Date posted: 9/25/2001 1:05:46 AM
I was lucky enough to read this when it was first put up on the JC Fanfic boards. I loved it then and love it as much now. I recommend this.
Date posted: 9/25/2001 4:10:13 AM
This was really great! I liked how all the movies and books and junk realy tied together so neatly. I would reccomend this to anyone.
Author: Jane Jinn
Date posted: 9/25/2001 9:59:28 AM
Jane Jinn's Comments:
A very creative and thought-provoking story, excellently written! I especially loved the part where Qui-Gon said that he would be a very inaccurate copy if he only did what he was expected to do. You really captured both characters well.
Date posted: 9/25/2001 6:03:31 PM
I don't usually have time to read the fan fiction, but I try to take a peak every now and then. This is an awesome story. It wonderfully shows how humorous Qui-Gon is. I love Qui-Gon's reply: " Allowed, but strongly discouraged." Sounds like my school or something. So many things are allowed, yet very highly discouraged. Great job!
Date posted: 9/25/2001 6:55:28 PM
The prophet met the future hero, an inspiring and fascinating story.
I think we, many fans, all had dreamed about it, but Marnie did bring it into reality.
Date posted: 9/25/2001 8:38:59 PM
Excellent story! Well written and keeps you on the edge of your chair.
Author: Jedi 2-B
Date posted: 9/26/2001 1:04:56 PM
Jedi 2-B's Comments:
Nice little story. I always thought it was too bad Luke never met Qui-Gon. Good descriptions of both of them, and wonderful scenic imagery, too.
Date posted: 9/27/2001 9:53:37 AM
I thought this was great! really amusing, characters true, and well written.
Author: Mcily Nochi
Date posted: 9/27/2001 11:04:08 AM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:
Hmmm, interesting. I, too, have wondered how Luke and Qui-Gon would get along. Now we know! Very gfood story, I liked it a lot. But I don't think it's very plausible. It might have worked better if Qui had appeared in a dream or something. On the toher hand, R2-D2 and C-3PO are merely machines, yet they have personality. So maybe it worked after all.
Author: Jedi Knight So-Var Leet
Date posted: 9/27/2001 7:12:12 PM
Jedi Knight So-Var Leet's Comments:
This story, while short, amazed me with it's ability to turn the entire Star Wars universe upside down with it's predictions. Very well done.
Author: Belinda Kyle
Date posted: 9/28/2001 6:06:57 AM
Belinda Kyle's Comments:
This is one of the finest fan fiction stories I've ever read. Marnie, you have written the characters well and shaken some basic assumptions about the course of history in the Star Wars universe. Any story that makes you think that much is a wonderful thing. Thank you.
Author: Prince of Alderaan
Date posted: 9/28/2001 7:59:56 AM
Prince of Alderaan's Comments:
The concept of Luke meeting Qui-Gon had potential,
but this story was so far-fetched it didn't work for me at all. Luke seemed almost bitter and a little out of chracter. The thing about Obi-Wan being wrong in what he did with Luke didn't sit well with me, either. It's clear Obi-Wan and Yoda decided on the best course of action in regards to Luke, and I just cannot see Yoda agreeing to make any Jedi act out of hatred.
Also- and I hate to point out things like this - but there were several spelling errors that could have been caught with a simple spell-check on any computer. I read the fic here because TF.N holds a much higher standard than any other FanFic site. Spelling mistakes should not be tolerated. I'm not blaming you, the author, for the errors. It's extremely difficult for a person to proof their own work, which is why TF.N demands each story be checked by two Beta Readers before. You need to contact the people who did the Beta and tell them they did a poor job.
Other than that, the writing was very good, and there were some great one-liners.
I'll give it a 7 out of 10 for a very good effort and some interesting ideas.
Date posted: 10/2/2001 8:38:21 AM
I just thought I'd defend my beta readers here. They were extrememly
thorough and dedicated. The fic went through a spellchecker. I think
the 'spelling mistakes' which may be irritating some people are actually
a result of my nationality. I'm British and use British spelling -
so things like colour, honour, axe, sabre, centre, metre, valour etc
would actually be spelled right.
I was fortunate enough to have two extremely good beta readers and would
like to thank them for doing a really professional job on this.
Thanks to Jane Jinn and Quiller!
Author: micsn peep
Date posted: 10/2/2001 10:21:59 AM
micsn peep's Comments:
WOW! I really liked this. one of the best ff`s ive ever read! Write more!
