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Gungan to the left

The Betrayal (PG-13)

By : Gina

Archived on: Monday, June 30, 2003

Although his growing relationship with Chancellor Palpatine has been causing a strain on their marriage, Padmé has something important to share with her husband and is anxiously awaiting Anakin's return from a mission. Her excitement is dampened when she receives tragic news, and an innocent family memento reveals a devastating secret that forces Padmé to make a decision that will change their lives forever.

She didn't know how long she had been there, pacing the balcony outside her sleeping chambers. She only knew the sky was growing much darker.

Her home planet was beginning to settle down for an evening of slumber with only the sound of the waves below or the occasional call of a bird to break the peaceful quiet. It was the time of evening she usually loved. But not tonight.

A slight breeze drifted across her exposed shoulder, sending a chill through her. She wasn't even aware her silken robe had fallen, and she pulled it more tightly across her body, trying to find warmth.

"Ani, where are you?" she whispered to the emptiness around her.

It was a question Padm? had been asking more and more often lately. The first few months of her marriage to Anakin had been so intense and so passionate: stolen moments at the lake retreat where she now stood or evenings together disguised as innocent social meetings between old friends when their separate duties called them both to Coruscant. When they were together, it was as if nothing or no one else existed. For most people, this sort of constant sneaking around would have been too much to bear, but to a Senator who had spent her life playing by, as well as making, the rules, the deception was exhilarating, almost empowering.

Lately, however, things had started to change between them.

Her time with Anakin had become less frequent since Chancellor Palpatine had taken her husband under his wing, requesting him for highly sensitive missions, molding his career. Anakin was often gone for long periods of time, and he never offered details of his whereabouts or what he was doing.

This new relationship between the Chancellor and her husband made Padm? uneasy. The longer Palpatine held the reins of the Galactic Senate, the more power he seemed to crave, and Padm? was finding it more and more difficult to trust the Chancellor. She knew it was a sentiment shared by many others.

When they were able to find time together, Anakin seemed ...different. He was often distant and argumentative. When Padm? discussed goings-on in the Senate, Anakin never failed to criticize the efforts of those trying desperately to hold the Republic together. He constantly spoke of Palpatine and how he had plans that could end the fighting with the Separatists and form an even better, stronger Republic. However, he never answered Padm?'s questions about what these plans entailed.

"He thinks my talents are being wasted by the Jedi Council. As a matter of fact, he doesn't believe the Jedi are even practical now that we have the clone army. He has such powerful insights as to how the Republic could truly function under the right leadership, and he thinks I could be part of that leadership, Padm?."

She had heard this refrain from Anakin many times, during meals together or as they walked along the shores of the water. These excited revelations from her husband always frightened her, and at first, Padm? had tried to reason with him, begged him to understand why the Chancellor would want to poison Anakin against the Jedi Order, and in fact, the Republic. While she pleaded with him, he would stare at her with empty eyes. Sometimes he would storm out of the room. Other times, he would offer a mumbled excuse about a new mission, and leave for weeks at a time, ignoring any communications from her.

No, Anakin did not take kindly to criticism of his new mentor. It was a lesson she had finally learned. Now, whenever Anakin spoke of Palpatine, she would respond only with a half-hearted smile, not wanting to anger him or ruin what little time they had together.

In the last remaining light, Padm? leaned against the balcony railing. She smiled for a moment as she watched a colorful Manaw bird flying low over the water in search of an evening meal, but the smile faded as her mind drifted back to the reason for her worry on this particular evening.

She had been anxiously awaiting Anakin's return from his latest mission on behalf of the Chancellor. He was due to arrive at any moment, and she had something important to share with him. Her stomach was fluttering, but whether from the life inside of her or from her nervousness at her husband's possible reaction, she did not know.

Padm? hummed softly to herself as she walked to her closet and chose a silken deep blue nightgown, his favorite, and slipped its soft folds over her body. She was just putting on the matching robe when she heard the shrill call of the holovid. She smiled to herself as she rushed to the main living quarters. It had to be Anakin. To her surprise, it was not her husband, but rather Obi-Wan Kenobi's image she saw before her. She self-consciously clutched her robe around her revealing attire as she acknowledged his communication.

