Author: Jeff 42
Date posted: 2/18/2002 7:19:03 PM
Jeff 42's Comments:
This was a good concept, and you did well showing the conflict in Vader. However, the story was hurt by the odd mix of serious with nearly farcical elements. I still enjoyed it.
Date posted: 2/19/2002 5:54:48 AM
This doesn't seem "right" for so many reasons. As mentioned, the comedic elements took away from the story instead of helping it. And there's no way Vader would of acted like that. Also, the Alliance wasn't even started at this point in time.
Date posted: 2/20/2002 6:22:18 AM
Interesting concept, but I'm not sure what you were going for. It would make a very good farce/parody. I had to laugh at the stormtrooper's dialogue!
Date posted: 2/20/2002 10:15:43 AM
This was really good, but I kept thinking it was Alternate Universe because there's no way Vader would have done that.
I also think he would have killed that stormtrooper... but maybe he hadn't seeped into the Dark Side enough.
Date posted: 2/21/2002 7:11:24 AM
I liked this. I thought it was an interesting take on Luke's orign. I think Vader likely WOULD have acted like that.
As mentioned before, my only issue comes from Fixer (Zevul). His comedic antics seemed to distract from the drama of the piece.
Plus I'm sure Vader would NEVER tolerate someone someone referring to him as Darth V. lol!
Author: Mcily Nochi
Date posted: 2/22/2002 1:38:20 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:
I wasn't entirely sure whether this was supposed to be humorous or serious. The characterizations needed work, too. It's a good premise, however, and could be a very good fic.
Author: Lianna C.
Date posted: 2/23/2002 12:50:47 PM
Lianna C.'s Comments:
I liked this. I rather liked the humor from fixer, it was very interesting indeed.
Author: Kenya Starflight
Date posted: 2/23/2002 7:37:41 PM
Kenya Starflight's Comments:
The author would like to add her two bits, if that's okay.
I intended this to be a serious story but added Zevul/Fixer as comic relief, because I don't like super-serious stories. I do admit I may have overdone it.
BTW, what the heck is a farce?
Date posted: 2/26/2002 12:04:32 PM
I hate to say it after you've already said it was a serious story, but that was incredibly funny. I loved the Fixer revelation.
Date posted: 3/3/2002 7:48:21 AM
It was good, I had to cry when Vader gave his
son away.Sorry, I got to have another moment
Author: Obi Anne
Date posted: 3/4/2002 8:39:46 AM
Obi Anne's Comments:
I read it as a comedy, and laughed at loud. It was a bit too unrealistic to be read in any other way, but it was really funny.
Author: micsn peep
Date posted: 3/12/2002 8:49:24 AM
micsn peep's Comments:
Thats a funny story. A great concept, and very original.
Date posted: 3/12/2002 6:29:13 PM
intresting....but did owen and beru know who vader really was?....
Date posted: 3/23/2002 5:38:51 AM
I think It's a good story, but this is Darth Vader. I don't think Vader could be this sensative ever!! And if he knew Obi-Wan was there why didn't he kill him in the first place? Instead of at the Death Star? I don't think this makes any sense at all. Besides from that I think It's a nice story to read
Date posted: 3/31/2002 8:47:58 AM
Hey I enjoyed this story because it showed that Vader still had some "good" left in him. But I agree with the other responses that the humor in it wasn't correct. It messed up the story because it took away everything anybody already knows about Vader. But regardless, it was entertaining to read and keep up the good work.
Date posted: 4/20/2002 6:04:37 PM
great story but this I am saying to everyone who says "vader would not have reacted like thet" or "vader wouldve killed Zevul" well it it an intertrilogy story for all we know there was still a little bit of good in vader only thing is that the alliance would not have begun then
Date posted: 5/23/2002 4:24:42 AM
I enjoy reading your fic at least we get to see there's a good side of him.
Date posted: 5/23/2002 10:07:14 PM
Nice idea tho..but indeed..there is no chance vader would have acted like that..but no doubt he would have felt something for the kid...but why didnt he go back to get his wife too?...he still loves her....nice try..a little bit more consistency and you a better novel.
Date posted: 5/26/2002 9:18:48 PM
AWESOME! It sounds like something Vader would do for his son!
Author: Dreama Tsuki
Date posted: 5/27/2002 8:54:40 AM
Dreama Tsuki's Comments:
This was really sweet. Hard to imagine Vader doing those things, but it was still reall really sweet.
Date posted: 6/7/2002 2:08:34 PM
The story started off good, but went down and down until it was a total farce.Vader would NEVER act remotely like that and would NEVER EVER let anyone call him darth v. Also when he gave the baby to owen and beru it almost seemed as if they were expecting him for all the surprise they showed. Not everyday Vader turns up on your doorstep with a baby to give away.So in all i thought this was just over the disgrace mark.