Author: Art Farliner
Date posted: 10/3/2001 4:14:33 AM
Art Farliner's Comments:
Not bad, not bad at all...exept that I do not think that Holocron can be made after the death of a person. As i understood, holocrons was imprinted by "personality" of a certain Jedi/Sith while they still lived. Besides, as someone already menthioned, I do think that Luke was presented as too bitter....although that depends on a "certain point of view" of author. Overall, nice read.
Date posted: 10/3/2001 5:01:47 AM
I thought it was pfg(pretty good) I only wish the dialogue between the two would have included such characters as Mace Windu, and Darth Maul. I think Qui-Gin also should have made referance to Luke's Deraly departed mommy the Queen/Senator Amidala. I like to read good fanfic, I guess i wish it had been a little longer.
Author: Master Duurk
Date posted: 10/4/2001 12:18:09 PM
Master Duurk's Comments:
Good story, with only a few spelling and grammatical errors. Some of the best quality I have seen on here, and very thoughtful. You did divert from some of Luke's personality as seen in the later books; he seemed a bit rash. Other than that VERY well done.
Date posted: 10/5/2001 6:57:26 PM
Author: Sue Parsons
Date posted: 10/6/2001 10:32:22 PM
Sue Parsons's Comments:
An absolutely outstanding story. Tremendous sense of author's voice - uniqueness - terrific use of language, imagery, and characterization. Thanks for sharing it.
Date posted: 10/8/2001 6:57:30 AM
This is a great story! It accuratley potrays the difference between Qui-Gon's and Luke's personalities. Before I read this, I thought that maybe Luke and Qui-Gon's characters would work well together. This story proves it.
The scenes were very well described. I felt as though I was there watching the whole thing! This is such a great story! Excellent job, Marnie!
Date posted: 10/12/2001 11:01:44 AM
This is a very nice FanFic.
It was very descriptive and easy to understand.
Author: Belle Bayard
Date posted: 10/18/2001 5:04:17 AM
Belle Bayard's Comments:
Very well done. I am assuming this is well after ROTJ into the EU (regarding the NJO Luke's struggling with & references to Callista) and therefore, Luke's character has evolved beyond the simple farmboy or even the Jedi we see in ROTJ. Given the whims of the Force and Qui-Gon's strong personality it's not so farfetched that a bit of his Force spirit seeped into the holographic image recorded before his death. That most likely would account for his knowledge of some things such as the fact he no longer existed on the material plane. I really like it (Brit spellings and all, hehehe...) :)
Author: Amysthist Saber
Date posted: 10/21/2001 10:12:16 AM
Amysthist Saber's Comments:
After much consideration, I rate this Fan Fic a 10. Excellent Work.
Author: Darth Rayl
Date posted: 10/29/2001 8:41:02 PM
Darth Rayl's Comments:
In an odd sort of way, this story worked for me... I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes from here. It would be interesting to see the two of them go on some sort of adventure or quest together, all the while discussing their memories of Ben and learning from one another-- Luke from an older, more experienced Jedi Master, and Qui Gonn from one who has had to live with the consequences of his (Qui Gonn's) actions and decisions regarding Ben and Anikin.
Author: Bria Jinn
Date posted: 11/1/2001 7:42:13 AM
Bria Jinn's Comments:
I really think that this story portrayed Qui-Gon
the way he would be if it was a peaceful time. I
really like the tie in with Luke. The two make an
unruly pair. But there is definatly quit a few things
that Luke could learn from Qui-Gon, and in return
Qui-Gon from Luke. I also strongly liked that Qui
was able to defy the laws of normal holograms, and
act somewhat like a normal person. Overall this was
a very well written fic.
Date posted: 11/1/2001 9:09:25 AM
Date posted: 11/4/2001 3:07:04 AM
I'm glad this was the very first Star Wars fanfic I've EVER read. It was incredibly satisfying. I hope there are many more stories this engaging out there. Wonderful story.
Date posted: 11/14/2001 12:49:53 PM
I really enjoyed this - I thought it worked well. I also liked seeing British spellings, though after reading so much on the WWW and coding HTML, I'm starting to think that 'color', 'saber' and 'center' look correct.
Date posted: 12/5/2001 11:17:14 AM
A terrific story. the way that it written sounds quite believable given the material and the actual idea is a great one. i must givew this 10 out of 10
Date posted: 12/18/2001 8:09:21 AM
The new cover is beautiful! :) It is a perfect match for the wonderfully written story. :)
Date posted: 12/25/2001 7:40:05 PM
It was an incredible story. I found it very believable and well put together. It flowed nearly flawlessly from one point to another, which is a hard thing to accomplish. The only thing that was missing, was more plot line. It lacked any excitement which really catches a reader's eye. Otherwise it was fantastic. Eight out of ten for wonderful story.
