Author: Herman Snerd
Date posted: 1/7/2002 3:51:32 PM
Herman Snerd's Comments:
Despite the length of this fic, the first time I read it I found myself staying up way too late to finish it. I just couldn't walk away without knowing how it ended.
I suppose my comment for this story is "Wow!"
Read it, I promise you'll love it too.
Date posted: 1/7/2002 4:11:09 PM
WOW!!! This is THE most awesome fic I have read to date! You capture Palpatine's evilness perfectly. I absolutely shuddered every time he spoke, and I don't shudder easily at the written word. And Luke's torment is wonderfully captured! Vader's journey is excellent. Everything is just perfect! I'll be recommending this one to everyone I know. :)
Date posted: 1/9/2002 3:14:54 PM
I have mixed feelings about this piece. I was riveted by the beginning, because it is so well written. You evoke a very realistic picture of what it must feel like to be delerious *and* hearing Vader in your mind (persish the thought!) I was intrigued by the rest of the story up until Han started psychoanalysing Vadey. There is a lot to be said for subtlety at times, and it didn't quite seem in character for Han, who *avoids* talking about feelings.
I thought the battle at the end was a bit cliched. I know lots of people think that this is the only way to write SW, but I get tired of seeing the same scenario played out by so many writers. It was well-written, but predictable; it didn't surprise me.
And I could have done without that mush at the end.
But don't let my personal preferences bring you down. You are a very good writer and the story overall is masterfully written.
Date posted: 1/9/2002 7:12:53 PM
Mina! I'm so thrilled to see this story here! I loved it when I read it over at FF.N, and it's still the single best piece of fanfic I have read. Wonderful in all respects!
Author: Darkstar Baneblade
Date posted: 1/10/2002 3:33:53 PM
Darkstar Baneblade's Comments:
The only point of this story that kinda bothered me was Mon Mothma being stupid enough to see papaltine on a "peace" summit. Otherwise, WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I skiped my lunchbreak(from a 48Hrs strait work block to read this) Keep it up.
Author: Jedi Master Swelstad
Date posted: 1/18/2002 10:00:08 AM
Jedi Master Swelstad's Comments:
I really liked this story. Well written and thought out. Only bad thing was severe bad spelling, but, still, no one is perfect. Would like to see more stories from author.
Date posted: 1/18/2002 11:23:43 AM
I've just got two words to say about this story:
It's one of the best fanfics I've ever read. READ IT!!!!!
Author: Someone over There
Date posted: 1/18/2002 6:23:58 PM
Someone over There's Comments:
I'd gush, but it would be so long people'd skip over it. This is the best thing I've read in a long time and I've read published ("proffessional") authors that weren't as good. It left me exhuasted. Keep writing.
Date posted: 1/27/2002 8:21:31 PM
I loved the way this shows the corruption inside the rebellion
Author: Skyla Doragono
Date posted: 1/31/2002 8:57:13 AM
Skyla Doragono's Comments:
I was so captivated just by the summary provided that I had to print it out right away (though the school librarian nearly killed me for printing out 131 pages ;) ). This fic is one of the best alternate stories I've read in a long time. I enjoyed the pictures; they added a wonderful touch to the story (my favorite is the pic of Luke and Anakin staring each other down). I really liked the part where Han has a little talk with Vader. Although it is slightly un-Han, given the circumstances, it's quite understandable, and even funny. Keep up the great work, Mina!
Date posted: 2/4/2002 12:54:35 PM
Awesome story! Wonderful fanfic! one of my favorites. you had som sad funny and mushy moments. I absolutly loved how Mara gave Leia the data pad telling where Luke was! Great story! Keep writing.
~May the force be w/u~
Date posted: 2/19/2002 1:26:44 PM
Well, I'll say this much: I was in the middle of reading Rogue Planet when I discovered this story. Needless to say, I've since put Rogue Planet down and read this in its place.
I won't say its perfect, but there are a lot of really great scenes. I like the added sadism of the Emperor, and for the first time EVER, I actually found myself liking Princess Leia.
My primary complaint is in regards to Vader. I didn't care for the nature of his redemption. It was very hard for me to read his dialogue and picture Vader saying it.
Other than that...a very fine piece indeed.
Date posted: 4/2/2002 5:18:49 AM
Absolutely fantastic. Theres nothing else to say really.
Date posted: 4/8/2002 10:38:58 PM
I just have to say, "WOW"! At first I wasn't really sure I would like it as I don't really like AU stories that much, but this one completely enthralled me. Excellent, excellent job!
