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Reader Comments on "Whispers of Betrayal"

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Author: Jeff 42  (signed)
Date posted: 8/13/2001 7:26:47 PM
Jeff 42's Comments:

Another great story. Anakin's fall seems very realistic. I'm looking forward to the next episode.

Author: Saria
Date posted: 8/15/2001 6:33:14 PM
Saria's Comments:

this was great, i loved how anakin was manipulated by palpatine and how he was falling more and more to the dark side. it was everything we could have hoped for.

Author: sara
Date posted: 8/19/2001 11:37:43 PM
sara's Comments:

wonderful! i've followed this series closely and this newest installment did not disappoint. it's fascinating to watch Anakin's fall, and you tell it so beautifully. very nice job!

Author: Nairana
Date posted: 8/20/2001 5:39:36 PM
Nairana's Comments:

Wow! I hope Mr Lucas's version is even close to as good, moving, and believable as this!
It's fantastic!

Author: Mcily Nochi  (signed)
Date posted: 8/21/2001 12:29:13 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

Absolutely chilling.

Author: Nikki
Date posted: 8/26/2001 9:29:23 AM
Nikki's Comments:

Another great addition to this story. Please continue!!!! Could we see more of Obi/Ami next time? I love it!!!

Author: Newb With A Cause
Date posted: 9/9/2001 7:33:26 PM
Newb With A Cause's Comments:

i know im a month late, but i just went to this site today and read both of your stories. They are fantastic, if only YOU could have wrote episode one.

Author: micsn peep
Date posted: 9/17/2001 9:02:17 AM
micsn peep's Comments:

I thought this was good.You can see the good and the bad in Anakin.

Author: mysterywhiteboy8
Date posted: 9/17/2001 10:47:56 AM
mysterywhiteboy8's Comments:

the part with plo koon was great. excellent job.

Author: jeeves
Date posted: 3/1/2002 6:51:01 PM
jeeves's Comments:

i thought anakin's conversation with plo koon, especially the line "what led me down this path" was a little too...sincere? revealing? it seemed to me to imply that he realized that he was going down the wrong path. but as quiller is head and shoulders above most other fan fic authors, i still give this a 10.

Author: Mizhnari Windu
Date posted: 3/24/2002 3:10:27 PM
Mizhnari Windu's Comments:

Another MASTERPIECE!! How much must an individual create greatness before it is fully realized?? I'd like to see you reach the status you deserve and get paid well for it. Rarely am I in contact with a fellow genious, 8^) . Thanks again.

P.S. You should write a story about the JEDI ACADEMY that Luke created and introduce a very FORCE strong character with great lineage, ME!

MIZHNARI WINDU (pronounced M,long i,jh,n,long a,r,ee)

Author: Kara
Date posted: 5/20/2002 7:30:09 PM
Kara's Comments:

Definite wow. Amazing fic. I liked this vision of how Anakin will spiral down the the path to the Dark Side, and the irony of the fact that the Emperor thinks Padme will mean little to them. Awesome job here. Very well written.

Author: PadmeAmidalaSkywalker
Date posted: 6/2/2002 9:47:11 PM
PadmeAmidalaSkywalker's Comments:

Wow very well portrayed, but what will happen with Padme and Anakin? he must find out that Padme really loves him and not Obi-Wan! have you written a sequel?????

Author: Barissa
Date posted: 10/10/2002 7:50:55 AM
Barissa's Comments:

What? No Niggling? Awww Shucks! I like it, but I want more P/OW stuff!!! Your last one was moving!!!!!!!!!!! Not bad, but Georges' E.3 will have some living up to do!

Author: Anakins_Angel
Date posted: 11/1/2002 11:53:02 AM
Anakins_Angel's Comments:

This was absolutely great. I love it. Ive only read one preqel though.

Author: Jules
Date posted: 12/7/2002 10:48:06 AM
Jules's Comments:

No tbad...not bad...a true swirl of emotions. Good story.