Rami was dead. A slave discovered him lying in an alley in Mos Espa. There was no doubt he had been murdered. His larynx was crushed, as if he had been strangled, but there were no marks on his throat, or anywhere else on his body, for that matter.

As Obi-Wan relayed this information to her, Padm? sank slowly into a chair near the holovid. A murdered Jedi was nothing new, especially now during the escalating conflicts with the Separatists, but Rami had been one of Anakin's closest friends.

Anakin often told her how Rami would try to comfort him during his first days at the Jedi Temple, when the pain of being away from his mother was almost too much to bear. They had grown up together, almost like brothers. On more than one occasion, Anakin had entertained Padm? by recounting humorous stories of their exploits.

Unfortunately, the friends had suffered a falling out recently. Anakin did not reveal all the details of their confrontation, but from what he had shared with her, it was apparent to Padm? that Rami shared her concerns about Anakin's growing relationship with the Chancellor and the effect it was having on him.

Padm? was heartbroken. How was she going to break this news to Anakin? She knew guilt because of their rift would make this news even harder for Anakin to accept. Then a new fear crept into Padm?. Anakin had felt guilt over his mother's death, and she knew what that guilt had led him to do.

"...obviously murdered by someone with a mastery of the Force, but the other mystery is, no one knows why he was on Tatooine." She looked up as Obi-Wan's voice broke into her thoughts. Then it occurred to her, why was Obi-Wan telling this to her.

As though he was reading her mind, Obi-Wan continued. "I'm concerned about Anakin, Senator. It's a dangerous time for the Jedi. I know he is on a mission for the Chancellor, but I want him to return to the Temple as soon as possible." He hesitated before continuing, "I must be completely honest with you, Senator. There are those who believe Palpatine is not to be trusted, and Anakin's long absences and his continuing favor with the Chancellor are causing certain... murmurings within the Council."

"I understand your concerns, Master Kenobi, but I have no knowledge of Anakin's whereabouts. I haven't spoken with him since my last visit to Coruscant." She stared at the holovid, struggling to show as little emotion as possible.

The image of Obi-Wan stared back at her, disbelief and disappointment evident on his face. "Padm?..." he pleaded softly.

It was as if a lightsaber had pierced her heart.

He knew.

How? They had been so careful. Her fears for Anakin and the strain of everything they had been hiding crashed in on her, but she still could not bring herself to betray her husband. "I'm afraid I can be of no help to you, Obi-Wan." Her voice was barely more than a whisper.

Obi-Wan sighed. He begged her to contact him if she received any communication from Anakin. His image disappeared. Padm?'s mind raced as she contemplated Obi-Wan's words. How long had he known of their marriage? Had he revealed their deception to the Jedi Council? Why were they so anxious to talk to Anakin?

She sat before the darkened holovid, trying to make sense of what was happening.

After a while, she rose and walked out onto the balcony.

The water gently lapped at the shore below as Padm?'s mind returned to the present. She absentmindedly laid a protective hand across her middle. As shaken as Padm? was by Rami's death, something else was nagging at the corners of her mind. Something she had been too afraid to admit to herself. Anakin was so loyal to the Chancellor, and she knew the wrath of his anger could be...

Before Padm? could finish her thought, she heard the hiss of a door. She turned and saw Anakin entering the main chamber. She ran to him and embraced him tightly. As Padm? inhaled his scent, she felt so safe, so peaceful. How could I ever have doubted him? He will always be my Ani.

"Wow. Now that's what I call a welcome," Anakin teased as he lifted her chin and softly kissed her lips. Then he hugged her tightly, rubbing his arms tenderly up and down her back. They stood that way for several minutes until he playfully kissed her forehead and then broke the embrace.

"As tempting as you are, Senator, we have several days together, and right now, I'm starving. Do we have anything good to eat?" he asked as he walked toward the kitchen and began rummaging through compartments.

Padm? wanted desperately to tell Anakin everything that had happened. He needed to know about his friend's death and that Obi-Wan knew the truth about their relationship, and she longed to tell Anakin about his baby, but his face looked so tired, so weary.

She decided her revelations could wait a little while longer.

