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The Snow-Star (G)


By : Wilhelmina

Archived on: Monday, February 3, 2003

Summary:
This is an old winter legend of Naboo which takes place about 3,000 years pre-TPM. The actions of a young girl lead to a prophecy about three very familiar characters.

In the long-ago times, when Naboo was just past her first blooming, there lived a loving family of a husband, a wife, and their young daughter. They were weavers by trade, and hard workers, but poor.

In the year that the daughter, whose name was Alw?, turned eight, the family moved from their longtime home in the warm lowlands of Naboo to a cooler climate in the northern hill country.

"For where it is cold," said Alw??s father, "there will be more need for our wares."

So they set up house in the hill country. Alw??s father repaired their motorized spinning wheel and loom and tended to making their little home snug and warm. Alw??s mother took wools and linens and cottons, and, with her skilled fingers to guide the loom, turned them into cloaks and shawls and blankets. Every market-day Alw? went into town with a bundle of her mother?s goods on her back. Most days she came home with nearly as many goods as she had brought, and just a bit of bread or a few credits in her pocket, but this was enough to provide simple meals for her family, and they were happy.

The months passed, and the days drew more swiftly to their close. When Alw? made her way home after a day at the market, stars dotted the sky.

One evening as she traveled home from the market with one of her schoolmates, the first snowflakes of winter began to fall.

"What is this?" cried Alw?, who had never seen snow. "Are the stars falling?"

"No," laughed her friend, "It is frozen water, called snow. In the wintertime it falls in place of rain."

"Ah," said Alw?, but privately she thought the snowflakes looked like stars, and would have stayed where she was just to watch them fall, but the wind grew chill and the sky dark, and she had to go home.

"Papa," she asked her father that night after the evening meal, "are the stars made of frozen water?"

Her father laughed heartily at that, and drew her onto his knee.

"No, my child," he said, "What do they teach you in that school of yours? No, the stars are quite the opposite of frozen water; they are made of fire, like the lights you see in a swamp, or in your mother?s neon lamp. They are much bigger than a lamp, though. Bigger than you or me, bigger than this town, bigger even than this planet." And he launched into a merry tale of the dancing of the stars.

Family

Alw? listened intently, for she loved to hear her father?s stories, but privately she thought that perhaps snowflakes were little bits of stars that broke off and froze on their way to Naboo.

The next week, at the end of market-day, it began to snow again. Alw? had sold no wares that day, and traveled slowly and alone. She paused in her walking to look up at the sky and feel the fresh snow kissing her face. It was very pleasant, but she soon found that the snow fell much more thickly than it had the week before. In the time she had been standing there it had already blanketed the ground. So she hurried homeward.

It was slow going, and the snow fell faster and thicker as night clouds covered the sky. Alw? was only halfway home when she was obliged to stop and rest. She could not see more than a few feet in front of the place where she was.

There were no houses nearby, but by good fortune she had stopped at the base of a tall marble statue. It was a likeness of Queen Elsinor? den Tasia, the woman responsible for the colonization of the planet by the Naboo. The Queen held her arms outwards, as though in welcome, or in preparation for an embrace. The folds of her robes, white as the snow, hung down from her arms to her feet and created a little three-sided hollow; into this hollow crept Alw?, bundle and all, and pulled her cloak tight about her to wait out the storm.

Queen

She did not know how long she sat there, huddled in Queen Elsinor??s robes, but when the snow abated and the sky cleared it was still night. She stepped out and made a little curtsey to the statue.

"Thank you, Your Majesty," she said. Then she saw that if the statue were alive it could never have heard her, for its head and face and arms were covered in snow.

"N?, n?, this will never do," said Alw?, and taking a shawl from the pack on her back she carefully brushed every trace of snow from the statue. It was difficult to reach the top parts, but she was resolute, and when she had finished she tied the shawl round the statue?s head as a kerchief. Then she took a blanket from her pack and tied that round the statue?s shoulders as a shawl.

Satisfied with her work, Alw? bid the statue goodnight and ran home, the moon lighting her way.

When she arrived, her parents were most relieved to see her, and smothered her in hugs and kisses. Then her mother asked how the market-day had gone.

"I sold nothing," admitted Alw?, "But I gave a shawl and a blanket to the statue of Queen Elsinor?, to keep off the snow. I will repay you somehow, I promise."

