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Gungan to the left

As the Sun Rises (G)

By : VadersMistress

Archived on: Monday, February 28, 2005

A Jedi faces his destiny during the Jedi Purges.

I feel his presence approaching me. My breath catches in my chest as I hear the breathing-the slow, ominous breathing. It is a sound that strikes fear in the hearts of even the bravest souls.

The shots whistle outside. I press myself even closer against the wall, hoping I can hide from him, though I know it's a fruitless effort. I hear her whimper at my side; the sound pains me. "Shhh..." I hiss.

She looks up at me with cold fear in her brown eyes. I have to look away; she mustn't see my fear.

The footsteps resonate down the narrow hall. They're coming closer. I can feel him approach us. His presence contaminates everything within its grasp. I know why he is here. He is here to kill us, to finish us off, all of us. I should have seen it earlier, should have stopped it?

I shake my head. There is no time for such thoughts. The past is the past; nothing can change it now. The thing I must concentrate on is the moment, and at this moment I must get her out. My eyes dart around the small room, searching for a way.

I find one; an ache dulls in my chest just a bit. "Come on, we're going to get you out of here."

She looks at me with mild surprise but takes my outstretched hand. I pull her up on my shoulders. "You need to open the hatch. Quickly now," I whisper, my voice filled with urgency.

She does as she is told. All the while the shots outside ping; muffled shouts reach my ears. The hatch opens without a sound. "Alright, now get in there."

She climbs inside. Her tunic catches on a corner of the vent and tears, and she lets out a small, nearly inaudible sniffle as blood soaks her knee.

She lies down on her stomach, her ginger hair falling in her face, and reaches out for me. "Come on Master."

I shake my head. "No, I can't come with you."

"Master," she says, tears welling in her brown eyes.

I shake my head again. "Follow the system. When you get outside run. Run as fast as you can. Don't stop until you reach Dexter's Diner. He will help you get to safety." I pause, the muscles in my throat tightening. "Speak only to him."

She nods reluctantly. "I will." Her hand is still outstretched toward me.

"Goodbye, young Padawan."

"No, Master. You can come with me."

The footsteps are closer now, just outside the door. Muffled orders are being shouted to blast the door down.

I shake my head once more and usher her back into the hatch. She slides on her stomach further into the shaft. I close the hatch and seal it shut with the Force. I hear her sniffle inside. She calls for me.

She's so young; she deserves a chance to survive. But I know the reality of the situation. He probably has the ventilation system being watched, ready for others like me who are trying to get the younglings out. If she makes it out she will never get past the walkway. She will be killed on the spot, if he decides not to take her and torture her. If.

I hear blasts outside the door. It quivers under the power. I take a deep breath, steeling my nerves. Yes, I am scared, but I am also a Jedi. This is the moment we had never thought would occur. It was wishful thinking, foolish.

The door crumbles after another blast is delivered. Smoke fills the air and debris scatters. My lungs burn from the dust flying everywhere. He steps through the smoke. He is confident, arrogant. The man I could hate, if I weren't a Jedi, is coming in. I could allow myself to hate him; I have the capability. Of course, if I did so it would mean becoming like him.

I clench my jaw and grit my teeth. I ignite my saber; the azure light nearly dulled by all of the smoke. He stares at me from under the mask. I can't see his eyes, but if I could I imagine the cold blue eyes would turn to ice.

I feel the Force flow through me, readying me for the fight that is to come. We do not say a word. We are beyond that. I wait for him to raise his blade first. Predictably, he does. I raise mine as well and take a small step forward.

I do not wish to fight. No Jedi does. But when a fight comes, no Jedi will back down from it.

He attempts to strike at me from above. I step to the side and block his strike. My heart races; my breathing quickens. He strikes over and over again. I block him. My pulse throbs under my skin. We fight for ten minutes, perhaps less. The battle is so short. He feigns to the left and strikes to the right. I should see it coming. I attempt to parry his move from the left; I do not see his blade swing towards me.

I feel the blade slide easily into my abdomen. I hear my lightsaber clatter to the ground. I fall to my knees, clutching my wound. I can feel my life draining away. My heart slows; my breathing becomes shallow. I can't help but think that this is the last time I will breathe. He is the last image I shall ever see. The thought sickens me.

I look away, toward the only window. The sun is rising outside. The warm light begins to spill into the room. The pinks and purples fill the sky and swirl together. The sight gives me hope, helps me find peace. I watch the sun rise until the last drop of my life leaves me.

My heart stops and my last breath rattles slightly in my chest as I slump the floor.

I am with the Force now, as the sun rises.

Original cover by Smuggler_Shidakis. HTML formatting copyright 2005 TheForce.Net LLC.

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Author: Gina  (signed)
Date posted: 3/1/2005 10:55:19 AM
Gina's Comments:

This is so eloquently written, VadersMistress. You truly captured the fears of both the Master and the Padawan, but the hopelessness of the Master, trying so desperately to get his Padawan to safety and knowing all the while that his attempts are futile, is the most heartbreaking element of this story. While sad, the imagery of the sunrise at the end was beautiful and added a sense of hope. An excellent story.

Author: SoccerFanatic
Date posted: 3/1/2005 2:29:17 PM
SoccerFanatic's Comments:

Bravo! This is one of the best stories I have ever read! Keep up the great work!

Author: GX_
Date posted: 3/2/2005 3:24:25 PM
GX_'s Comments:

Dexter's Diner?

Were you just grabbing a location out of thin air? This isn't a flame, I was just wondering why there?