Date posted: 12/27/2001 9:33:00 AM
Very nice story! The imagry you capture in your writing is absolutely incredible, even poetic at times. How I wish I could write like that!!
And VERY intriguing perspectives on Jedi philosophy and the possible cause of their downfall. A lot of that rings true in my mind and fits perfectly with how I imagine Qui-Gon would assess it. Your characterizations were spot on, in my opinion.
Date posted: 3/5/2002 12:48:24 PM
I gave this story a 10 out of 10, and this is why: I've often wondered what Qui Gon would have thought about the effects his actions had on the galaxy. Now, to some extent we know. The story was very well written and I thought the bitterness of Luke was believeable as well as warranted. Not only is this man (Qui-Gon) responsible for Darth Vader in some way, but he's bad mouthing Luke's two teachers. I think where the story ended is a good place, and I don't think we should see the holocron of Qui-Gon and the Jedi Master Luke on any adventures. That's just my opinion. Anyways, I thought the story was great and look forward to more from you.
Date posted: 4/2/2002 9:43:34 AM
one word discribes this. awesome
Date posted: 4/20/2002 6:10:51 PM
this story needs one thing a sequel
Author: Lady Cregga
Date posted: 5/20/2002 10:24:53 PM
Lady Cregga's Comments:
This is one of my favorite fanfiction stories, and that's saying a lot cause I've read at least 50! The one who began it meets the one who finished it...nice touch there!
Date posted: 6/23/2002 4:49:24 PM
Great story! Qui-gon is my fave character and I was angry when he died. I'm glad you found a way for him to 'live' again. Write more, please!
Date posted: 11/12/2002 6:50:31 AM
Hmm...I did think both Luke and Qui-Gon were a bit out of character. Luke sounded like a whiny farmboy again and Qui-Gon sounded very negative, and I didn't like how he kept making up reasons. It didn't sound like Qui-Gon. I thought that Obi-Wan and Yoda were good teachers, and that under the leadership of Mace Windu, Yoda, Eeth Koth, and Ki-Adi-Mundi, the Jedi Order wouldn't all go to the dark side, would they?
Date posted: 12/24/2002 7:35:15 AM
Very creative. Yet I disagree with the way the conversations went. I don't believe that Qui-Gon & Luke would see things so differently. I don't believe that Qui-Gon would see Ben as lying to Luke & using him for his own goals.
P.S. "Fear is the mind killer." That's Dune, not Star Wars man.
Date posted: 1/17/2003 12:19:20 AM
Author: Jedi Dax Jentor
Date posted: 2/14/2003 7:48:30 AM
Jedi Dax Jentor's Comments:
Amazing Idea…and enjoyable. But the story is lacking. I think you could have done so much more with it. I truly did enjoy reading it and hope to see you expand upon this original idea.
Author: Ray Kenobi
Date posted: 2/22/2003 10:11:20 AM
Ray Kenobi's Comments:
This was great, i totally understood it. IF you were thinkin' bout makin' a sequel, go through w/it cuz i wanna know wat happens to Luke and Qui-Gon and how Qui-Gon helps Luke
Author: Princess Beccerz
Date posted: 3/6/2003 6:47:04 PM
Princess Beccerz's Comments:
HaHaHaHa! Very cute! I like how you mad Qui-Gon so sarcastically humorous. Great Job!
Date posted: 4/8/2003 2:23:23 PM
Sweet......This is one of the best stories Ive ever read. Keep up the good work man.
Author: Senator Leia
Date posted: 6/15/2003 8:37:28 PM
Senator Leia's Comments:
Good job very nice. I loved it keep them coming.
Date posted: 2/3/2004 1:40:11 AM
There is fan fiction. And then there is story telling.
This writer has taken a random mention in the Jedi Apprentice, combined the little we know of Qui-Gon Jinn's childhood from canon and *deduced* a brilliant scenario.
It's the little things that make Qui-Gon's characterisation perfect: His excitement that a poisonous semi-sentient plant likes him, his kneeling in mud to watch *pittins* cross, his insistence that 'nobody is a nobody' and most importantly: his belief that he belongs to the Force, and not necessarily to the Jedi. We, the readers, are clealy and unmistakenly shown the seeds of the character that make up the man in TPM, half a century later.
