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Author: JadeSaber  (signed)
Date posted: 5/5/2003 9:14:25 PM
JadeSaber's Comments:

This story is awesome, Lothi! It's great to see it up. The emotions are powerful, and the love that the trooper has for his young family is evident. I really love how you illustrate this by showing us another look at the scene between Luke and Vader. A truly amazing work!

Author: geo3
Date posted: 5/5/2003 11:57:47 PM
geo3's Comments:

This is a powerful short story told from a completely fresh and unexpected point of view. It is original, beautifully written, and very moving - a great addition to the world of OT fanfiction! Very, very well done.

Author: geo3
Date posted: 5/5/2003 11:57:53 PM
geo3's Comments:

This is a powerful short story told from a completely fresh and unexpected point of view. It is original, beautifully written, and very moving - a great addition to the world of OT fanfiction! Very, very well done.

Author: Valiowk  (signed)
Date posted: 5/6/2003 2:53:43 AM
Valiowk's Comments:

This is a wonderful story, Lothi! :) I must say that when I first saw the mention of Eiren, I wasn't thinking of a twist in the story along these lines. You brought the beginning and the end together very well.

I really liked the spirit that Luke and the officer shared.

Author: bundy397
Date posted: 5/6/2003 7:35:21 AM
bundy397's Comments:

Very well written piece. I enjoyed reading about the thoughts of a stormtrooper, they did have feelings too. A very thoughtful and compelling glimpse at a character that could be any man.

Author: Cat
Date posted: 5/6/2003 7:46:34 AM
Cat's Comments:

Hi Lothi
Good to see this in the archive. Loved this--the totally unusual viewpoint on the Luke and Vader interaction. And I hope he gets to see his boy!

Author: Quiller  (signed)
Date posted: 5/6/2003 11:39:57 AM
Quiller's Comments:

Very well written. Like the others who commented, I like the fresh perspective.

Author: BoondockSaintM
Date posted: 5/6/2003 12:32:06 PM
BoondockSaintM's Comments:

Great fic! It's nice to see a story from the point of view of an just an "ordinary" guy, especially an Imperial. Too often they get represented as being either wholeheartedly evil or just faceless grunts without considering that they were people too and that the vast majority of them were just ordinary soldiers fighting for what they believed in; good job humanizing them. Love the story, and I hope to see more! :)

Author: bobill  (signed)
Date posted: 5/6/2003 2:33:56 PM
bobill's Comments:

Really cool! Nice way of showing an overlooked charector's perspective on such an important scene! cool how so many others had missed their families like that too...

Author: Darth Breezy
Date posted: 5/6/2003 9:20:30 PM
Darth Breezy's Comments:

Oh what a lovely tale... Congrats Lothi!!

Author: Fox7
Date posted: 5/7/2003 10:06:15 AM
Fox7's Comments:

I have to admit, as much as I can't see a stormtrooper having a family, seeing they were bred and cloned to not have independant thought, it was a very good story. I just thought perhaps it would hve been more beleivable had it been a slightly higher officer. Other than that I thoroughly enjoyed it. Hate to sound too negative, but wasn't Luke brought to the landing platform in an AT-AT?

Author: darthbrooks
Date posted: 5/7/2003 1:11:42 PM
darthbrooks's Comments:

some Stormtroopers were conscripts, and NOT clones, according to EU

Nice ending.

Author: Joun_Lord
Date posted: 5/8/2003 12:34:56 AM
Joun_Lord's Comments:

I really liked this story. It shows that Stormtroopers are people with emotions and feelings, not just cannon fodder. You should write more stories with an Imperial point of view.

Author: Jedi_Phoenix  (signed)
Date posted: 5/9/2003 6:50:27 PM
Jedi_Phoenix's Comments:

You gave us a whole new insight to the emotions of a storm trooper. Of the pain of being away from loved one. Thinking of his child growing up without him.

Author: Ceria
Date posted: 5/9/2003 6:58:53 PM
Ceria's Comments:

I have watched that scene so many times, and I've always wondered the same thing - just what is that stormtrooper thinking when Luke announces he is Vader's son. What a great insight to a well written story.

Author: Aelie
Date posted: 5/10/2003 12:15:27 PM
Aelie's Comments:

...Wow. That's about all I can say; I'm absolutely speechless.


Author: Destiny  (signed)
Date posted: 5/12/2003 1:09:22 PM
Destiny's Comments:

Great job, Lothi! I never thought to wonder what the trooper was thinking - I was too busy watching the interaction between Vader and Luke! :p

*grins* Like everybody else, I liked how you took a well-known scene and looked at it from a different perspective. Keep writing! :p

Author: MoriahthePariah
Date posted: 5/16/2003 9:13:32 AM
MoriahthePariah's Comments:

I loved that one tiny moment where you mention how much Luke's eyes look like the trooper's son: "Miss you, Daddy." The connection of relationships is so subtle and beautiful.

