Date posted: 8/5/2002 9:16:35 PM
Nice job! Some of the best fanfictions are the ones that expand on the thoughts of characters in an interesting way. That is what you've done here.
Date posted: 8/6/2002 8:36:59 AM
that was great!i like the way you presented anakin and obi-wan's relationship,it almost makes you feel sad at how things turn out when you look at it this way!i loved the humour(yes i am british,that's why i'm spelling 'humor' as 'humour')especially the stuff ani says about yoda and the use of the 'luminous beings...'quote was very good.i also liked the way you went into both character's thoughts,like when obi-wan thinks about his and ani's death.there's a lot i've got to say but you wouldn't want me to go on and on,so over-all it was great!
Date posted: 8/6/2002 1:08:39 PM
That was good. I liked the part where Obi-Wan said Qui-Gon was part of Naboo now. But I relly liked where Anakin showed Obi-Wan he does listen to Yoda!
Date posted: 8/7/2002 10:07:01 AM
not bad not bad at all .... i enjoyed reading this
Date posted: 8/7/2002 10:18:45 AM
The writing and narrative was very good, but I feel that too many people mistake Anakin's recklessness and impatience with a lack of respect for the Force and those who teach it. The Dark Side is STILL the Force, and the one thing I always sensed about Vader was a very extreme sense of respect for it. I don't think Anakin would have blown off these sorts of lessons, or Yoda's teachings.
Date posted: 8/9/2002 12:38:50 PM
Very well done. Brilliant characterization and use of locations. These few scenes would not be out of place in the films. Keep up the good work.
Date posted: 8/12/2002 9:33:10 AM
Great Job, you really caught Anakin's cockiness very well. And Obi Wan's usual patience-turned-annoyance. Lol. anyway, really great job.
Author: Master I-Thom- Val
Date posted: 8/17/2002 2:51:15 PM
Master I-Thom- Val's Comments:
I really liked it and i hope it will be out soon. I still wonder, are there other pats where Anakin shows his anger in this book?
Date posted: 8/27/2002 2:47:21 PM
Aww, very lovely story! Seeing a nice, calm, or purely emotional story every once in a while is a lot better than having to read the tons of action stories that always come out. Thanks. ;) (Not that I don't like action. *hint hint*)
Author: Siri Ruane
Date posted: 1/11/2003 11:10:39 AM
Siri Ruane's Comments:
This is really good. It shows that Anakin's not ALWAYS a brat...
Date posted: 2/10/2003 5:22:38 AM
I neat insite into the relationship between Obi-Wan and Anakin. It was nice to see a continuous Yoda teaching quote from Anakin to Luke. Truth lasts!
Date posted: 1/21/2005 8:47:28 AM
Hm..... not really angsty, in my opinion. Anakin reminds me of my older brother..... strangely enough, Obi-Wan reminds me of my dad..... Obi-Wan probably chooses bad holo-dramas on Jedi movie night like my dad chooses bad movies..... okay, my dad's chosen a COUPLE good movies..... but..... few they are..... Anakin seems so human..... I think it'd take a heckuva lot to turn him into Vader..... Oh, well..... I guess when episode III rolls around we're gonna find out what exactly made Vader..... Vader and not Anakin anymore..... "You couldn't bring yourself to kill me before, and I don't believe you'll destroy me now," Luke Skywalker, Return of the Jedi. Ah..... awesome quote..... Anyway, I liked Obi-Wan's comment about swiping your hand through a Light Saber..... Anakin's last few lines ("Luminious being are we, not this crude matter," etc.) were VERY well placed. This story's a gold mine.
Live Long and Prosper,
Date posted: 6/19/2005 3:47:18 PM