Padm? picked up the traveling case Anakin had left just inside the door. She carried it to the sleeping chamber where she placed it on the bed and began to unpack Anakin's things.

She was reaching into the case to remove another shirt when her fingers brushed against something hard. Curious, she pulled out the object. It was a holograph in a handcrafted frame. In the holograph was Shmi Skywalker, dressed in a simple but beautiful dress and clutching a small bunch of flowers. Standing by her side was Cliegg Lars. This was obviously their wedding day.

"She was so beautiful, wasn't she?"

Startled, Padm? turned to find Anakin leaning in the doorway. She had been so engrossed in the holograph, she hadn't heard him approach.

"Yes, she was, and she looks so happy, Anakin," Padm? replied as Anakin walked over to join her.

As he stood behind his wife, Anakin encircled her small frame with his arms. "Cliegg gave it to me. When my mission was over, I went to see him and visit my mother's grave. We talked for quite awhile, then he gave me this, I guess sort of as a way to remember my mother in happier times."

Anakin stroked Padm?'s side as they stared at the couple in the holograph. Although Padm? knew how much this gift meant to her husband, she could sense the renewed hurt and sense of loss it was causing in him.

After a few moments, Padm? turned her head and smiled up at him, wanting him to know that she understood his pain.

Anakin returned her smile with a whispered "I know."

He gave her shoulders a quick squeeze as his lips gently brushed her cheek. Then, he moved to finish the unpacking Padm? had started.

Padm? watched his strong back as he worked. She was thinking about the best place to display this precious family treasure when she suddenly felt her body grow cold as she was overcome by realization.

"You were on Tatooine?" she asked slowly.

"Yes, Padm?. I just told you that," he laughed softly as he pulled more clothing from the case.

Tears started to form in Padm?'s eyes as the pieces began to fall into place: his odd behavior, the mysterious missions for Palpatine, his fight with Rami. Obi-Wan's earlier words echoed in her mind... obviously murdered by someone with a mastery of the Force.

It couldn't be true, but in her heart she knew better. As she stared at the tall figure of her husband, Padm? realized the man she loved more than life itself was now a stranger to her.

"Anakin," she began, the tremble in her voice betraying her fear. "I received a communication from Obi-Wan earlier this evening. Rami is dead. He was murdered, Anakin," Padm? hesitated, but she knew there was no turning back, "by a Jedi."

Anakin gave the slightest start before continuing his task.

"Why, Anakin?" Her voice now sounded surprisingly calm to her own ears.

He stopped working and slowly stood up straight, but Anakin would not turn from the bed to look at her. "Padm?, do not dare to speak to me of things you cannot understand." His voice was hard, threatening.

Despite his warning, Padm? continued.

"He followed you to Tatooine, didn't he? Why? What did he know, Anakin?"

When Anakin remained silent, she pleaded with him for a reason, some way to understand. "Why won't you say something, anything?"

Still, she received no reply.

Padm? still clutched the holograph in her hands, and she stared sadly down at the woman who had been the universe to her husband. Her delicate fingers gently traced Shmi's face. It was weathered with lines from years of work on a harsh planet, but her eyes still held a sparkle. The same sparkle Padm? remembered seeing when Anakin first brought she and Qui-Gon to his home all those years ago. She had loved her son so much. Yes, she was truly beautiful.

When Padm? finally spoke, it was in a quiet voice.

"Anakin, she gave up everything for you. She gave up watching you grow because she wanted you to have a future. She had such hopes for you." Padm? sensed his anger and saw his body tense, his good hand clenching into a fist, but still she continued.

"She knew you were destined for more than the life of a slave, Ani. Can't you see it? Everyone you've ever cared about, everything you've always believed in and fought for- you've turned your back on all of it. He's controlling you, Anakin. You're not Watto's slave anymore, but now you're his slave." She could see Anakin's body heave with every breath as he struggled to control his anger.

Padm?, now sobbing openly, glanced again at the smiling face in her hands. "I'm glad she's dead, Ani. At least she never had to see this, see you. If she were alive, knowing what you have become would have broken not only her body but her spirit." Padm? couldn't believe what she had just uttered.

She felt the blow before she even saw him move.

The impact of his anger had thrown her to the ground. Her head throbbed with pain. She struggled against the blackness that was threatening to overtake her. She cowered as she saw him move to loom over her.

