Date posted: 10/29/2009 3:57:41 PM
Good story, excellent idea on the plot. Some of the sentence structures could be re-done, however. Some of it seems clumsy. Also, one paragraph ends with Obi-Wan pledging to himself to keep her safe from Tusken Raiders, but when she leaves he continues his meditation instead of following her. Thanks for the story, and again, great plot idea. I can't wait as the canon sources start to fill in the Imperial Era.