Date posted: 6/8/2002 9:44:41 PM
I've been reading a lot of fiction on Forcenet and yours has been the best in my opinion. I noticed that it had to be abridged and I did feel at times like something was missing between Luke and the emperor at times. I would love to be able to read the entire unedited story. Any way I can? Please let me know and write some more ... Real Soon!
Date posted: 6/27/2002 10:01:12 AM
This was 1 of the best stories I have ever read in my life!You have real talent.You should write more stories
Author: Jedi Warrior
Date posted: 7/2/2002 7:13:01 PM
Jedi Warrior's Comments:
Absolutly one of the best fanfics i've ever read. I usually don't read Star Wars fanfics (even though im one of the biggest fans i know lol) my forte is Anime but thats another story. great fic. Vaders transformation was well writtin and the fact that Luke healed him so he didn't need the suit was a nice touch. over all great fic......a 10 in my book
Author: Darth Vader
Date posted: 7/10/2002 7:08:27 PM
Darth Vader's Comments:
Date posted: 7/19/2002 4:42:22 AM
This is the best fanfic story I've read so far. Reading the first part I was shivering, it was such an original idea to create this situation, Leia thinking about Luke as a Sith spwan... God it was perfect.
I also loved the sensitive character of Luke, his turn was perfectly elaborated, the way Palpatine touched him, it was almost erotic I was stunned again. His desperate try to escape and then when he said he will not leave Palpatine let me with an open mouth again. The small black figure in the snow.
But, this is the story which is so good that it should deserve more than a typical fairytale ending. Other SW stories (many officials as well) don't take Yoda's words seriously. The one who started his way on the dark side will never be able to leave it completely. I think Yoda was not joking when he told Luke this. And Lucas took it seriously as well, Vader had to die to gain redemption. Why can't Luke stay on the Dark Side? It would enchase the seriousness of the story. Jedi sould not accept the power of the dark side kill dozens of people and then get rid of it without serious sacrifice.
You are a great writer, don't take this as a serious criticism of the story, I am only longing for a well written story where Luke doesn't turn back to the light side only maybe in the far future and your story promised me one until the end. Falling into a pit is always faster and easier than climbing out...
(sorry for the language mistakes, my native is not english)
PS: If somebody knows about a well written story which doesn't end in a Hollywood way please tell me about it. Thank you very much.
Date posted: 7/19/2002 11:46:46 AM
that was great! touching and an amazing 'what-if'. you should really keep writing... this story ROCKS!
Author: Nad-To Ann
Date posted: 8/2/2002 6:39:59 PM
Nad-To Ann's Comments:
This has probably been said before but I wouldn't knoiw because I haven't read the comments. Anyway, all I can say about this story is that it's the way Star Wars should be. It should be movie, not an AU. This is probably the best story I've ever read. Keep Writing!
Date posted: 8/8/2002 4:00:39 PM
WOW! This was great! You're writing is fantastic! It was a little corny in the end, but also very sweet.
Author: Lady Rebel of Alderaan
Date posted: 9/6/2002 12:38:17 AM
Lady Rebel of Alderaan's Comments:
I know this may sound cliche: I stayed up late on a school night to finish this piece of fanfiction as I often do with great stories [you're supposed to take that as a compliment;)]The story plot was great and kept my interest, and me wheeling with each new twist and turn. My favorite part was when Han was rescued from Jabba's palace (poor Leia, having to act like an exotic dancer for Han's sake. I guess she really loves him.) I saw that scene of Leia not cooperating with Jabba and falling into the rancor pit as a cliche to Oola's fate in Return of the Jedi. But one of my favorite scenes was when Anakin rescued her from the rancor pit and realized he'd just saved his daughter's life. I absolutly loved the closing scene about Luke and Anakin racing, their instatement into the Republic fleet, Luke's reunion with his old friends and fling helmet. Mara Jade was a perfect fit in being Palpatine's aid, and then reconsiling. Even if cliche, the end scene of Anakin seeing the ghosts was touching and heartwarming(he turned good and got the approval of all the Jedi teachers who had taught him and saw him through his training, almost a reconsile.) Please take the following as constructive criticsm. I saw some spelling errors, sentence structure errors, and incorrect pronouns (i.e. he instead of his). You know there is no such thing as too much proofreading, right? A bit of advice for all the fanfic writer's out there, don't do all the proof reading yourself, have several other people beta-read and proof read it, because it's easy to miss errors when you read it over and over again(it eventually becomes your mind knows the plot so you read over some of the details). And there's kind of a plot hole as to explaining Anakin's emotions better in his decision before he went to Tatooine to save Luke. I know Mon Mothma wanted the Empire to cease, but I can't see her character becoming so extremely vengful and hateful, even if under the influence of Palpatine; the character of her I interpeted from Return of the Jedi was that she was a quiet woman who wanted to see the end of the Empire throught the means necessary, but nothing extreme, and wanted peace; she didn't seem the vengeful type at all in the movies.
