful the first time I read it. And I think it even more so after reading the ROTS novel. WOW! As ever, I am a fan of your work.
Date posted: 5/3/2005 11:10:32 AM
Excellent execution of a scene that just might have been cut from the movie itself! Well done!
Date posted: 5/3/2005 5:07:55 PM
interesting...very interesting...we will be watching your career with great interest!
Date posted: 5/3/2005 5:08:02 PM
interesting...very interesting...we will be watching your career with great interest!
Author: Qui-Gon Tim
Date posted: 5/3/2005 7:29:29 PM
Qui-Gon Tim's Comments:
Excellent work as always, my love! I'm so glad you finally got this plot bunny out of your head and on the screen!
Date posted: 5/3/2005 8:49:36 PM
LOVED this! I am so glad you decided to archive it. Incredibly suspenseful and original.
Author: Nom Inal
Date posted: 5/4/2005 4:42:06 AM
Nom Inal's Comments:
Date posted: 5/4/2005 11:25:25 AM
*Wierd breathing noise* Impressive... Most impressive...
Date posted: 5/9/2005 12:26:36 PM
I loved this story when I reviewed it. Fantastic detail and prose.
Author: Andrea Jade
Date posted: 5/11/2005 10:42:35 AM
Andrea Jade's Comments:
Great job, and a good use of all the medical terms and actions. Liked the interplay when one suggest it would be better for the patient to pass on. Good work all around.
Author: Darth Avenous
Date posted: 5/15/2005 4:50:08 PM
Darth Avenous's Comments:
Cool job! I liked the part about the lung transplant in the future... I always suspected that Palpatine was keeping Vader cripled so he wouldn't try to over throw him.
Good work and MTFBWY!
Date posted: 5/18/2005 12:39:57 PM
Wow, that was pretty amazing! I'd never thought about how damaged Anakin must have been to become Darth Vader. You really made me feel for him - something that I didn't think could happen.
Date posted: 5/19/2005 9:36:00 AM
Excellent story! I work in the operating department of a hospital and the medical jargon was perfect and helped add to the sense of reality to the story. Top marks!
Author: Blue Yeti
Date posted: 5/21/2005 3:44:22 PM
Blue Yeti's Comments:
This was a very nice peice of work. The medical jargon was done very well (which is not something which can usually be said often even when the author is in the medical field) and actually was explained enough to make sense to a non-medical reader like myself.
Palpatine taking the medical team into custody was a very nice touch, and completely in character.
Is it sacrelige to say that I prefered this version to ROTS?
Date posted: 5/22/2005 8:32:39 PM
This actually fits in quite nicely with Ep. III - it might qualify as a "missing scene" now.
Date posted: 5/23/2005 7:36:47 AM
Excellent work! It was very detailed, with suitable medical jargon appropriate for such a story, yet explained in such a way that a reader unfamiliar with it would still be able to understand what it was supposed to convey.
I like the way in which you said that it would be merciful to let Darth Vader die instead of trying to fix him completely. Indeed, the pain that Vader must have felt is something that none of us could have imagined, and at this point of time, the only thing that we're left to wonder about is: did Vader want to live on?
Date posted: 5/23/2005 6:56:09 PM
Great story. Fills in the missing dialog in the movie. WOW and the movie kicks some jedi rearend.
Date posted: 5/29/2005 3:15:25 AM
Great use of medical terms and such to add professionalism. Slightly confused yet intrigued by the ending.
Date posted: 5/29/2005 7:29:52 AM
I felt like I was watching one of those televised surgery shows (which, BTW, I am a fan of). Like the POV of the med staff. I always thought they had their work cut out for them with Vader's injuries. Makes you look at him very differently -
less cyborg, more man living in life support machine. Good work.
Date posted: 6/1/2005 6:47:29 AM
Well done, I had always felt bad and sympathy for Anakin/Vader and just wished his agony would be over soon.
You pushed that beyond sypmathy and touched a side that the movie rarely touches to, the fact that Anakin/Vader is human and that he, too had feelings. Not only was he in physical pain, but emotional pain of the startling revalation that he killed his wife, a fact that he'd live with for the rest of his life. The pain of his brother, his mentor, his father-like figure now his mortal enemy.
