Author: myk
Date posted: 5/31/2004 10:31:11 PM
myk's Comments:

Well written, I enjoyed it. Especially the part about Jinn naming Bennie "Obi-Wan" - nice touch. You could also see Bennie's compassion for his friends, and the steely resolve that would be trademark of the galaxies greatest Jedi Knight. Well done.

Author: Elf
Date posted: 6/1/2004 9:08:26 AM
Elf's Comments:

Great!!! I've read most of the FF and this is definitely one of the best...

Author: Barefoot Contessa
Date posted: 6/1/2004 12:51:39 PM
Barefoot Contessa's Comments:

Wow, that was sad! I like how you made it fit into the Jedi Apprentice series. I enjoyed the way you set the story up so as to lead up to the fateful mission to Telos. Also, the whole name thing was very inventive and interesting to read.

Author: Jedi Keladry  (signed)
Date posted: 6/2/2004 7:00:53 AM
Jedi Keladry's Comments:

Hooray! It got archived! Congratulations, Diane, this is a wonderful piece. I enjoyed the part about how Obi-Wan received his name, it's a nice gesture of Qui-Gon's part.

Author: Nemesis  (signed)
Date posted: 6/2/2004 9:46:26 AM
Nemesis's Comments:

Hey, it got archived! Congrats!

It's a brilliant story and deserves its place. :) Very well written Diane - I do love how you showed young Xani as - well, as the boy being very much the father of the man.

Great work!

Nem :D

Author: MutantJediBouer  (signed)
Date posted: 6/2/2004 11:12:09 PM
MutantJediBouer's Comments:

Wow, that was cool. The name thing was inspired, very neat.. I love the way it shows Xanatos' evil side, Qui-Gon's compassionate and Obi-Wan's brave. Nice story, will look for more of your's in days to come..

MutantJediBauer (my nickname is a typo..)
aka. Zax-Ryn Kenobi

Author: MissMarsa
Date posted: 6/6/2004 2:35:11 PM
MissMarsa's Comments:

Wow, that was really great.

Xanatos was creepy! Reading him reminded me of reading Orson Scott Card's Achilles, in the Shadow series.

I was so GLAD when Qui-gon came!

Did Obi-wan really get his name like that? Or did you make it up?

Anyway, it was wonderful! ~M

Author: Shaindl  (signed)
Date posted: 6/7/2004 10:40:23 AM
Shaindl's Comments:

Diane,

This so deserved to be here. So creative, and what a look into Xanatos. Could you have devised anyone creepier? Loved the early connection between Obi-Wan and Qui, but then, you already knew that. ;)

Lovely job, as always!

Shaindl

Author: Sauntaero
Date posted: 6/8/2004 8:01:13 AM
Sauntaero's Comments:

VERY good job! Awesome story, awesome insights. Showed different sides of peole, but maybe could've even gone further!
Very enjoyable!

Author: darththunderbird
Date posted: 6/8/2004 1:18:25 PM
darththunderbird's Comments:

wow that was phenomenal

Author: cjzabriskie
Date posted: 6/8/2004 3:35:10 PM
cjzabriskie's Comments:

I really enjoyed this story. It sets up the relationship between the two for Episode I.

Author: Erela
Date posted: 6/9/2004 1:39:33 PM
Erela's Comments:

That was awesome. I just finished a fic that touches on how Obi-Wan got the name Ben, but I'd never thought of it being the other way around. Very well written. Very well done.
-Erela

Author: Reihla
Date posted: 6/13/2004 10:39:27 AM
Reihla's Comments:

I've loved this story since the first time I read it on the boards! The story itself was touching, and your approach was incredibly inventive & true to the characters. Bennie's fear, Qui-Gon's concern, Xan's overall scariness - all were very well done. I'm so glad to see this archived!

Author: LuvEwan
Date posted: 6/15/2004 10:22:13 AM
LuvEwan's Comments:

Congratulations on being archived, Diane. Your stories are among the very best around and deserve to be recognized. A very interesting and original take on the background of the Obi-Wan/Ben thing. Qui-Gon's talk with Obi-Wan was beautiful in that way. Wonderful job!