"Never. Speak. Of. Her. Again." His words were punctuated by his fury.

She had never seen his eyes look so cold, so dead. He moved to strike her again. Padm? cried out as she covered her face in fear, but the blow never came. Instead she felt a rush of air as he disappeared.

Even now, hours later, Padm? was still weeping as she laid in bed, staring out the open balcony doors at the water, illuminated now only by the light from Naboo's small twin moons.

She blamed herself for what Anakin had become.

She knew about Anakin's protectiveness of Palpatine and the destructive power of her husband's anger, but she had done nothing. She had refused to believe that Anakin would ever betray the Republic or a friend. She never believed he would betray her.

Now she was forced to accept what her husband had become.

As she contemplated these thoughts, Padm?'s grief began to give way to fear.

The baby.

Ever since she had found out she was expecting Anakin's child, Padm? had dreamed of nothing but becoming a family. She saw herself singing lullabies as she rocked her daughter to sleep. Or perhaps it would be a boy, a son with whom Anakin could play and roughhouse, a boy with his father's eyes and roguish smile. These images always filled Padm? with such happiness. She longed for a life like her sister, Sola. Now, she knew this could never be.

Anakin's child would surely be Force sensitive. What if Palpatine discovered his prot?g? would soon be a father.

She had not yet told Anakin of the baby.

Padm? vowed to herself that she would not allow her child's fate to follow the same path as its father.

The door hissed open, and Padm? quickly stifled her cries and closed her eyes, pretending to be asleep.

"Padm?? Pad?" he whispered softly as he approached the bed.

Oh, Force, please help me, she begged as she struggled to shield her mind from him.

Finally, when he received no answer, Anakin believed her to be asleep. Padm? heard rustling sounds behind her as he began to undress. Then he climbed into the bed beside her and began to gently stroke her hair. After awhile, Padm? could feel trembling beside her. Anakin was crying.

His voice choked as he whispered to her. "Padm?, I'm so sorry. Please. I never meant to hurt you. I'll do anything you ask. Forgive me, angel."

Padm? felt herself beginning to weaken. She wanted desperately to hold him, for things to be the way they used to be. Maybe it wasn't too late. Maybe she could save him. She started to open her eyes. Then Padm?'s resolve strengthened as she thought of their baby.

No, she had made her decision.

After awhile, Anakin became silent, and his steady breathing assured Padm? that he was in a deep sleep. As quietly as possible, she crept from the room and went to the holovid.

As Anakin awoke the next morning, he reached out for his wife. When his hand met nothing but empty pillows, he opened his eyes in confusion. Perhaps she's just in the refresher, he thought. But when he could hear no other sounds in the rooms around him, he climbed out of bed. It was then he noticed the empty closet. He walked to the dresser and opened the drawers only to find that they too were empty. An animal cry of rage tore from his throat as he threw the drawers across the room.

His fury increased as he began to destroy the contents of the room piece by piece, but it wasn't until he felt the presence of Master Windu and Obi-Wan approaching the retreat that he fully understood the extent of his wife's betrayal.

Defeated, he sank down onto the bed.

Anakin then noticed the holograph, still lying on the floor where it had fallen during his struggle with Padm? the previous evening. He picked it up and placed it on the small bedside table next to a smaller holograph of Padm?.

During his life, Anakin had truly loved only two women, and now, both were gone.

How could you do this to me, Padm?? How could you do this to us? You are part of me, and I won't let you walk away from me.

Anakin could now hear faint voices. His unexpected guests were growing nearer.

There was nothing left for him now.

Don't you understand that you belong to me? You cannot hide from me, Padm?. I will find you.

Anakin reached for his lightsaber as he walked slowly to open the door to face the waiting Jedi.

As he passed through the doorway, he left all that remained of Anakin Skywalker behind him.

The End

Original cover by Lyra Luminara. HTML formatting copyright 2003 TheForce.Net LLC.

