Date posted: 4/9/2002 7:12:06 AM
Nice job Melyanna!
The beginning had me laughing and the end had me sad, but it still felt like there was some hope for poor Jag. I look foreward to your next story :).
Author: Mcily Nochi
Date posted: 4/9/2002 3:03:52 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:
Mely, great as always! This story realy cleaned up well! Keep up the good work (and I can't wait to beta all the others, too). :)
Date posted: 4/11/2002 9:38:55 PM
But, the characters didn't seem "right". Jag Fel wasn't the grim fighter pilot from the novels, and the Chiss society seemed too loose and informal for what it has previously been described as. Other than the subject errors, it was great:)
Author: Wedge Lover
Date posted: 4/12/2002 1:18:15 PM
Wedge Lover's Comments:
I loved it! I think that it helps to explain how he transformed into the grim pilot in the NJO. Well... at least he is grim on the outside...
Date posted: 4/12/2002 9:03:34 PM
I've never been a fan of NJO or Jag. Still not. Though, ever since we've been friends, I've read it for the sake of the quality of your work. Such a nice read! Not to mention, charming title.
Date posted: 4/19/2002 8:41:16 PM
Great story. Hope to hear more about the adventures of Jag.
Date posted: 5/2/2002 1:23:14 AM
i'm not familiar w/ the jag character in the EU, but as a stand-alone character, pretty well done. the events following her death and his grief could have been done better though. liked the interaction between jag and his sister, esp his brotherly protection over her. good messages in the story.
Date posted: 6/7/2002 4:07:16 PM
Very well-written, Melyanna...I am impressed, as always, with your work. From what I've read I've always thought Jag was a little too gruff for me, but I like how this story provides the logic behind his facade. Keep up the good work.
Author: Santora-Lee Gend
Date posted: 2/12/2004 8:14:17 AM
Santora-Lee Gend's Comments:
Awesome story, though this comment is a little belated.
Author: jedi princess
Date posted: 8/22/2004 7:14:16 PM
jedi princess's Comments:
it was really good. jag fels other siblings instead of lexi and kalin are wynssa and chak chak is older than jag and wynssa is younger.
Date posted: 10/15/2005 2:49:04 PM
Nice job, but Cherith happens to be th second child in the family, not the third.