Date posted: 6/15/2002 5:35:07 PM
This is the craziest and funniest stories I've ever read! The stormtroopers were funny as hell. Go Lord V! Should have got Owen to shoot Vader with a shotgun though... oh well
9.99999999999999999/10 (where's the shotgun, man?)
Date posted: 6/19/2002 11:13:12 PM
I liked the story, but there were a few things I didn't like. The biggest one was that the story ends with Vader knowing where Luke is. I would have ended it with Vader giving Luke to Obi-Wan (and somethng Vader says gives Obi-Wan the idea of leaving Luke with Owen). Also, for those who say Vader wouldn't have acted like that, I agree. Vader wouldn't, but ANAKIN would. I pictured this story with Anakin (from AOTC) decked out in Sith robes before the battle with Obi-Wan. Reading it with that image in mind, changes your whole perspective of the piece.
Date posted: 1/30/2003 2:03:02 AM
I don't get how he can do that lullabye with his voice modulated device and loud respirator voice. I can see why people would object to how he acted with 'Fixer' in front of his crew on board his ship at that point in time. The Amidala thing never was interesting, but it seems he didn't do anything with the information since you have him leaving her to escape from him again so that he can put his boy child into the hands of near strangers.
The story was very good since it's primary focus seemed to me to be that Vader didn't want to mess up his son's future by letting the Dark side have him. Almost letting the force decide his fate like it did his own when he was young.
I would like to know how this information would play out. How would Vader have reacted in the timeline knowing about his son and confronting him.
Good job once again.
Author: Ivy Raine Ravenwood
Date posted: 2/1/2003 11:20:03 AM
Ivy Raine Ravenwood's Comments:
I must say, I enjoyed it. Lord V, huh? Why didn't he choke the guy?
Date posted: 3/1/2003 8:00:10 AM
i've got one thing to say.
Beru to Darth Vader- "Oh, hello there."
Date posted: 3/12/2003 6:13:19 PM
I think this is a very good fan fic, and wanna applause Kenya Starflight for thinking it up. I also think that GL should consider this as an ending to ep.III. Vader WOULD do something like this, because he tried his best to keep Luke alive in the OT.
Date posted: 3/21/2003 9:13:43 AM
I loved Obi-Wan's line about, if there was a bright center to the universe, he would have to be on the furthest planet from it. That's one of my fav SW lines
Author: Jedi Dax Jentor
Date posted: 4/4/2003 2:07:34 PM
Jedi Dax Jentor's Comments:
An interesting comedy/drama. Donít know which to classify it under. Pretty well written. I like that the events happen differently than they are supposed to, but the outcome is the same.
Date posted: 5/25/2003 12:49:43 PM
I love the ending with the tears and being grateful for the mask. Great touch.
Author: Anakin's gurl
Date posted: 7/9/2003 2:00:44 PM
Anakin's gurl's Comments:
this was really good, i really liked the dialogue. i had to gasp when you mentioned the baby maybe being Obi-wan's, nice touch! I really like this one, it portrayed the last of Vader's goodness very well. Keep it up! ani's gurl
Date posted: 8/23/2004 11:19:01 PM
That was a very good story. I like how you showed a human side to Darth Vader. Keep up the excellent work :)
Author: Darth Me
Date posted: 11/17/2004 9:01:30 PM
Darth Me's Comments:
It's a good situation comedy. I can't see it other way, 'cause we all know that as soon as the stormtrooper said Vader that nickname, he would be dead. Still, I actually enjoyed reading it, as I said, it was fun.
Date posted: 4/3/2005 6:41:42 PM
This was nice..... very nice..... Oh, and impressive..... MOST impressive..... Hm..... kinda hard to imagine Vader humming..... But, he's not really Vader, he's Anakin Skywalker underneath that facade, trust me on that. 'Member the ending of Return of the Jedi? I think the changed ending on the DVD was cool..... And slightly sweet, granting Anakin the chance to say to blazes with the Sith facade..... t'was sweet.
Live Long and Prosper,
Samauri~Knight (a.k.a. Jedi Takeru on fanfiction.net)
Author: Darth Slaya
Date posted: 1/27/2006 9:31:16 PM
Darth Slaya's Comments:
oh so beautiful, * i snifle* i love L/V fics and this is one of my favs!
Author: Jedi X-Man Serena Kenobi
Date posted: 2/6/2007 6:37:40 PM
Jedi X-Man Serena Kenobi's Comments:
I liked it, a lot!! Good job! I think the humorous remarks are funny.