Date posted: 8/20/2001 5:54:22 PM
Date posted: 8/20/2001 7:09:42 PM
GREAT! as soon as i saw this i know it would be great. What i would love to read is more about mara's traniing, and having flash backs and such, i think you should give it a whirl! I loved the sittuation also, great story! I loved, great, THE BEST! (It would be nice if it were longer though, would love to see what happend!..)
Date posted: 8/21/2001 1:10:32 AM
Not bad. But I prever the Version of "The Last Commandment". I think Maras parents were not killed, but they must let hechild go with Palpatine.
Author: Mcily Nochi
Date posted: 8/21/2001 11:51:05 AM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:
Great! A wonderful glimpse into Mara's childhood, and her mother.
Palpatine was unflinchingly evil -- perfect.
Author: thrawn's lackey
Date posted: 8/21/2001 6:23:51 PM
thrawn's lackey's Comments:
good story. i also enjoyed the how the emperor was so cold and unforgiving. i just didn't understand the necessity of mentioning the "ample breasts." what's up with that?
Date posted: 8/21/2001 6:25:29 PM
A story to make your heart pound. I enjoyed the character development of Mara's mother and the driving pace of the story. Very good.
Author: Mizhnari Windu
Date posted: 8/22/2001 5:26:11 PM
Mizhnari Windu's Comments:
As with the others my only complaint us that it should be long. Damn good story!
Author: Mari Lana
Date posted: 8/22/2001 8:09:18 PM
Mari Lana's Comments:
Amazing story! I was captivated from start to finish...just wish it were longer. It would be great to see what happened as Mara got older.
Date posted: 8/23/2001 7:36:05 AM
Marvellous! I'm a big fan of Mara, even got her haircolour (fm Mother nature that is). Would like to hear more about what happened later, training, etc.
Author: Indianna Leanna
Date posted: 8/25/2001 5:10:56 PM
Indianna Leanna's Comments:
i loved your story! i especially liked the part that hints towards Padme, Obi-wan and Luke on the ship with them!
you are such an amazing writer! i think you will be published one day! I really hope you write more about Mara's life,
and you keep up the amazing work!
Date posted: 9/1/2001 4:03:12 AM
Not much that hasnīt been said before, but I LOVE IT! Especially the hint towards Padme and Owi-Wan with the Skywalker-Twins. Only bad thing is that there isnīt much of a chance that Mara will remember anything about her parents, but maybe youīll write a story for that as well...?
Author: micsn peep
Date posted: 9/17/2001 8:30:07 AM
micsn peep's Comments:
Palpatine is evil. I hate palpatine. Write another story where Mara punches him for making the trooper kill her mum.
Author: Mark Jade
Date posted: 9/18/2001 8:55:20 AM
Mark Jade's Comments:
Great story... the inference of Obi-Wan and Luke was amazing.. I could picture it in my mind easily.. the ship being rocked.. panic spreading.. good naration.. my only comment is at the last part.. When palpatine is inquiring about the children and the sex.. Luke would be 4 since he is 2 years older than Mara approximately.. but other then that the story is sound and very entertaining... I agree with most of the others.. you could easily expand the storyline to include how they come to be on the transport ship.. where they got on, etc... Good Job!
Date posted: 9/18/2001 1:43:36 PM
since i read the Thrawn Trilogy, i always wondered who is mysterious Mara Jade?where did she
come from? and i, like most people before me, think that you should write more about training.
Date posted: 11/11/2001 2:21:27 PM
Lovely story, very sad yet keeping a tone of hope.
I enjoyed it very much.
Date posted: 11/24/2001 9:17:45 PM
Wow! I love how you tied in Amidala and Obi-Wan and the baby twins with baby Mara. It was very sad, but also very good! Three cheers!
Date posted: 2/26/2002 5:25:50 PM
This is an awesome story, even though it's sad. The plot is well though of and well written. I would love to see another story like this that takes place when Mara is a teenager, and then gets older. It would also be interesting to see Mara's reaction if she found out Palpatine killed her mom, based on this story.
