Author: Barefoot Contessa
Date posted: 11/29/2006 2:11:04 PM
Barefoot Contessa's Comments:

Excellent story! I loved how you show both the rules and the realities of the Jedi Order. I also really liked how you gave Qui-gon a nice teaching moment with Obi-wan. And bravo on the descriptions of the state in which the two Jedi ended up in after their long mission. Very realistic...I could almost smell the odors coming of Qui-gon.

Great job!

Author: Renka
Date posted: 11/30/2006 4:07:14 PM
Renka's Comments:

Very good story, I quite enjoyed it. I particularly like Qui-Gon's last line. Also, very good descriptions. I could almost see Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan looking very out of place walking through the temple like that.

Author: Botim Waverider
Date posted: 12/20/2006 4:41:34 PM
Botim Waverider's Comments:

Yeah great! Really enjoyed the concept - even the jedi aren't always exactly as we perceive them! (If i may - minor suggestion to slightly reduce the level of description in the narrative - I didn't really want to know about QGG's pants!) I really honestly enjoyed your piece! Look forward to reading some other work. I invite my friends to provide constructive criticism, when i finally get round to posting my piece. BW

Author: SugarBant Jinn  (signed)
Date posted: 2/15/2007 7:40:27 PM
SugarBant Jinn's Comments:

I really enjoied this! it delved into a part of Jedi philosiphe that I never really thought about in depth - just took it for granted. Very well written and descriptive! good work!