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Author: jedi_michele
Date posted: 6/30/2003 3:36:18 PM
jedi_michele's Comments:

i cannot truly tell you how wonderful this story is. You wrote this so very well and the end part was truly chilling. i could totally picture such a scene happening, i truly could. and when he went out there that would probably be the time where mace windu was killed and obi wan escaped or something. you have truly done a remarkable job on such a piece as this. please keep writing more stories, i look for to seeing them! MTFBWY ~always

Author: Erik
Date posted: 6/30/2003 9:10:57 PM
Erik's Comments:

I thought this was a greatfan fic
keep them coming I really enjoyed this.

Author: THeMPIRE  (signed)
Date posted: 6/30/2003 9:59:46 PM
THeMPIRE's Comments:

I think that this story was the most realistic portrayal of what will happen in Episode 3. I mean, most episode three storis talk about Anakin and Padme wanting a family, but i Don't think that was ever what Anakin wanted, it was Padme's dream. I really think you did a good job of showing how Anakin became obusive, and I doubt that he will be in episode three. If not physicaly, then emotionaly for sure.

Great Job.

Author: Kyp Karrde
Date posted: 7/1/2003 1:36:33 AM
Kyp Karrde's Comments:

Pre-tty good! Top quality, in fact. However, I felt the ending was not up to the standard the rest of the piece set; I don't feel things would have happened so quickly - and besides, after reading Shatterpoint, I'm pretty convinced anything short of some major, tremendous, catastrophic upheaval wouldn't budge Mace Windu. Especially with Obi Wan along with him...(I'm sort of wondering how Episode III will explain all the deaths of these Jedi Masters, Windu, Unduli, Mundi, for instance. I think one large "major tremendous catastrophic upheaval", like by way of a few tons of baradium bomb in the Jedi Temple, will be quite a disappointment. If they have to die, let them aquit themselves honorably...)

Author: NolTel Sete
Date posted: 7/1/2003 9:07:31 AM
NolTel Sete's Comments:

I loved this fic it really got in to the inner mind of padme. It would explain how ani fell furthur all at once.

Author: Nade_Naberrie  (signed)
Date posted: 7/1/2003 4:00:48 PM
Nade_Naberrie's Comments:

WOW. A very powerful piece, indeed. You pinned Padmé's character perfectly.

"His voice choked as he whispered to her. 'Padmé, I'm so sorry. Please. I never meant to hurt you. I'll do anything you ask. Forgive me, angel.'" .... Force, that was just so... ANI. Couldn't help crying there. Beautiful portrayal of him too.

Great job. Please keep writing!

Author: Gina  (signed)
Date posted: 7/2/2003 6:22:14 AM
Gina's Comments:

Thank you everyone for reading the story and for the wonderful comments. I truly appreciate the feedback!

I also wanted to thank my beta readers, Sobifan, Jedi Dajuan, Morwenestela and Monica, for their help.

Thanks also to Lyra Luminara for the beautiful cover art.

Author: MichelleHaydenlova419
Date posted: 7/2/2003 11:47:00 AM
MichelleHaydenlova419's Comments:

it was soooo good but i will like to kno what happened after that in the end!!!!

Author: Leo Nascimento
Date posted: 7/3/2003 11:02:13 AM
Leo Nascimento's Comments:

As Episode III starts to take form our expectations grow even higher. I promised myself not to read nything related to Episode III before its release, but as our expectations are high so is our hope to see a great movie and an unforgettable story. We kind of desperately read the fans stories as if we could chose the best one, the one that fits what we want to see portraid in the silver screen, and hope that perhaps this is the real one. I won't read spoilers about EPIII, but I wish this story was part of it somehow. It is awesome! Leonardo, from Brazil

Author: Gantories
Date posted: 7/3/2003 1:55:07 PM
Gantories's Comments:

One question:

I hope so.

Author: Skyrosser
Date posted: 7/3/2003 5:19:46 PM
Skyrosser's Comments:

A wonderful piece of fan fiction, which got at the heart of the characters - hopefully Ep III will do as well. Your ending left me wanting to read on, so please keep writing!

Author: Count Boobu
Date posted: 7/3/2003 5:50:53 PM
Count Boobu's Comments:

This is one of the better Padme stories I've read in a while. Your take on the character is amazing and we can only wonder if something this good will be seen two years from now when Episode 3 finally premiers.