Date posted: 3/6/2002 5:20:32 PM
I thought that you did a great job with this story. As with everyone else, I would love to see more stories on Mara's life as she gets older.
Date posted: 3/19/2002 3:45:54 AM
A really, really, really good story! I would be delighted if you wrote a contunuation.
Date posted: 4/30/2002 1:01:19 PM
Pretty good actually, first fanfict i've made a comment towards.
Date posted: 6/9/2002 8:07:21 AM
Author: Salme' Naberrie
Date posted: 7/19/2002 6:47:04 AM
Salme' Naberrie's Comments:
WOW! What a wonderful piece of writing. I am only disappointed by the fact that there isn't MORE!!! This is my first time writing a comment on the fanfic I've been reading, and I'm most impressed with this one. More, more!!
Author: Star Wars Phreak
Date posted: 10/9/2002 3:43:45 AM
Star Wars Phreak's Comments:
Pretty good. . . Kinda short but still cool I guess. Be nice if you made a continuation or whatever.
Author: karma K
Date posted: 11/30/2002 9:11:14 AM
karma K's Comments:
This was an excellent story. Too bad it isn't longer, since Mara Jade is my fav Character, I've always wondered about her past...
Date posted: 12/7/2002 10:30:19 AM
Lovely. Not the way I had pictured it, but a pleasant enough story to read.
Date posted: 1/4/2003 5:38:41 AM
This was really good. I could see every detail in my mind clear as day. Pally is one evil jerk, and you got him down just right. I can just see that sicko gasing small childern. It's a credit to Mara's raw determination that she's even sane. You did wonderfully with this and should be proud of what you have done.
Author: Kyp Karrde
Date posted: 2/18/2003 11:09:54 PM
Kyp Karrde's Comments:
Lovely. I would've preferred to leave Mara's mother nameless - I'm sure Zahn will eventually (hopefully - his stories and books are the best SW fiction, hands down) come out with the whole story - but I recognize one of my favorite characters in the 2 year old Mara! And that chance meeting with Padme, Obi Wan and the twins was pure delight. Good work.
Author: Jedi Dax Jentor
Date posted: 4/4/2003 2:42:59 PM
Jedi Dax Jentor's Comments:
Nicely written. Enjoyed the look at this part of Maras life.
Author: Zane Marit
Date posted: 7/11/2003 1:47:44 PM
Zane Marit's Comments:
Great story...I only have one question...You started to go into who Maras father was but did not answer that other than he was dead. Do you plan on expanding on this. Perhaps new stories featuring Maras parents or Maras youth...I am getting ideas already lol.
Author: The Stormtrooper Shrink
Date posted: 2/15/2004 5:14:50 PM
The Stormtrooper Shrink's Comments:
That was really something. I didn't see - was this story AU? If so, I haven't a problem. If not, well, Mara was taken from her parents who although were not happy about it, did let her go *and* she was old enough to talk.
Anyway, great story - I loved the meeting with Obi and Padme - good idea. But then - Luke'd be younger than Mara... Oh well. Doesn't matter. Good story nonetheless
Date posted: 5/7/2004 5:31:27 AM
Very strong and very impressive story, despite the shortness. Loved the chance meeting with Obi-Wan. Palpatine's order to kill everybody made me shudder.
Author: Jaded Eyes
Date posted: 5/17/2004 4:49:30 PM
Jaded Eyes's Comments:
That was great! Really well thought up.
Date posted: 4/22/2005 12:20:25 AM
Such a beautifully written story- I loved the way Mara's mother spotted Obi-Wan and Padme, but it was so sad the way the children and Mara's Mother died!
Date posted: 2/26/2007 9:14:28 PM
"What i would love to read is more about mara's traniing, and having flash backs and such, i think you should give it a whirl! I loved the sittuation also, great story! I loved, great, THE BEST! (It would be nice if it were longer though, would love to see what happend!..) " amen that basically says it all
Date posted: 7/29/2013 7:11:18 AM
Wishing you the best of luck with your endeavor, Matt AND anosxuily awaiting my 1st edition autographed copy! You are The Light Jedi is The Way.