"N?," said her father, "It is a good and a right thing you have done, to honor our ancestress. Knowing the work of our hands has been used for such a purpose is its own reward."

So Alw? went to bed tired but content, and her parents too slept soundly.

The next day, Alw? had to pass the statue on her way to school. As she drew near, she saw that the shawl and the blanket were gone, and she was distressed to think that someone must have taken them.

Then, it seemed out of nowhere, a woman appeared. On her head she wore a kerchief, and round her shoulders a shawl, and as Alw? looked from the face of the woman to the face of the statue she saw they were one and the same. In great wonder she curtseyed to the woman, her face to the ground.

"Do not be afraid, my child," said the woman. "For your kindness I wish to reward you. What is it your heart desires? Riches, wisdom, health and long life for you and your family? Only name it and it is yours."

Alw? considered her words carefully before she spoke.

"O Lady," she said, "I and my family are poor but happy, for we love one another. I do not believe that riches or wisdom or long life could make us happier. Therefore I desire that all the people of Naboo should share the love and happiness of my family."

The woman beamed.

"That is a good and noble request," she said, "And because you have done this, and not asked for blessings for yourself, I will grant your request for your people. Moreover, I will bless you and yours; you will know peace and prosperity, and from your line will come one who will be called the savior of her people ? and her children will be greater than she."

Alw? curtseyed again, and the woman held up one long white hand.

"I will also give you a gift, that all you meet may know you speak the truth when you tell of this day," she said. She extended her hand to Alw?. Resting on her palm was a small faceted stone, white as the snow. When Alw? touched it, it was cold as ice, but within it burned a flame bright as the sun.

"It is a piece of a star," said the woman, "that broke off from its home, and froze in the deeps of space on its way here."

Hand

Alw? accepted the gift silently, for her heart was too full for words. The woman smiled, and vanished. Alw? tucked the stone into her pocket, and hurried to school, full of the wonder of what she had seen and heard.

After that day, Alw? wore the stone close to her heart as a remembrance. It is said she was the kindest, gentlest, most generous soul that ever walked the earth of Naboo. And all the days of Alw??s life, the Naboo knew no sadness beyond what is common to man; indeed, they knew most uncommon happiness.




Original cover by Cosmic. Illustrations by Wilhelmina. HTML formatting copyright 2003 TheForce.Net LLC.


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Author: Wilhelmina  (signed)
Date posted: 2/3/2003 9:15:55 PM
Wilhelmina's Comments:

Hello! I'm very honored to be archived among such good company. Several thank you's are in order: First, to Sache8, for prompting me to write a Naboo story in the first place; second, to my lovely betas, bobill and NaboosPrincess; third, to everyone who read and responded to this story on the boards and made me think that maybe it was worth archiving. :-)

Author: obaona  (signed)
Date posted: 2/3/2003 9:39:46 PM
obaona's Comments:

Wow!

I must admit, this is a truly original idea, and certainly not one I've seen in SW fanfiction. Kudos to the author!

Moreoever, this story was well-written - and reminds me strongly of a beautiful fairytale. It also makes me wonder what will happen to Naboo, after Anakin's turn and the rise of the Empire. Will it remain happy, as promised here? I certainly hope so.

Thank you for sharing that lovely tale. :)

Author: Jeff 42  (signed)
Date posted: 2/3/2003 10:15:47 PM
Jeff 42's Comments:

This was a very enjoyable little read, and the writing style really did make it feel like an old legend. However, the connection to Star Wars seemed tangential at best. Still a good story.

Author: Naboos_Princess  (signed)
Date posted: 2/4/2003 5:25:22 AM
Naboos_Princess's Comments:

This is a beautiful story, and a very original idea. I especially liked the character names; they are very creative while still retaining the traditions of Naboo. Congrats on having this archived. You should be proud. :)

Author: Jedi_StarDust  (signed)
Date posted: 2/4/2003 9:08:38 AM
Jedi_StarDust's Comments:

Wow, what a lovely story you have here. You have an excellent hand for creating legends, and as I sat here reading "The Snow-Star" I could easily see how beautiful your writing style is. It really felt as if I was reading another one of those fairytales I loved as a child - reawakening a bit of nostalgia on my part hehe - and as I followed Alwé's journey through her simple village life, it seemed as if I was truly walking through the snowy atmosphere of Naboo. Quite different from the usual Star Wars story, but most certainly as good. =)

Author: crystalrain
Date posted: 2/4/2003 11:11:31 AM
crystalrain's Comments:

This is a beautiful story. It reminds me of the innocence of childhood and how when a child sees something beautiful it just makes them happy and they don't let anything else spoil that happiness (oh dear I'm getting all nostalgic). Its fits nicely in the star wars universe and it's very original. Well done.