The rest was written ok, except for the point above and this sentences:

"He is confident, arrogant. The man I could hate, if I weren't a Jedi, is coming in."

But I guess that just me.

Thanks for writing this.

Author: Anna S.
Date posted: 3/2/2005 6:02:04 PM
Anna S.'s Comments:

Aw...that was so sad....good job, though. I liked it ^_^

Author: AnakinsSoul
Date posted: 3/2/2005 10:12:50 PM
AnakinsSoul's Comments:

Not very original, I feel that this could have had a much more tense feeling as Vader closes in.

EDIT: Please remember to only use constructive criticism.

Author: VaderLVR64  (signed)
Date posted: 3/6/2005 2:42:56 PM
VaderLVR64's Comments:

You know how much I love this one! If you're writing this well at your age, I can't imagine what you'll be doing in ten years! Bravo!

Author: Skinnydwarf
Date posted: 3/7/2005 7:55:55 AM
Skinnydwarf's Comments:

Wow. That was great. A nice, tight short short story. I wish I could write that well again...

Keep up the good work!

Author: C3SoloP0
Date posted: 3/9/2005 6:38:45 AM
C3SoloP0's Comments:

Wow, that was awesome. Heart-wrenching.

It gives me bittersweet feelings about whether I want to watch Episode 3 and watch all the Jedi die. I mean, I'm going to, I'll be there opening night but I know I will cry. Just like I've wanted to do while reading this.


Author: Lt. Tara Farrago
Date posted: 3/9/2005 3:07:58 PM
Lt. Tara Farrago's Comments:

For a vignette, it's okay. You obviously have talent as a writer, and you should never stop honing those skills. I would have liked this story a lot more if the characters were less annonymous and little better developed - this would mean adding length, but the idea driving this story is good enough that it deserves more fleshing out.

Author: AnakinsHeir  (signed)
Date posted: 3/15/2005 7:18:08 AM
AnakinsHeir's Comments:

Loved it! Very powerful and moving. In fact, I loved the whole series you posted on the boards. Great work.

Author: Ani-maniac  (signed)
Date posted: 3/16/2005 9:29:48 PM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

Wonderful! I loved it. I could really feel the sadness in the Master. Keep up the good work!

Author: VadersMistress
Date posted: 3/17/2005 12:02:59 PM
VadersMistress's Comments:

This is a little late coming and I apologize for that. But hey, better late than never, eh?

First I would like to thank all of my wonderful betas. SarkaVrae, Gina, NadeNaberrie, VaderLVR64, and Jemmiah. I appreciate all of the hard work you did for me. Without you, I would not have gotten into the archives and I know that.

All of the wonderful Archive Reviewers: Thank you so much for giving me the honor of being accepted into the archives. (And on my first try too!) :)

To the Mods: Yes, you all are a scary bunch, but you're appreciated and I want you to know that. (Now will you leave the Teenage thread alone? :) )And thanks for answering all of my foolish questions!!

And a very big thank you to SmugglerShidakis for doing some of the best coverart I've ever seen. I can't thank you enough for doing it for me.

Last, but certainly not least, I would like to thank my Mom, VaderLVR64, for encouraging me (if not forcing me) to submit this piece. I love you! You're my best friend and I want you to know this. (Even if we do want to lash out each other at times.) But hey, that's want we do. And we haven't killed each other yet, so that's gotta say something. :) Thank you! I love you!

I thank you all immensely. I have a horrible feeling I left someone out, and if I did I am so sorry. I appreciate every single person (and animal) that helped me with this piece. I never would have been accepted (or even submitted it) without you guys! I love you all.


Author: SarkaVrae
Date posted: 3/22/2005 11:20:48 AM
SarkaVrae's Comments:

Congrats on getting in on your first try! I'm glad I could help you a little with the beta work.
This is a great story & I'm proud of you for submitting it! keep up the good work girl! :)

Author: LukesTheMan1000  (signed)
Date posted: 4/8/2005 6:55:03 AM
LukesTheMan1000's Comments:

First try? Wow! Congrats! A nice, powerful piece that bring home how very painful the purges will be.

Author: Terek
Date posted: 4/9/2005 5:00:20 PM
Terek's Comments:

I could be wrong, but doesn't Anakin purge the Temple before he becomes Vader? That's the impression I've gotten, but a lot of people seem to think otherwise...

Author: Pablo
Date posted: 4/10/2005 6:47:16 AM
Pablo's Comments:

I liked it, I can imagine just this thing happening over and over again during the purges.

Author: Shaak Ti
Date posted: 4/10/2005 6:51:36 PM
Shaak Ti's Comments:

I love this story, it needs to be longer though, I wanta know exactly what happens to the Padawan!!!

Author: Darth Ravenous
Date posted: 4/12/2005 6:10:58 PM
Darth Ravenous's Comments:

Very touching and very good.

Author: jedi apprentice
Date posted: 1/18/2006 5:11:38 PM
jedi apprentice's Comments:

a very moving story. you got the feelings of the master and padawan very good. its my favorite so far. if you can write like this now imagine how good you'll be years from now. :) keep writing

Author: Healer_Leona
Date posted: 10/23/2007 2:53:32 PM
Healer_Leona's Comments:

I don't remember this, but what a wonderful fic. I feel so much for the master. His wanting, hoping his padawan to escape but thinking she might not get far.

Author: RebelStrikesBack
Date posted: 1/30/2011 10:17:10 PM
RebelStrikesBack's Comments:

I love it, the ending especially. 'I am one with the Force now, as the sun rises.' It really captured the mood of the story.

Well done!

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