Date posted: 10/17/2002 2:46:05 PM
That was amazing!!!
It is certainly the best fanfic I have ever read about Vader. ! I am a Vader fan and I liked your fic more that RotJ because You managed to turn him good but keeping him alive.
I liked the idea about Leia leaving the Rebellion because of Luke. I absolutely liked the scene where Vader saved Leia, it is so touching.
Very good style, just keep writing things like this!
Date posted: 10/29/2002 3:28:55 PM
This was a really really great fic. I absolutely love it. I love how you describe anakins emotions and feelings.
Date posted: 1/15/2003 3:36:51 PM
I liked this story very much on the whole, but I did have some problems with the treatment of certain characters. Palpatine I found unconvincing at times, and the sexual subtext with which you imbued his overtures to Luke did not, for me, ring entirely true (was this originally a lemon?). Vader was written very well throughout, but I felt that the situation for him should have been more complicated, at the end of the story, than was made to be. I disliked the wave-of-a-magic-wand style healing of Vader, which felt almost like an afterthought. Star Wars has always been inflexible and absolute in its judgements of good and evil, and while you rose above this admirably during the course of the narrative, I thought you fell prey to it somewhat with the happily-ever-after ending.
Having said all that, when it is judged as fan fiction this is a truly excellent piece of writing.
Date posted: 1/22/2003 9:36:51 AM
Excellent story! I have only recently started reading fan fiction and yours is by far my favorite. I especially loved Leia's breakdown when she thought Luke was dead. And Luke's agonies at Palpatine's hands were expertly portrayed. Keep writing, please!!
Date posted: 3/27/2003 12:54:57 AM
Okay when I saw the summary, I was like... what? He can't help who his father is. But good for Anakin and Luke, cause it'd give them both another chance.
The begining was pretty confusing. I couldn't make much sense of it at all, but reading on I do now,
I guess. Cool.
Aww, happy ending in a way. :) I'll say again, very cool.
EDIT: Excessive swearing is not permitted on this site, not even when it is a rant against the "bad guy" of a story.
Date posted: 4/10/2003 11:03:53 AM
This is one of the best fan fiction I've read!
Author: Jedi Dax Jentor
Date posted: 4/29/2003 10:37:24 AM
Jedi Dax Jentor's Comments:
Very enjoyable story. I really like the idea of this alternate universe and thought it was fun to read and imagine the possibilities.
One major problem I found was that there were too many emotions and thoughts included in the story. I donít know if that makes sense, but all the thoughts and emotions really slowed it down. And, if it werenít for the great idea included in the story, I would not have finished it. Getting rid of lots of the thoughts that go through the charactersí heads would help. It would make for an easier and quicker read. Also, by actually separating out the speech/talking parts, would make it easier to read.
Date posted: 7/19/2003 2:39:27 AM
How absolutely bizarre!!! I felt like I was reading a Twilight Zone version of ROTJ! I don't usually read alternate universe stuff, but I ahappened upon this as a random fanfic, and the tagline intrigued me. I couldn't stop reading it! Great follow-through and wrap-up of events in the last chapter and epilogue! So many stories have so little denoument, and your's extends it and fills it out nicely. Some parts were a little over done (the healing of Anakin), but the continutation of the story beyond that, bringing more parts together made it work well.
Author: Safire Ranmako
Date posted: 8/22/2003 11:37:48 PM
Safire Ranmako's Comments:
I loved this fic and would love to see a Sequal to it. Keep up the good work.
Date posted: 9/18/2003 7:29:40 PM
Oh My God!! This was a GREAT story. I could not stop reading it. I love the way how some of the story ideas from ROTJ were played out in this. Also, having Mara in it was a nice surprise.
You definatley captured the evil of the Emporer. Thank you for a "most" enjoyable read.
Date posted: 11/22/2003 8:08:31 PM
I love this story!!!! I have read this many a time. I like the happiness in it.
Date posted: 2/10/2004 8:25:21 AM
Thank You all for your comments. I'm currently working on a new fic called "Star Light". I hope you all enjoyed!