Author: crystalrain
Date posted: 2/4/2003 11:11:37 AM
crystalrain's Comments:

This is a beautiful story. It reminds me of the innocence of childhood and how when a child sees something beautiful it just makes them happy and they don't let anything else spoil that happiness (oh dear I'm getting all nostalgic). Its fits nicely in the star wars universe and it's very original. Well done.

Author: Amidala_Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 2/4/2003 1:25:50 PM
Amidala_Skywalker's Comments:

Wonderful work!

How original and different! Reading this was very refreshing, Mina. As others have said, it was as if this came from a fairytale book.

Congratulations on getting it archived!

Author: DarthBrooks
Date posted: 2/4/2003 3:26:33 PM
DarthBrooks's Comments:

Nice story, by the way. If it had pictures, it would make a great bedtime storybook.

NOTE: Let's keep the comments just about the stories, shall we?

Author: Viari Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 2/4/2003 5:11:27 PM
Viari Skywalker's Comments:

Mina! Congrats on getting this archived! This was a wonderful Star Wars legend. I can't believe no one has spotted the connection to the GFFA that we all know and love! (Besides that the setting is on Naboo.) The prophecy Elsinoré gave Alwé was very well done, a lovely connection to the movies. Anakin has the Chosen One prophecy, and it seems only fitting that Padmé, Luke, and Leia should have a prophecy as well. Readers, keep in mind that this story is 3000 years before the movies, therefore the older feel to the writing is more suitable. Star Wars is a space fantasy, a fairytale of sorts, and this story is fitting for such a saga. Mina, I do hope you continue submitting to these Archives. You are a wonderful writer, and I love your stories!

~Vi~

Author: Bobilll
Date posted: 2/4/2003 5:15:51 PM
Bobilll's Comments:

Hey, it's up! Congrats! Everyone already said basically how it was so much like a real fairy tail, so I won't waste space saying that. Just know it's great, and congrats!

Author: JediPug1  (signed)
Date posted: 2/4/2003 6:46:39 PM
JediPug1's Comments:

I really enjoyed your story very much! It reminded of the old fairy tales and legends I used to love to read as a child. Nice job!

Author: Mcily Nochi  (signed)
Date posted: 2/4/2003 8:01:38 PM
Mcily Nochi's Comments:

Wilhelmina, this is lovely! The style has a beautiful lilting quality that sounds like an old legend, and the content reminds me of Russian folk legends, which have always fascinated me.

Good job!

Author: Greenleaf from Lake Retreat
Date posted: 2/5/2003 1:14:58 AM
Greenleaf from Lake Retreat's Comments:

Thanks, Whilhelmina, a very nice and sweet story. I like it even more, because here in the Lake Retreat (Lake Como, I live here) yesterday it was snowing, and because this area is famous in the world for silk-weaving and lace-making (I'm a lacemaker myself). May the Force be with you

Author: boushh2187  (signed)
Date posted: 2/5/2003 11:22:37 AM
boushh2187's Comments:

Great little story! You captured the fairy tale aspect of it so well. Such a good read. Thank you. :)

And Cosmic did a great job with the cover! But you know I like your work already. ;)

Author: Bria  (signed)
Date posted: 2/6/2003 10:14:56 AM
Bria's Comments:

Ah, that was sweet and original. Good job. I really enjoyed this. :)

Author: Empire_Rules_All  (signed)
Date posted: 2/6/2003 2:21:24 PM
Empire_Rules_All's Comments:

I liked thise story because of the biblical background to it, it was almost exactly like when Solomon asked for wisdom from God when He visited him in the night, and God gave him wisdom, but also everything else that men desire.
it was a very good story!

Author: Destiny
Date posted: 2/10/2003 12:29:39 PM
Destiny's Comments:

You stole my thought, Empire! :p That's just what I was going to say, that this story was reminiscent of the Biblical account of Solomon. I, too, enjoyed the fairytale aspect of this story. "The Snow-Star" was truly wonderful! :p

Author: Master Berry
Date posted: 2/17/2003 5:47:18 PM
Master Berry's Comments:

This is a wonderfully written piece of work. It's very original, as was said before. Congrats!