Author: Dark Armored One
Date posted: 7/3/2003 9:40:43 PM
Dark Armored One's Comments:

Quite possibly one of the best fan fiction short stories we have been given. You are a talented writer. Unlike certain other FF writers, you give the characters emotions that the reader/fan can believe. I actually saw this on the screen.

Some people think that Anakin could never hit Padme, because he loves her too much. My response to that is; have you ever heard of someone hitting their partner under the influence of drugs...well power is a drug, and the dark side of the Force amplifies that need for power in unimanginable ways.

If GL reads this I bet he incorporates some of it in EP III.

Author: sithapprenticeDJ
Date posted: 7/4/2003 2:29:28 PM
sithapprenticeDJ's Comments:

I thought this story was awesome and I think that you're a very talented writer.

Author: krissy
Date posted: 7/5/2003 7:21:57 AM
krissy's Comments:

This was one of the best fan fics that I've ever read ! honerstly, it was so realistic and you the characters emotions are perfect. I hope theres a sequel !

Author: Gina
Date posted: 7/5/2003 4:06:02 PM
Gina's Comments:'s hard to believe that I'm not looking at something out of a book. That was great! Also it was pretty sad. Poor Padme!! You are a great writer, keep the fan fic comming, can't wait to see some more of ur writings!

ps...u stole my name! (lol)

Author: just a guy
Date posted: 7/5/2003 7:09:36 PM
just a guy's Comments:

hey that was rele good. i dont know if thats the way it culd happen, since its a movie and that might b hard 2 show but i liked it. alot. figures a girl wuld write huh? j/k yur a good writer. r u cute? ha nevermind but if yur good at writing fight sequences u shuld write the battle w/ mace and obi. thatd b awsome. keep up the good writing i admire it.

Author: Shadowknight  (signed)
Date posted: 7/6/2003 1:24:42 PM
Shadowknight's Comments:

Wow. That's all I can say. Just wow.

Author: Palpatine
Date posted: 7/6/2003 3:12:31 PM
Palpatine's Comments:

George Lucas himself could not have foreseen a better storyline. It perfectly bridges the gap between episodes II and IV with validity and respect for the other films. Being sent on missions by the Supreme Chancellor is a common occurence. Qui-Gon Jinn and Obi-Wan Kenobi were sent on a mission from the Chancellor in the first film. It also highlights the growing relationship between Anakin Skywalker (soon to be Darth Vader) and Chancellor Palpatine (soon to be the emperor. We understand why Anakin turned to the darkside. We understand why Padme turned her back on her husband and why Darth Vader didn't know about his children. The ending with Anakin having to face off against a squadron of Jedi is absolute perfection. If this is not very similar to the plot of Episode III, it very well should be.

Author: Palpatine
Date posted: 7/6/2003 3:17:27 PM
Palpatine's Comments:


Please seek out George Lucas and make him incorporate this into the official Episode III script before it is too late!

Author: Obi--Wan Kenobi
Date posted: 7/7/2003 2:56:29 AM
Obi--Wan Kenobi's Comments:

i really enjoyed this story that you have created GINA. and i hope that you are creating an end to it couse it got really exciting and i wanted to keep reading but there was nothing to read. SO PLZ MAKE AN ENDING PLZZZZZZ.

p.s: this is one of the best that i have ever read and i love the story line it is absolutley brilliant.

Author: Darth_Salacious
Date posted: 7/7/2003 12:59:25 PM
Darth_Salacious's Comments:

Excellent work, wonderfully written, I'd like to read more from you!

Author: Jedi_Mastre_Kris
Date posted: 7/9/2003 12:37:18 PM
Jedi_Mastre_Kris's Comments:

Excellent. A flowing plot, very good writing style, superb characterization! I only wish that Anakin could've found out *why* Padmé left :(
But all in all-- awesome story!! Quite worthy of the TFN fan fic arvhice ;)


Author: JediPug1  (signed)
Date posted: 7/15/2003 7:20:37 PM
JediPug1's Comments:

Outstanding!! You did a fantastic job with both Anakin and Padme. You also did a great job of creating a very plausible scenario regarding what happens to separate them. I enjoyed this story very much!

Author: I-Love-Anakin
Date posted: 7/23/2003 10:16:29 AM
I-Love-Anakin's Comments:

I LOVED your story! But what happens next?

