Date posted: 4/21/2008 5:59:34 PM
I have a lot of people to thank. First, Amidala_Skywalker for pressuring me to write this fic in the first place, and then beta reading it. obaona for being my most loyal reader, cover artist, beta reader, and review-writer. This fic would have stayed buried, reader-less without her. Gabri_Jade for beta reading and readying this fic for archival. Carrkicksdoor for betaing, also. *hugs* to you all a million times over
And a big hugs the archive staff for putting up with both me and this fic for so long. :p
Author: Idrelle Miocovani
Date posted: 4/21/2008 6:53:41 PM
Idrelle Miocovani's Comments:
Pallas-Athena -- It's been a while since I've read and commented on a fic in the archives (I know, I know -- it's bad! The fics here are always so amazing!), but when I saw the update, the title of your fic caught my eye and I had to start reading. Considering its length, I thought that I would take it stages, but I read it all in one go -- and I'm very glad that I did.
I'm not sure if I can really express what I great fic I think this is. I love your OCs and the unusual, but very realistic romance, between them. The poignancy of the fact that we know that Vader is going to catch up with Daven and kill him at some point... and the beauty of the fact that Nyssa is Mara's mother. I had my suspicions about that, considering Nyssa's attitude and Daven's features, and I was smiling when I read the last line that mentions Nyssa's last name.
Absolutely gorgeous fic. Congratulations on getting it archived -- I'm very glad it did, otherwise I wouldn't have gotten a chance to read it!
Date posted: 4/21/2008 8:49:21 PM
You already know the many reasons I love this fic, Atty, and it's still one of my favorites. Glad to see it in the Archive where it belongs. :D
Date posted: 4/22/2008 4:29:47 AM
I saw the ending coming, but it was a well-crafted story nonetheless. :)
Date posted: 4/22/2008 11:23:10 AM
As a reader and occasional writer, I have delusions of grandeur. I read authors who have been in the business for years or decades, writing amazing stories with brilliant characters and well thought-out plots. I read them and I think..."I can do that." Granted it's the 'I can do that' of a novice runner looking at an Olympic athlete's 100M dash time; when I try it, I need an ambulance before I get half way to the finish line. It's all I can do to huddle in the fetal position to and try to breathe.
What you wrote...I can't do that. Your story was better than damn near anything on my overburdened bookshelf. Your characters are real enough to touch, completely believable, and they carried the plot along PERFECTLY. You put in just the right amount of details, backgrounds and descriptions.
The ONLY thing I wasn't completely crazy about was when Nyssa was drawing lazy designs on Daven's chest. But sometimes love is a cliche` that propogates more cliches, and my dinky, little nitpick is just my juvenile way of trying to protect what's left of my own shattered ego.
What more can I say? "I shall follow your career with great interest." Super, mega, ultra-good story. Keep up the great work!
Date posted: 4/22/2008 4:15:14 PM
Well, that was just gut-wrenchingly sad. A very difficult read.
And therefore awesome writing.
Author: Master Senya Analandi
Date posted: 4/22/2008 5:20:30 PM
Master Senya Analandi's Comments:
Wow. That's all I can say! I can perfectly immagine this story in a full-length book. I'm a fan of angst and what I call "morbid" endings--where one or more of the main characters die--and I absolutely was stunned! Keep up the work!
Date posted: 4/23/2008 10:51:54 AM
Wow. Didn't see the end coming. Probably should have though ^^
A shining example of good OC writing. Kudos.
Date posted: 4/24/2008 5:59:41 PM
What a great story! I could not wait to get to the end, and then when I did, it was not what I expected. Well done!
Author: Darth Angel
Date posted: 4/28/2008 12:39:24 AM
Darth Angel's Comments:
It has been far too long since i came on this site and read.And by God Allmighty,this grand work did me justice!!!.Its beautiful,sad,all these words of praise are all understatements on my behalf.while i was reading this fic,the thought crossed my mind to put on "because the night" by 10000 Maniacs.And it brought that whistfull lump to my throat.Thank you.i would gladly read more of your works anytime.
Author: Arwen Skywalker
Date posted: 4/28/2008 7:26:12 PM
Arwen Skywalker's Comments:
THAT WAS GOOD!!!!!! Oh, I had no idea, none at all. I loved them both, great characters, I loved the story, and the ending was amazing! Whoohoo!
Author: Jim Nilo
Date posted: 5/1/2008 12:50:38 PM
Jim Nilo's Comments:
Wow, that was really good and while I had just a hint of an inkling from character decriptions, the ending shocked me. Well done, I enjoyed it completely!
Date posted: 5/4/2008 5:23:10 PM
I absolutely loved this story. It is the best fan fiction I have read so far. The characters are so likable, and I love the way both characters grow and evolve as the story progresses. I also love the realism of the inevitable, tragic ending, that is, yet, hopeful at the same time. Incredible.
I would love to see an "Alternate Reality" version with more adventures of these two characters because they are such a joy! Or, as someone suggested, a full-length novel of this story. Great work. You are a very talented writer.
Author: Phantom Jedi
Date posted: 5/6/2008 6:52:06 PM
Phantom Jedi's Comments:
Oh! I loved the story even without the absolutely perfect twist at the end. Wonderful!
Date posted: 5/18/2008 1:25:27 AM
I really enjoyed this. I liked Daven as a jedi, and the story of the love that developed between him and Nyssa was heartwrenching.
Date posted: 5/19/2008 10:29:23 PM
Oh. This was brilliant and I nearly didn't read it for the OCs in it. They were both real people, especially the Jedi. About halfway through, I could see the twist in the end coming but by then I didn't mind because I knew it would be the good to come out of their tragedy.
Date posted: 6/8/2008 11:06:18 AM
That was amazing!!!!! I really liked reading it. The ending I didn't like but that was because I really wanted both of them to live. I really want you to keep writing more. A sequel would be excellent! I have to show all my friends this story and I think you have inspired me to write a story of my own. I love the cover of the story it was really awesome and well done.
Date posted: 6/11/2008 8:26:28 PM
A wonderful story that, I dare say, was relished in as few sittings as I could manage... which, is to say, far too many.
Every moment made me smile, laugh, cry, or shout, sometimes more than one of those at once! It is a wonderful, truly. I am amazed that you don't write profic... but if you did, I doubt we would have been blessed with this story, am I right?
If I weren't so lazy and busy, I'd write an entire review... but I am.
So, until I see another of your stories, this will be my favorite Star Wars fanfic. Ever.
Date posted: 10/19/2008 11:07:59 PM
i saw that jade bit at the end
(kinda ruined it)
very good otherwise
great endidng but sad
Date posted: 11/28/2008 4:59:17 AM
Absolutely wonderful story, written beautifully. The story flowed so naturally, the characters were perfect, and I loved them so much. The bittersweet ending was intriguing. I think I am going to look for more fics from you :) Great work, you are very talented.
Date posted: 12/30/2008 8:31:05 PM
I have not commented in the Archives for years, but your story was a wonderful read. Please continue to write, you have quite a talent!
Date posted: 3/20/2010 2:03:56 PM
A magnificent story...I read this tale and found myself thoroughly riveted :). The story was perfect, emotionally moving characters with a heart-wrenching plot. Though I wish they could have both lived, I am a sucker for happy endings and passionate romances, though i rarely write them myself >_<. Anyway, I loved this story and I hope to enjoy more of your literary masterpieces. May the Force be with you...(couldn't help myself)
Date posted: 2/11/2011 5:32:33 AM
I was happy at first but then I remembered that Mara didn't remember anything about either of her parents and she was the emperor's hand for most of her life