Date posted: 2/25/2004 9:00:34 PM
A well crafted, logically organized and confidently executed story. Bravo.
Date posted: 5/31/2004 1:16:42 AM
I've read this story several times now, and it is one of my favorites. It was well-written, and obviously well thought out. My only negative comment is the rather speedy ending. I would like to see more development on the story both during and after the final battle with Palpatine. Otherwise, this is wonderful piece of fanfiction. Congrats once more, and please write another!
Date posted: 6/25/2004 10:26:06 AM
Words fail me...I loved the angst of it all, it is enough to make someone spend a fortune on kleenex. By the way, i like the illustrations also.
Author: darth blah
Date posted: 7/8/2004 5:35:28 PM
darth blah's Comments:
best story i've read in fan fiction
Date posted: 7/9/2004 4:53:24 AM
Excellent story, but a little bit long... =)
This is how ROTJ should have been.
I enjoyed Vader/Anakin's evolution as it gives a more vivid demonstration of how he never turned completely to the dark side.
The only thing I did't enjoy that much (but that is only my opinion) was the "happily ever after" end. I think that as in the original story, Anakin should have died when killing Palpatine. But then again, it's only my point of view.
Amazing writing. Keep up with it.
Date posted: 7/13/2004 9:34:55 PM
Wow! I think I read this fic once before and was unable to review it. This is one of the best fics I've read, I love fics where Anakin eather never turned or he turned and then came back to the light and didn't die. Eh, call me a hopeless romantic.
Date posted: 7/26/2004 6:25:25 AM
I didn't like at all the sexual innuendos in the relationship of Palpatine towards Luke.
Also, I did not like the way Luke was portrayed, it's almost as if you don't like him. Luke is one of the strongest characters in the SW universe, he would never show such weakness -- even if he felt it, he would never succumb to it, no matter how much Palpatine tortured him...
Also, Lando is there just ... I don't know why you put him in there if he does nothing.
The situation with Mara is never fully explained either. It appeared to me that Mara intentionally dropped the note about Luke's location to Vader, to lure them into a trap, but then why did the Emperor send her away? Or, if she really wanted to help them, why was that? You never show us her motivations, or her feelings...
Date posted: 8/28/2004 6:29:52 PM
WHY COULDN'T IT HAVE ENDED THIS WAY?????!!!! WWAHHHH!!
Author: Telegram Sam
Date posted: 1/5/2005 12:09:09 PM
Telegram Sam's Comments:
So if this is the edited version, where is the full version archived at? I tried google, but nothing came up. O.o
Or if you could e-mail it to me that would be great. I'm just curious is all (and not easily squicked, if it's something drastic). ^.^
Author: QUI GON SIME
Date posted: 1/22/2005 4:41:00 AM
QUI GON SIME's Comments:
I READ THIS AT WORK AND TO BE HONEST I DIDNT WANT TO GO HOME UNTILL I FINISHED
YOUR STORY IS SUPERB
Date posted: 3/1/2005 6:19:38 PM
The Best one I've rated yet! Sure, it took me a while to read it, but I still love it! As commented before, it is kind of strange how you made the Emporer have a sexual intrest in Luke, but the rest was amazing! I especially think that you should make another concerning these characters! You write them so well!
Date posted: 3/9/2005 9:41:16 AM
This is one of the best Star Wars stories I have ever read! I love when people write about what-ifs and could-bes. I was also wondering if I could have a copy of the unedited version as well please. If not, that's ok. The story still rocks!!
Date posted: 3/19/2005 7:29:19 AM
I loved this- even though it was so long I had to take breaks every few chapters. It is the best Star Wars Fanfic EVER WRITTEN! I give it 100/10.
Date posted: 4/16/2005 4:21:13 AM
Oh, and by the way, didn't Luke lose Anakin's lightsaber on Bespin when his hand was cut off?
Date posted: 9/8/2005 5:51:17 PM
Great AU fanfic! I liked this particular plot twist, as it went along with my idea of the Alliance's/soon-to-be New Republic's corruption being as bad as the Empire's in its own way, rather than being too AU like some fanfics I've read. Though, you really _did_ make Mothma into more of an evil bitch than even I'd have expected, but that's not a bad thing. Very good description of her character, of Vader/Anakin's, of Leia's, Luke's...Mara's part in there was rather strange, however. Bit of an abrupt loyalty switch, it seems to me: that's an extreme contrast from her character in the novels, where her loyalty to the Emperor is fanatical to the point of devoting her life to Luke's death.