Author: Princess Beccerz  (signed)
Date posted: 2/19/2003 8:26:23 AM
Princess Beccerz's Comments:

Hey, Mina! Wonderful fic, you should be proud! I'm working on a fic right now, would you be willing to read it? contact me! Once again, great fic!

~Beccerz~

Author: Kaitu
Date posted: 2/19/2003 8:56:33 AM
Kaitu's Comments:

A beautiful tale, nicely complimenting the wonders of Naboo we see in the Episode I and II. It touches the Heart of the goodness and unselfishness of a child. "A child shall lead them." We could use a few more stories like this - something wonderful to pass on. Well done!

Author: Jedisister
Date posted: 2/19/2003 5:25:23 PM
Jedisister's Comments:

Very Cool little piece. It was an enjoyable read.

Author: Princess1
Date posted: 2/19/2003 6:01:14 PM
Princess1's Comments:

That was beautiful, it made me think of a fairy tale, it fits perfect in Naboo, and its a wonderful thought to think that Luke, Leia and Padme were prophesyed(sp?) sort of comforting, in a way. Beautiful. I love legends, and this was like a legend of star wars. :) Great job.

Author: Bimo  (signed)
Date posted: 2/21/2003 5:02:10 AM
Bimo's Comments:

What a wonderful, well-written story. Sweet and heart-warming despite its wintery setting ;-)

Author: Sreya
Date posted: 2/21/2003 11:15:43 PM
Sreya's Comments:

Such a beautiful fairy tale! I love the style of it, and you've woven it so well. I'm very impressed.

Author: Ani's girl  (signed)
Date posted: 3/1/2003 7:46:28 PM
Ani's girl's Comments:

I loved the way Alwe, was so kind.
The kindness of Alwe sheltering the statue with the blankets, is beautiful. I also loved the fact that she was selfless. However, when the "Queen" gave her the necklace was the most beautiful part. "It is a piece of a star, that broke off from its home, and froze in the deeps of space on its way here."

Absolutely beautiful!!!

Author: THeMPIRE  (signed)
Date posted: 7/21/2003 7:49:17 PM
THeMPIRE's Comments:

This Fan Fic was truely unique in every since of the word. It was a delightful tale that was warm, and exciting. It was so like a tale past down for centuries. Great Job!

Author: Endurwen_Kenobi  (signed)
Date posted: 7/1/2004 5:51:26 PM
Endurwen_Kenobi's Comments:

Well done! I loved it.

Author: MissMilton  (signed)
Date posted: 10/5/2004 8:28:11 AM
MissMilton's Comments:

Though I have been a fan of the SW saga for a long time, I have only just now started reading fanfic in this universe. This is the first story I have read, and I find it very original and refreshing. I think it is a wonderful fairy-tale, capturing the genre's style very accurately, and also fitting credibly into the SW universe. It reads like an actual legend of Naboo, both in terms of the mythological feel of SW and the references to the future events involving Padme, Leia and Luke. Very enjoyable.

Author: JediJarrett
Date posted: 10/25/2004 8:35:41 PM
JediJarrett's Comments:

This is a very good and very clever story. I like how it starts off with a girl communicating to her parents that which she does not understand, in search of a response. To be honest with you, I must say that of all that I have read, I don’t think that I have read a story relating to star wars, or a piece of star wars fan fiction that is as unique as this. Honestly, this is very creative, and unique story that I feel is worthy of much praise from readers on this website. I really like the fact that it takes place so very long before what we know star wars to be. This is one of my favorite aspects of this piece of work. We have adapted ourselves to an image of Star Wars, and this varies from the image. I really enjoy the fact that this is a different story than average. This is very clever. It reminds me of the big bang theory almost, only star wars pathology is significantly more important that real life pathology. I also really enjoy the images that you have added to your story. They definitely are a plus. They add to the story, and not only are illustrated well, but go along well with the story. I have a few questions for you. Do you prefer the new star wars movies, the lower episodes, or the older star wars movies, the higher episodes? Which of all of the trilogy movies is your favorite?

Author: Yoda_is_the_master  (signed)
Date posted: 2/22/2007 12:10:50 AM
Yoda_is_the_master's Comments:

Wow. I like your style of writing, its really suited to this sory, I loved the pictures as well!


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