Author: Waqas Haque
Date posted: 6/20/2004 8:53:13 AM
Waqas Haque's Comments:

This was a REALLY cool Fan-Fic! The part with Qui-Gon Jinn was really emotional. I gave it a perfect 10! Hope there's a sequel besides Star Wars: Jedi Apprentice!

Author: starwarsfan
Date posted: 6/24/2004 8:07:24 PM
starwarsfan's Comments:

Very good strongly reminded me of the Jedi Apprentice series which I really love. Very good accurate portrayal of all characters. It was very appropriate how it tied in with the Telos mission.
Hope to read more like it!

Author: dianethx
Date posted: 6/26/2004 9:03:27 AM
dianethx's Comments:

Author here. I just want to thank everyone for their comments. I'm thrilled that you find this an enjoyable read.

I wrote this story for a couple of reasons. The name explanation was a big factor. People always think that Ben came second but I thought it would be a good twist to have it be his original name and then take on Obi-Wan because 'Ben' had been tainted somehow. The other reason is that I wanted to look more closely at Xanatos and the relationship he had with Qui-Gon Jinn. I'm very happy that both came across so well for my readers. Thank you all very much.

Author: Endurwen_Kenobi  (signed)
Date posted: 7/1/2004 5:28:07 PM
Endurwen_Kenobi's Comments:

That was good! A bit sad but at the same time I liked how Qui-Gon gave Obi-Wan his name. I couldn't help thinking of it like the Jedi Master was naming his newborn child.

Author: durhelediel
Date posted: 7/6/2004 2:51:41 PM
durhelediel's Comments:

As usual with your writing it was just simply AWESOME! Very original (and originality goes a long way with me). Your characters are excellently portrayed, the scene is well established, the emotion just leaps at you. Very well done. Yes, this did indeed deserve to be archived. Hope I can write as well as you as I develop myself as a fanfic author. Very well done.

Author: Chelsea
Date posted: 7/19/2004 3:23:06 AM
Chelsea's Comments:

Obi-Wan is so cute in this fic that i coulden't put it down. In 4 words: I just love it.

Keep up the good work!:))

Author: Kelly M.
Date posted: 8/27/2004 6:35:37 PM
Kelly M.'s Comments:

Hi!

That was a very good story! I liked how you wrote Qui-Gon's and Obi-Wan's relationship. I also like how Qui-Gon named him Obi-Wan.

Great story :)

~* Kelly

Author: Diane Kovalcin
Date posted: 9/12/2004 3:13:38 PM
Diane Kovalcin's Comments:

I want to apologize to all those whom I have not written back. Usually, I email all the people who were kind enough to leave comments but, unfortunately, right when this was archived, I had some very bad real life problems. Thanks so much for understanding.

Here are my replies to those who have not already received an email.

Shaindl – you are absolutely wonderful to reply here. Thanks so much for sticking by me! I loved writing this and I'm very happy that others seem to like it as well. Thanks.

Sauntaero – Thanks so much for your comments. I really like the dynamics of the trio and am glad you liked it as well. Thanks.

darththunderbird – Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.

cjzabriskie – I wanted to show a bit of how Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan related in their years together. Glad you saw that! Thanks.

Erela – I love ideas on how and why Obi-Wan got the name Ben. This one was a bit different but I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thanks.

Reihla – I'm so glad that you could do the artwork for me! It's awesome and really sets the tone of the story very well. Thanks for all your help!

LuvEwan – You are always so supportive. Thanks for leaving a comment on something you've already read! You're so lovely to do so. Thanks.

Waqas Haque – Thanks so much for giving it a 10! I'm thrilled that you like it so much. As for sequels to this one, sorry. This is a stand alone but it is meant to compliment the Jedi Apprentice series (the original inspiration). Thanks for leaving a comment. I really appreciate it.

starwarsfan – Glad you realized that it was based on the Jedi Apprentice series. I've read them many times and always wondered what would have happened to the three if they had gotten together before Xan fell. Thanks so much for reading.