Author: dedegordon
Date posted: 8/16/2003 6:58:46 AM
dedegordon's Comments:

Excellent. Simply excellent.

Author: vigggosgirl760
Date posted: 8/20/2003 9:47:38 AM
vigggosgirl760's Comments:

this story broke my heart is was truly great.

Author: Senator Skywalker  (signed)
Date posted: 10/6/2003 12:20:32 AM
Senator Skywalker's Comments:

I thought this was a truly beautiful piece. The way you portrayed both Anakin and Padme's views was perfect!! I also enjoyed how you showed some kind of bond between Padme and Obi-Wan...when he uses her first name--very VERY nice touch. I would love to read more...

Author: Kristeh  (signed)
Date posted: 10/22/2003 11:01:30 AM
Kristeh's Comments:

Hi, Gina,

Sorry it's taken me so long to review, but I really love your work. It's a beautiful, but chilling look at how Anakin and Padme's relationship fell apart, and your characterizations were wonderful.


Author: Jaina_and_Jag
Date posted: 11/9/2003 3:13:20 PM
Jaina_and_Jag's Comments:

Wow. That was amazing! I can't think of any other words to describe it adequetly... just amazing!

Author: VaderLVR64
Date posted: 2/25/2004 10:04:47 AM
VaderLVR64's Comments:

This was an amazing story. I can see this really happening in Ep. 3 and that is what made it so sad. Your characters were vivid, your writing clear and let your reader get a real "feel" for the scene, which I loved! Great job!

Author: myk
Date posted: 6/1/2004 8:37:48 PM
myk's Comments:

Oh my gosh, that was so moving.
Just brilliant!

Author: Syd Skywalker
Date posted: 9/10/2004 8:39:13 PM
Syd Skywalker's Comments:

That was an awesome story! I love the way you made the story come to life!

Author: Ani-maniac
Date posted: 11/12/2004 11:57:03 AM
Ani-maniac's Comments:

That was awsome. I felt like I was reading from the Episode III book! Please write a sequel!!!!!!!

Author: Jedi Girl
Date posted: 4/12/2005 5:18:55 AM
Jedi Girl's Comments:


This is a truly amazing piece of work. It, like all good fanfiction, keeps the reader's interest and explores the emotional response of the characters brilliantly. Awesome characterisation of Padme, Anakin and Obi-Wan, even in his brief apperance. I could practically see this on the screen.

"I must be completely honest with you, Senator. There are those who believe Palpatine is not to be trusted, and Anakin's long absences and his continuing favor with the Chancellor are causing certain... murmurings within the Council." <<< That's just SO Obi-Wan. And this:

"Anakin, she gave up everything for you. She gave up watching you grow because she wanted you to have a future. She had such hopes for you."

^ I love that bit. And I love the part when Anakin is crying -- "Padmé, I'm so sorry. Please. I never meant to hurt you. I'll do anything you ask. Forgive me, angel" -- it's just so... so... Anakin. And finally, the last sentence. To be honest, I don't know how to tell you how much I love it. It's just so chilling, and I was just like, "Wow". Overall, the story is amazing. I'll definately be looking out for more fic by you, Gina. Write on,

Jedi Girl

Author: Master Howl
Date posted: 5/8/2006 6:58:45 PM
Master Howl's Comments:

I cannot even describe how much I liked this fic. Really. It caught the essence of Anakin´s true character so well that I dropped jaws in wonder. Padme was great, too. Cool story. Just great.

Author: BloodRaven
Date posted: 5/20/2006 7:43:53 PM
BloodRaven's Comments:

OMG! This tale pleases me to no end!! I'm so glad the girl packed her things and left!!! When he freaked out and threw her back I was all concerned she' would just suck it up and go back to him. Especially after her returned and was doing the whole 'i'm sorry' crap line. *GGGG* Beauty! I really hope you write more about this AU as I'd love to read it!

Author: Padme Skywalker
Date posted: 12/9/2006 2:41:54 PM
Padme Skywalker's Comments:

I really loved your fanfiction it was breath taking. I think that you should write a sequal to "The Betrayal".

Padme Nabberie amidala skywalker

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