Date posted: 2/15/2006 6:09:13 PM
Wow. Tahts all I have to say...Damn completely gobsmacked me it was so good!
Date posted: 2/15/2006 6:38:43 PM
O My Gosh. The end...the last sentence..."You're still breathing"...wow. Just wow. I can't think of the proper words to say except "awesome."
Author: Darth Slaya
Date posted: 2/18/2006 11:00:18 AM
Darth Slaya's Comments:
*sob* oh it was so beautiful!
I love the way Obi-Wan has to deal with his guilt and I always did think that last line of his on the Death star was a taunt....ant whosers loved it it was heart touching!
Date posted: 2/22/2006 9:21:56 PM
That's so, so beautiful! The last line really seals it... Keep writing!
Author: Darth Tent
Date posted: 2/24/2006 2:57:05 PM
Darth Tent's Comments:
Quite a good story, very interesting in some parts.
Id does raise questions - if obi wan can be around him, why doesn't he just force-push him? Surely this would be better than letting the galaxy die, or placing luke in peril.
Otherwise good work.
Date posted: 3/7/2006 10:31:16 PM
Very good. Loved the last line!
Author: if you get there before i do
Date posted: 3/8/2006 5:27:25 PM
if you get there before i do's Comments:
i can hardly describe what this story dose to me and it dosent seem to bother me that obi-wan takes all the blame on himself
P.S.in my mind they'll always be brothers
Author: Belle Bayard
Date posted: 3/17/2006 11:28:55 AM
Belle Bayard's Comments:
Very well done! Shows all the sorrow Obi-Wan must have felt when things continued to go down the tubes. From being a fearsome monster, Anankin/Vader has become a tortured soul who has thrust away his better self in order to survive. Had me tearing up, this did.
Author: onyx falcon
Date posted: 4/21/2006 3:38:02 PM
onyx falcon's Comments:
beginning was a little rough,(not that I could necessarily do better) but overall, beautiful. very nicely written.
Date posted: 4/25/2006 12:11:10 AM
That was nice. I agree with that last comment, the beginning was raugh, but the ending was great. That last line got me feeling sad. I how Obi-Wan lives with the guilt, but I didn't seem to feel emotional on this one....
Date posted: 5/24/2006 9:46:45 PM
I love the double meaning of the 'you're still breathing', considering Vader's breath.
Date posted: 3/7/2007 5:14:46 AM
".... Although you saw my last words to you as a taunt in the heat of battle, my words were the last promise this master could give to his padawan. In that moment, I shed my skin for you ..."
This is absolutely brilliant writing.
Date posted: 12/19/2012 6:02:06 AM
Hi Carrie - good to hear of your campaign. I agree with you. We all need the optnrtuoipy to read some humour, lighthearted fun, romance or inspiring tales. I remember years ago when Chat, Best, Bella, Essentials and many of the other mags used to publish a range of fiction and very good it was too - those were the days eh? Good luck with the campaign. Good wishes Kath