Endurwen_Kenobi – Thanks. I tried to make it as realistic as possible within the Jedi Apprentice series. I'm just happy that you liked it enough to leave a comment. Thanks.

durhelediel – Thanks so much for posting. I love to do original work, something that is a little off-the-beaten-path and I'm so glad you liked it. I do try to get the characterizations as close as possible to the originals while putting our favorite Jedi in different situations. As for writing well, all I can say is to keep writing. I try every day to improve my skills with experimentation in language, situations and characters. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't (mostly doesn't... LOL). Thanks.

Chelsea – Glad that you loved it. I loved writing it. Thanks.

Kelly M. – Thanks for commenting. I loved the dynamics of the Qui-Gon/Obi-Wan relationship in the Jedi Apprentice series and tried to make it seem appropriate for this story. I, too, enjoyed how Qui-Gon named Ben Obi-Wan. Thanks.

Author: jabba  (signed)
Date posted: 2/5/2005 7:38:54 PM
jabba's Comments:

That was so great i love Bennie he is so cute in this i love the name thing i just have one complaint it wasn't long enough!!

Author: Jade Vader
Date posted: 2/21/2005 10:55:59 AM
Jade Vader's Comments:

That is an AWESOME fic! The interaction between Obi-wan and Qui-gon is so sweet. And the nastier villains are, the better I like them.

Author: JediRogue
Date posted: 6/28/2005 9:31:29 PM
JediRogue's Comments:

Aw, I loved it! 10 stars!

I loved Qui-Gon sensitivity and gentleness. He's my favorite character, you got him exactly right!

I also like how he called Xanatos "Xani"

Author: me_luv_darth_squishy
Date posted: 7/13/2005 6:24:51 PM
me_luv_darth_squishy's Comments:

Wow. That was really good. I liked how you portrayed Obi-Wan as a little boy: he's just too cute to resist.

MTFBWY

Author: gives_you_focus
Date posted: 12/15/2005 11:07:55 AM
gives_you_focus's Comments:

Wow. Xanatos was really creepy. At first, I was outraged at how astonishingly stupid Qui-Gon was about his Padawan. Then I realized he knew something was wrong and he seperated Ben and Xanatos to get the truth. I was grinning and crying at the end of it. Amazing work

Author: Veloz  (signed)
Date posted: 1/1/2006 12:39:09 AM
Veloz's Comments:

This was soo sweet! the interaction between Obi and Qui Gon had me "awwwing" all the way..that Xanatos was a mean one!

Very cool part also about Obi's real name been Ben and how Qui Gon added the Obi Wan.

I loved this one!

Author: SugarBant Jinn  (signed)
Date posted: 2/8/2007 11:03:43 PM
SugarBant Jinn's Comments:

i might just be a wimp, but this one had me in tears! SO sweet! destined to become a favorite!

Author: Wolf Kenobi
Date posted: 11/2/2007 10:24:18 PM
Wolf Kenobi's Comments:

I have read this multiple times and have loved it every time. Your writing it beautiful and never fails to astound. Your characterization of young Obi-Wan was wonderful and so very cute. So brave to protect his friends- definitely Obi! Xanatos was terrifying and extrordinarily creepy. The passages about him savoring Obi-Wan's terror were so... sithy. I loved Qui- Gon's tender concern and realization at the end. He was great with Obi-Wan. I also loved the idea with the name- brave one or one who waits fits very well. excellent!

Author: jarogue
Date posted: 8/23/2008 7:03:43 PM
jarogue's Comments:

{throws up} obi-wan's real name is ben!!!!!!!!!!!??????nononono my mind refuses to except it!
Obi-wan, actually comes from the japanese word oniwaban, meaning 'the one in the garden'.
your story is awesome. But obi-wan not being his real name has shattered my sanity like a dropped saucer. Now i must go commit myself to a mental institution. heeheeheeheehee

Author: Jedi totallyNsane
Date posted: 2/20/2010 9:22:30 PM
Jedi totallyNsane's Comments:

wow, that was really well written and good! GREAT JOB!!! Love Obi-Wan!