Yoda was spot-on, as well: terrible in his love for his Order, his desire to *break* Qui-Gon if need be in order to preserve the Jedi and yet still wise in his own self-awareness. The family was also well described - both typically and uniquely - for any Jedi's family and for Qui-Gon Jinn's.
I enjoyed the elements of prophecy here: The Force revealing to Yoda that Qui-Gon is a sort of *fore-bearer* of sorts for the Chosen One and the Balance; the decay of the Order as evinced in the symbolism of the vision, and I think this was not meant to be a prophecy but an event that was already happening at the time of the story.
My favourite little quote:
'How do you heal a bone which has been broken and set badly?'
'You re-break it.'
Two thumbs up!
Author: Anakin Starkiller
Date posted: 4/15/2004 3:04:00 PM
Anakin Starkiller's Comments:
Fantastic fic. I'll even forgive the Bene Gesserit refrence. :) I liked it a great deal. I love the device (liteary and physical) of holocrons. Its the perfect way for Jedi to interact with other timeframes. I rated it a 9.
Author: Lt. Tara Farrago
Date posted: 3/13/2005 8:58:00 AM
Lt. Tara Farrago's Comments:
How do I say this in as few words as possible? Okay: The unfortunate fact is that fanfictions are written by amateurs. So, I'll say this to you - leave the fanfics to us amateurs, you go write a book or something. For those of us who have a love of words, your prose is a welcome surprise. I'm not sure I agree with all of your very intriguing spins on the canon, but I guess that was sort of the point of the story, wasn't it? Anyway, very nicely done! Definitely the best I've read so far.
Author: indiana gambling boat
Date posted: 5/7/2005 4:15:52 PM
indiana gambling boat's Comments:
Date posted: 5/25/2005 1:19:15 AM
I loved this story. I can finally understand Qui-Gon a lot better. It's great to see Luke shedding his emotional burdens. This is probably my favorite star-wars story, and thank you.
Date posted: 8/5/2005 5:23:34 PM
Date posted: 8/24/2005 8:10:24 PM
I'm sorry, everyone...
But this, flat-out, does not deserve it's rating. Qui-Gon would never, never act like that. If you're going to make a fanfiction about a character, study the character. Would Qui-Gon say "Oh, Obi-Wan must hate me...". No.
A good fan-fiction, yes... You just didn't nail down the characters, I'm sorry.
Date posted: 12/2/2005 8:31:10 AM
It is the mark of a classic work of fanfiction that it grows stronger over time. All these years later, after the completion of the film saga and in a world full of fanfic stories that eagerly leave the saga behind, I find myself returning to this story often for its simple strength, deep humanity, and diamond core of truth.
To me it is letter perfect: the characters, the ideas, and the execution.
Date posted: 6/22/2006 5:41:27 PM
Funny. Hope for a sepual. Explains alot.
Author: Darth Breezy
Date posted: 9/29/2006 12:34:51 PM
Darth Breezy's Comments:
"How do I say this in as few words as possible? Okay: The unfortunate fact is that fanfictions are written by amateurs. So, I'll say this to you - leave the fanfics to us amateurs, you go write a book or something."
I Laughed so hard at this because it's so true - What a beautiful gem of a work!!
It leaves the reader breathless....
Author: SugarBant Jinn
Date posted: 2/8/2007 12:06:26 AM
SugarBant Jinn's Comments:
I loved it! it was very interesting, and I love stuff that really ties the prequals to the OT -specially about Qui-Gon cuz he's my favorite- it gives it just that much more beleivability. you did a wonderful job.
Date posted: 6/22/2007 8:16:39 PM
I've read this story many times over the years adn every single time I love it and wish there was a sequel or more a series that detailed the adventures of Luke and Qui-Gon.
I miss you in SW fanfic.
Date posted: 6/8/2009 11:44:20 AM
While trying to remember stories for a list of favorites, I chased down this gem (again) and after re-reading it for the umpteenth time, I knew I had to leave a comment.
A true classic that holds it's power and loveliness throughout the years.
Date posted: 6/17/2013 11:17:27 AM
Personally, I really liked this and thought the characters were very in character. While Luke seemed a little bitter, I believe he was. After all he went through it would be unbelievable if he still acted like the kid from A New Hope. Though he still reflected that new Jedi calm he found as he grew older. And Qui-Gon was an absolute delight.He was thought provoking and quirky just like I believe his personality is. And the talks about Obi-Wan and Yoda's teaching of Luke was very interesting. Like Luke, I'd never thought of it like Qui-Gon presented it, but he was right... from a certain point of view, which I can agree with. Brilliant story! I'm thrilled I found it.