Author: elvenjedi1303
Date posted: 4/18/2005 8:24:37 PM
elvenjedi1303's Comments:

Kewl!!!!!!! I'm the first person to comment!!! I really liked it. It was a little confusing at some points but all in all I liked. we need more fan fiction poems.

Author: DarthIshtar  (signed)
Date posted: 4/18/2005 10:51:35 PM
DarthIshtar's Comments:

I loved the dissection into parts that were useless, such as compassion. The visual and rhythmic structure of it was very effective.

Author: obaona  (signed)
Date posted: 4/19/2005 1:27:00 AM
obaona's Comments:

Creepy and horrifying. The way you cut the words and phrases is just amazing, adding so much. The imagery of those parts of Anakin being surgically taken away ... so appropriate, and so horrifying, as it should be, with what Vader is. This certainly doesn't shy away from the monster that Vader must be, must become. I love best how everything connects, from Anakin to his mother to Vader, and even to those last bits of love he can't quite eradicate. Your choice of words is so precise - resigned, motionless. Very moving.

Author: isola-jedi-padawan  (signed)
Date posted: 4/19/2005 9:01:01 AM
isola-jedi-padawan's Comments:

That was soo creepy. It was good the way you got him calling to his Mother at first and then at the end he scorns her. It just shows how much he changes.

Author: me_luv_darth_squishy
Date posted: 4/19/2005 5:47:50 PM
me_luv_darth_squishy's Comments:

k00l...kinda the way i lyk 2 write poetry...freaky and scary and...dark...mama...please save me...

MTFBWY

Author: Dooku_Hater23
Date posted: 4/25/2005 4:17:21 AM
Dooku_Hater23's Comments:

My Favorite Fanfic! I give it a grade of 110% Keep up the good work!

Author: VaderLVR64  (signed)
Date posted: 4/25/2005 3:17:04 PM
VaderLVR64's Comments:

Oh wow! Incredibly powerful! Beautifully written and just amazing!

Author: Darth Ravenous
Date posted: 4/26/2005 5:07:01 PM
Darth Ravenous's Comments:

Very Good! Love the poetic form. Interesting way of puting Anakin losing different feelings. Once again, well done!

Author: Jira
Date posted: 5/10/2005 12:19:59 PM
Jira's Comments:

I loved how you showed how intangible things such as emotions were removed with scapels and other tools used in surgery. My favorite part was about justice and deception--"the truth lies." That part reminded me forcibly about how insidious and deceptive the dark side is. As Dooku said in Dark Rendezvous: "How easily we betray our creatures."
This was thoroughly enjoyable! I hope to read more of your stuff! :)

Author: Heavy Metal Guy
Date posted: 5/10/2005 1:49:06 PM
Heavy Metal Guy's Comments:

Dude, this could be turned into an awesome heavy metal song. Just cut out some verses and..

Author: Jazz_Skywalker
Date posted: 5/10/2005 3:27:28 PM
Jazz_Skywalker's Comments:

Wow! This really reminds me of The Navidson Record in House of Leaves!

Author: Andrea Jade  (signed)
Date posted: 5/11/2005 11:51:41 AM
Andrea Jade's Comments:

Not only the person is fragmented, but the words also. Very insightful and well don.

Author: Haydens_Angel
Date posted: 5/20/2005 6:58:46 PM
Haydens_Angel's Comments:

That was soooo awesome!! I love the way you wrote this story -- In a poem form!! Keep up the great job!! .... And please write more like this one! :):)

Author: Dark Empress
Date posted: 5/22/2005 5:35:13 PM
Dark Empress's Comments:

Very interesting, I like this particular write because it makes Vader/Anakin sound more in conflict with himself. A little more human - if you will. The entire write sounds very realistic.

Author: Maya Leia
Date posted: 5/24/2005 2:20:05 PM
Maya Leia's Comments:

Most provocative...on being and becoming.
Bravo! Brava!

Author: Rhaya
Date posted: 5/31/2005 11:45:04 PM
Rhaya's Comments:

Very creepy, I love it.

Author: anakinskywalker9-19
Date posted: 6/1/2005 8:12:28 AM
anakinskywalker9-19's Comments:

Whoa, this the greatest Anakin story/poem I've ever read keep them up. This one gave the chills.

Author: Padme Girl
Date posted: 6/2/2005 8:04:26 AM
Padme Girl's Comments:

I love this... it almost perfectly refelcts the way the new movie goes (I won't reveal anything i case you haven't seen it) it seems so... characteristic of Anakin.... it's sort of sad. Great job on the poem!

Author: 1-800-jedigirl
Date posted: 2/6/2006 1:39:17 PM
1-800-jedigirl's Comments:

youch sorta like a song crazy with a gothicy ting i love it

Author: darth brioni
Date posted: 2/19/2006 8:36:12 PM
darth brioni's Comments:

this is very interesting- your writings flows, yet is very choppy, which is a cool effect- i am impressed, being a fan fic writer myself- i haven't attempted poetic form, and you seem masterful at it, so well done- one of my favorites is the word 'fragmented' broken up at the very beginning- very clever- keep up the good work :)

Author: wanobi
Date posted: 2/19/2006 8:43:40 PM
wanobi's Comments:

way cool- keep up the fab work!!!

Author: briatharen
Date posted: 7/25/2006 11:55:40 PM
briatharen's Comments:

interesting... was the love hidden in dark crevasses what helped him save luke? very well donne!

Author: Louise  (signed)
Date posted: 2/1/2007 11:44:19 AM
Louise's Comments:

wow can't say much more!

Author: Louise  (signed)
Date posted: 2/1/2007 11:44:50 AM
Louise's Comments:

wow can't say much more!

Author: Kalak Ragnose
Date posted: 10/25/2007 1:43:24 PM
Kalak Ragnose's Comments:

Did you get some of your ideas from the 'Tales of the bounty hunters'. It sort of reminds me of Dengars transformation,

Author: Padme Casperia Skywalker
Date posted: 12/31/2007 8:42:33 AM
Padme Casperia Skywalker's Comments:

Wonderful poem! It really made me think of what he thought while he was in the medical reconstruction. I hope to see more stories like these!

Author: Roby
Date posted: 12/5/2011 3:28:44 PM
Roby's Comments:

Yeah that's what I'm tlankig about baby--nice work!