Ah well. Other than my disagreement with the depiction of Mara (which matters little, as her part in there is cameo at most), that was great writing about a great concept and definitely deserving of my 10/10 rating. I'll be watching for your name, Mina (fellow DragonLance fan?), in the hopes of more fanfics to come.
Author: Joe Hella
Date posted: 10/13/2005 3:07:22 AM
Joe Hella's Comments:
You obviously have nothing better to do than write this fanfiction... I mean it's not true that all star wars people have no life. AND I THANK YOU PROFUSELY FOR THAT!!! This was well written and you did a fab job with the ending. I would even rate this fic on par with Timothy Zahn. Great Job, This Is The Kind Of Imagination That Makes Star Wars So Great.
Author: Joe Hella
Date posted: 10/20/2005 2:23:15 AM
Joe Hella's Comments:
I know I just commented on this one, but I just read it again. I can now say that immediately after reading it I am ready to die a happy man.
Author: Russell Hombourne
Date posted: 12/18/2005 11:46:49 AM
Russell Hombourne's Comments:
Very enjoyed this fic, was so good.
One thing I did not like was the cover art.
Good work though, just change the cover.
Author: Rogue 00
Date posted: 2/4/2006 12:35:29 AM
Rogue 00's Comments:
Great story!! It was nice to read a decently written happy ending for Anakin Skywalker. I think Hollywood has had enough "let's kill the guy you care about" lately so this was great. Very descriptive and totally sucked me in to the story.
The only criticism is Vader's dialog wasn't quite right in a few places - it lacked the arrogance needed for a Sith lord early on. But to get get Vader's voice right and transition to Anakin is a MONUMENTAL task and you did a very good job with it considering.
By the way, the picture of Han pointing his finger at Vader in the cockpit of the Falcon is PRICELESS!! Can I steal it?
Date posted: 4/18/2006 2:06:51 PM
Wow, this was absolutely amazing!
I'm new to the SW fan fiction, but ever since I got here I've been searching for fics that have to do with Vader turning to Anakin early and having a happy ending. Some I've read have been far-fetched and not too reliable, but this story just took the breath out of me! Wonderfully written, and the transition from Vader-Anakin seems so natural!
I even enjoyed Han's and Leia's roles in the whole thing. It offered a new view on our beloved smuggler and princess. In other stories they've been so negative and distrustful of the back-turned Vader, so it was refreshing to read a story where they managed to settle their differences and agree Vader had changed!
Great job with all this!
Date posted: 6/2/2006 10:37:05 AM
WOW! A great what if! I loved the reversal between Anakin and Luke. Although it was predictable, it is satisfying in the same way that the prequel trilogy is satisfying. I thought it was nice too to have those intermittent illustrations. (It might have been nice to have one in the epilogue) Still though, a great story played out in the Star Wars style.
I don't think Vader is capable of sitting cross-legged though ;-)
Date posted: 8/20/2006 6:31:13 PM
That was SOOOOOOO good!!!
They should have made Episode 6 likes that!!! It would have been perfect! They could have still called it Return of the Jedi, but it would have been alot better!!
That was awesome! thanx so much!
Till it snows on Tatooine, sarlaac!
Date posted: 12/27/2007 7:47:32 PM
Wow... all I can say is that you're an amazing author. This is just wonderful. AU, but still awesome... you writing is just gorgeous. Thank you so much for writing this!
Author: Padme Casperia Skywalker
Date posted: 2/16/2008 4:19:41 PM
Padme Casperia Skywalker's Comments:
The BEST fan Fiction I HAVE EVER read.
I HOPE MORE PEOPLE WRITE STORIES LIKE THIS!!!!!
Author: Master Liz
Date posted: 4/3/2010 1:06:24 AM
Master Liz's Comments:
That was great! I did not like Mon Mothma but other than that it was really REALLY good, possibly the best fan fic I have ever read (and I have read a LOT!!!!:D)
Date posted: 7/3/2010 11:23:52 PM
WOW!!! That's the best thing I can say. This is one of the most amazing Star Wars stories ever and is the best fanfic I've read on any subject. I'd love to read a copy of the original, unedited version. Any hint on how we can see it? I also have to admit that the sexual overtones from Palpatine to Luke had me absolutely intrigued. Not sure why, but they did.
Date posted: 1/19/2011 5:01:04 PM
Oh, man! This story was awesome! You've got skills! Your story gripped me from the very beginning; I love how descriptive you are when referring to the characters' emotions, landscape, how they look, etc.
A job well done! More, please?
May the Force be with you. :)