Author: The lost soul585
Date posted: 5/20/2003 1:02:50 PM
The lost soul585's Comments: of the best stories I've ever read!Please I am begging you to continue this book and finish it up!Maybe even publish it as a real book.Eh hem , good job.

Author: Jane Jinn  (signed)
Date posted: 5/22/2003 12:38:37 AM
Jane Jinn's Comments:

That was an excellent story. I was really struck by the way the stormtrooper saw an echo of his son's eyes in Luke's eyes, and thought of his son saying, "Miss you, Daddy". I also had to smile at the vision of a hulking Vader bouncing a blond toddler on one black-clad knee. The best part, though, was that after the stormtrooper's instinctively nervous reaction at the first mention of Vader, he was then changed positively by being allowed to witness the reunion of father and son, and was inspired to contact home with a message for his own son.

Author: Thanatos
Date posted: 6/20/2003 1:12:43 AM
Thanatos's Comments:

I have to say that I truely enjoyed this piece. The EU and official LucasFilm commentary has never quite reconciled some contradictions about how stormtroopers are trained, expected to behave, how they serve, and the personas of these not-quite-so machine-like men that have become evident throughout the storytelling of the genre. This piece works marvelously to reconcile the traditinos of Imperial training and brainwashing with the reality of serving afterwards. Most stories which show stormtroopers with personality also suggest that they have served a while or are conscripts from the planet upon which they serve. This is a kind of open secret in that it takes some looking to realize and this story follows that pattern. Thanks again to the author.

Author: X-Imperial
Date posted: 6/21/2003 12:34:10 AM
X-Imperial's Comments:

Wow.. This is a great fanfiction! Especially since it's one of those rarities that deal with soldiers, even rarer still is an Imperial stormtrooper. But I have to beg the question. "Does he survive?" I really hope he does. Hell, maybe he defects :D or is that too much to ask?

Author: Dark Armored One
Date posted: 7/3/2003 3:10:10 PM
Dark Armored One's Comments:

"Impressive, most impressive..." I swear I have seen that part of the movie hundreds of times, and I always think to myself, I wonder what that stormtrooper is thinking right now? I guess now I have a pretty good idea.

Your writing skills are very good. Here is a side to look at if you want to write another story. What Vader is thinking as he leaves the Emperor's throne room and goes to Endor. He is obviously torn. He knows it, the Emperor knows it, and Luke knows it. But I have never read anyone bring out his pain and emotions during these moments he is alone on the shuttle.

Author: elportelian
Date posted: 7/30/2003 2:24:38 PM
elportelian's Comments:

i dont remember which person said it but, the storm troopers being clones, that was only in the clone wars and when thrawn started taking over.

Author: Haris
Date posted: 9/20/2003 8:17:51 PM
Haris's Comments:

Actually, the Stormtroopers from the OT, were also clones, at least that's what Lucas seemed to have said. And as far as I'm aware, they weren't bred for being thoughtless, its just that their thoughts would be extremely unlikely to be interpreted in a non-military point of view, thanks to the way and age from which they're trained. Nonethelss, I also think this story was cool.

Author: Binder-lover
Date posted: 4/11/2004 8:37:21 PM
Binder-lover's Comments:

That was a work of art, Lothi! I always wondered about the details of Luke's surrender, because the movies, comics and books just seemed to skip it. Does anyone know where I can find details of the surrender besides this?

Author: Jedi_Carin_Arco
Date posted: 5/12/2004 7:54:53 AM
Jedi_Carin_Arco's Comments:

That...was...BRILLIANT! YOu captured the thoughts and astonishement PERFECTLY! I was as surprised as he was to "find" out Luke was his son!

Author: kateydidnt  (signed)
Date posted: 11/10/2004 11:25:28 PM
kateydidnt's Comments:

Wow. Fantastic piece here. I love vignettes like this that just glimpse another point of view and in doing so capture something significant. I loved this.

Author: Lost Jedi
Date posted: 11/11/2004 10:10:20 PM
Lost Jedi's Comments:

That was really well written. I could almost feel the Stormtroopers fear as he was in the presence of Vader. Good Job!

Author: Dark Empress
Date posted: 5/22/2005 7:35:43 PM
Dark Empress's Comments:

Good write. One of my favorites. Good capture on the characters thoughts based on the situation. I like how you brought a soldier in and balanced out the story with the original characters. Very realistic.

Author: Rogue
Date posted: 8/28/2005 4:51:05 AM
Rogue's Comments:

That's the best fan fic I've ever read.
Bravo !

Author: kittenmommy  (signed)
Date posted: 7/2/2011 11:21:12 AM
kittenmommy's Comments:

What a marvelous little fic. Bravo!

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