Good Job, you brought all those feeling down this tear-stained face. Congrats!
Good Job and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Date posted: 6/1/2005 2:42:27 PM
Very well done. I liked ROTS, but felt that there should have been more medical dialogue and description of injuries instead of making it look as though Vader had been slapped together. This should have been in movie. And yes, the compassion this makes me feel is very real. what a horrible way to spend the rest of one's life! Adding how handsome the young man once was emphasizes the coldness of Palpatine. He just wants to create a machine for himself, and probably not heal him up the way light side medicine would.
Very real, very credible. I felt tears in my eyes.
Date posted: 6/28/2005 5:47:56 PM
DARN YOU!! This story just makes me want more. Very good, and thank you for your faithfullness to the story.
Date posted: 7/6/2005 6:52:54 PM
The suspense is great!
Author: Indianna Leanna
Date posted: 7/17/2005 9:29:57 AM
Indianna Leanna's Comments:
That was pretty cool. I really enjoyed how you made it relevant to our medical culture, but it was totally Star Wars. It also seemed very true to the "official" story, and I like how plausible it was to what could have happened in between scenes.
Author: Darth Slaya
Date posted: 7/30/2005 6:01:57 PM
Darth Slaya's Comments:
That was a realy cool story and so sad to know that he was hurt that bed but i wish it had gone on a little more.
Author: mara allen
Date posted: 10/23/2005 7:45:08 PM
mara allen's Comments:
That was a great story. It fit in so well with the movie, you must be phsycic. It was truly great how you made us feel sorry for him. It would have been a great thing to put in the movie because it would have twisted you around from completly hating him like you wound up doing at the end of the movie. I hope to read lots more of your stuff
Date posted: 11/17/2005 11:07:58 PM
Oh this is just wonderful and really puts a human face on the situation at hand. If only they knew what they were trying to save ;.; This tale just amplifies the tragedy of Anakin's downfall. Not to mention beautiful job with the medical details!!
Author: Roger Memb
Date posted: 11/20/2005 8:51:27 AM
Roger Memb's Comments:
Editors note: Comment removed for suspected trolling.
Date posted: 11/22/2005 12:27:15 PM
Not fast-paced enough, in my opinion. Try adding in some more frantic-ness, and rapid-fire conversation.
Also a tad short. Try lengthening it a bit; add more details and fluff.
Date posted: 12/26/2005 4:28:24 PM
Very good, very human :)
Date posted: 1/31/2006 2:22:10 PM
Great stuff! Made a nice little read-- very crisp and sharp. I liked how the doctors were believable.
Date posted: 3/21/2006 7:17:54 PM
Very interesting and powerful. The medical words really brought a sense of realism to the story. i would have loved to read more! Good Job!
Date posted: 4/30/2006 2:15:06 PM
alright but not spectacular.Wouldn't Palpatine by Emperor by now?
Date posted: 7/3/2006 9:35:22 PM
I've never read any Star Wars fan fiction before.
I think you must have just spoiled me.
I loved that story- I look forward to reading more of your stuff...
Author: John Shefer
Date posted: 7/23/2006 3:03:56 PM
John Shefer's Comments:
I tried a lot of pharmacies out there but the the gave me the best service with the best price is www.pharmacy-medicine.net you won't believe how they changed my life. thanks pharmacy-medicine i love you.
Date posted: 9/8/2006 7:07:13 AM
Wow. Very well done and intense fic. Too bad, letting that poor man go wasn't an option.
Date posted: 9/22/2006 4:11:31 PM
Very good story in concept and delivery. I particularly liked the ominous ending.
Date posted: 2/16/2007 4:36:51 PM
Date posted: 4/3/2007 12:04:36 PM
That was a really cool story and I think I know who that was. It was Anikin\Vader after his battle with Obiwan the first time
Date posted: 4/13/2007 10:24:57 PM
Great story! I liked the ending, it was really unexpected+unfair!
Date posted: 10/30/2008 8:47:14 AM
Wow, you should write about what happen to the medical team.