Author: Alien_Jedi  (signed)
Date posted: 1/15/2003 11:39:45 PM
Alien_Jedi's Comments:

Wow. I love how you portrayed Anakin. You showed his rage perfectly. I also loved the Koon battle. The one line that really got o me was "He had no desire to see another body disappear before his eyes." That was so cool! It also implied that it was just ANOTHER Jedi, that he was bored of seeing all those disappearing bodies, and all. It was cool how Anakin, at the end, almost tricked Koon and certainly tricked me into believing he would leave without him. VERY COOL!

Author: Jedi Dax Jentor
Date posted: 1/27/2003 3:18:21 PM
Jedi Dax Jentor's Comments:

Again…Amazing. I could feel Vader’s anger. Incredible writing. Incredible story.

Author: jedilittlebee
Date posted: 4/15/2003 3:42:11 PM
jedilittlebee's Comments:

Loved this one too. How can Anakin not see through Palpatine. Planting those thoughts in his head about Obi and Padme. And slamming him with pain to cap it all off. Not exactly the actions of a trustworthy, truthful person!

Author: Saberist
Date posted: 6/3/2003 9:07:28 PM
Saberist's Comments:

Some Things bother me. There is an awful lot of /physical/ sense equivalency (smelling, hearing etc.) in Quiller's writing.

I would think that The Force enhancement would be more... Mental.

And yet, with either the post-cog imagery suggestion or scent would come a definite awareness of Padme's maternity and Anakin's failure to note this leaves more doors closed than open, IMO.

It's also very clear that the REAL 'culprit' here is The Force (fate, plotline, whatever) in that Plo Koon should give away so much in his statements which would betray a 'friend of the Council' while Valorum himself would fail to mention (or be mindstripped of) the ONE THING, that would both drive Anakin completely over the edge and give him -rational pause- to think about his suspicions over 'who, what, where' in terms of Kenobi and Amidala's relationship.

For most men will not seduce pregnant women.

Not merely is the physical attraction dulled but there is a definite perspective shift towards more tender-protective than tender-fierce elements of (standoff) emotion. Regardless of what is suggested to have come before.

As I start on #3, I hope Quiller has some interesting plot twists to explain the late-understanding effects of a discovery of this magnitude and 180` polarity shift.

Kenobi might use the sudden shock effect of a 'known' truth as a weapon against his apprentice, pulling the bathtub plug out of his Darkside rage.

Or Anakin might gain some further RAGE to think that this supposed new union has resulted in children not his own.

Or Anakin might inspire such rage in his MASTER as to cause the latter to once again 'slip the leash' of his emotions and use Darkside elements to defeat his apprentice. With the result that in defeating Anakin, 'in the pit of boiling lava' he destroys Anakin's memory of the event (and his knowledge of his children) all over again.

Perhaps with potential direct-witness consequences to Padme's feelings about one or both Warriors (seeing Anakin surface in a desparate realization of love only to be slaughtered by Obiwan in a cold determination of pragmatic murderous impulse would be /hard/ to accept).

Anyway, good work and I hope the final segment is as worthy a good read as the first two have been.


Author: MutantJediBouer  (signed)
Date posted: 4/8/2004 8:13:08 PM
MutantJediBouer's Comments:

I love your stories. They are always so.... Captivating. They just seem to draw you into it and hold on untill the end. It's amazing. I must have read Secrets and Secrets Unveiled at least 3-4 times each. Sometimes you can also find a story that had mutilated a character's personality, ie. making them constantly do or say things they wouldn't. You never seem to do that. Obi-Wan is my favorite character and I'm happy to say that you've kept him to be himself. THANK YOU!! Anyway, I'm off to read the next one!
MutantJediBauer (I know, my nn is spelled wrong...)
aka. Zax-Ryn Kenobi

Author: Gertrude
Date posted: 8/7/2004 6:00:14 PM
Gertrude's Comments:

Great! You can see one thing to make Anakin fall to the dark side, but it was... unreal for that situation to happen in the star wars story. I mean really. Let's be honest Obi-Wan would not fall in love with Padme.

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